So far, I am intrigued. Keep this going!

5690204 I definitely will, it's my highest priority.

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5690482 that is... disturbing.

Incoming Ponyville antics...it's gonna be painful.

5690612 Antics? ha... HA!!! I almost feel bad now.

Interesting, I've got to get more of this

5691484 well, hello again. Don't worry, it won't take as long as RaV did, so just keep hoooldin ooon!!!

5691498 Aaaaaaaallllllllllll rrrrrrrrriiiiiiggggghhhhttt

5691509 you are a terrible singer... but then so I! So who cares?!

5691554 Yay

You have my attention.

5691728 well, that's a feat I usually struggle with, regarding anyone really.

I explained, walking over to help Tobis with his kilt.

KILT?! I WANT ONE!

Also, looking good so far! Such foreshadowing! Much wow!

5691810 they actually aren't hard to find. I have one. It's really comfy.

5691828 I should have gotten one during my time in Scotland. An authentic one would be far superior to that "Made in China/USA" BULLSHIT!

5691855 tch, I made mine. I was just saying you can find them.

5691871 Oh. You know, this is probably the first reply train I've been in on this site. I'd like to give you credit to partially inspiring my own story with this one. Just the whole pilot-idea.

5691882 actually, it's my dream to fly. Flight is the ultimate freedom, and I want that more than anything... sudden emotions are sudden...

5691893 Yeah. I'm thinkin' of joining the air force as soon as I'm of age.

5691921 I would have, but I'm no soldier. Besides, I've got this problem with my ankle that would keep me from joining up. I have to walk with a cane over long distances. So yeah.

5691959 Yeah. You have to go through a surprising amount of training to join. I'm not necessarily a soldier either. I'd rather live my war fantasies through Airsoft and video games.

5692124 I prefer not having them.

I hope what ever happens to tobias doesn't cripple/disable him physically and/or mentally

5694126 you'll just have to wait and see

I gotta know! Is it the Six!? Do they torture him!? What happens, man!

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you'll find out next chapter, so just, hold your horses.

We got an ETA on that chapter, BTW OMG?

5716698 Um... Soon? I'm not going to promise you a date, but what I can ppromise is that I am working very hard on it, and thatI will be finished by the end of the month. I've got a lot of projects going, and I'm trying to get into school, so I have a LOT on my plate. Please, be patient, okay?

5716769 Okay...

Instant raspberry to this gunk load.

5717475 what, if I may ask, was wrong with it? I like to know why people dislike my stories.

“I didn’t have any of those. My parents died in a house fire when I was young, and I was never really good at making friends.” He stopped for a moment and gave a deep sigh. “And my job kept me pretty isolated, so I never really bothered trying. In short, save for my love of flying, I don’t have anything tying me back to Earth.”

This is the only part that really bothers me. This story is really well paced while being told in present tense, but whenever you tell backstory it's as if you're trying to sum a novel up in a paragraph. Hell, their first meeting seems like it could've/SHOULD'VE been an entire chapter in and of itself.

Otherwise, no real problems. The grammar and spelling is good-

Yes Tobis, but as I’ve told you, it is the pony was to offer forgiveness instead of condemnation

-ok, a few little niggles, but nothing major. The present pacing is pretty good, and the characters are interesting. Hope to see more.

5717884 He's probably a troll with no taste, you're awesome.

“Tobis…” I started, but trailed off as I saw a tear roll down his cheek. Whatever I was going to say was lost as I trotted forward and nuzzled his cheek, soaking the tear into my coat. I felt his arms close around my neck, and his fingers entwined themselves into my mane. The last light of my charge faded across the horizon, and Luna’s moon came rising on the other side of the tower, casting a beautiful night shadow over the two of us. “Tobis, I’m so glad you came to Equestria.” I whispered to him.

So let me get this straight this guy is giving up meat entirely, when for the past few months he has been eating fish, which (correct me if I'm wrong) has show no sign of intelligence in this world, simply because there was a cow that could talk, and because he felt guilty of eating beef on Earth, from COWS, THAT ARE JUST ANIMALS, OURS ARE JUST ANIMALS, AND WTF DOES CELESTIA FIND SO FUCKING BEAUTIFUL, HE CAN LIVE OFF OF FISH, JUST BECAUSE YOU MEET A TALKING PIG FROM ANOTHER DIMENSION, WHERE EVERYTHING SCREAMS 'FUCK YOU' TO ALL LOGIC, DOES NOT MEAN THAT PIG IS EXACTLY THE SAME AS THE ONES BACK HOME, I AM USING ALL-CAPS TO EMPHASIZE

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And now we see why I stopped working on this. Regardless, thanks for taking the time to read it! You should check out some of my other work. Most of it's better than this.