A misplaced foal is changed beyond recognition at an early age and is sent to the most unlikely of caretakers. And after years of living among those that live and thrive in the seas, she is forcibly 'returned' home.
When she returns, will she bring about the ruin of Equestria...
Or will she bring Equestria to glory beyond what it is now?
A different crossover between My Little Pony and Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio.
I do not own either as Hasbro and Ark Performance/Sanzigen.
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Ok, the bizarre crossover is interesting enough for me to follow this. Hoping to read more to see where this is going.
I was interested at first but the bizarre habit of breaking up sentences threw me. Why is almost every other word like 'this'? There is no reason for it. The main use of the single quotation marks is to enclose quoted material inside quoted material.
So, for instance:
"Well," said Rainbow Dash, "Twilight said she 'won't be there in time'."
Or,
"In Shakespeare's Hamlet, a significant quote is 'To be or not to be, that is the question.'"
When you write a sentence full of words that seem to require emphasis, such as the words you've got in single quotations here, emphasis is actually no longer needed.
For instance,
This sentence could be written like this:
There are a few grammatical errors here, but I digress. When writing a sentence this way, any explicit emphasis in the form of single quotations (such as 'core') are unnecessary, because it is automatically implied that, if the core is not a true core, it is a misnomer. You could choose to use single quotations for 'core' if the rest had no single quotations, but it doesn't give the effect you desired. Instead, it muddles things for the reader.
Try taking all of the single quotations you've used out of your writing, and then read it. It will be much more coherent, without the constant breaks in concentration these frequent single quotations cause. If you can read a piece of your own writing at least three days later, you'll usually find more errors than you saw while writing it. Generally speaking, it's a good way to help screen out junk that might confuse or disrupt the reader.
I hope this may have assisted you in your journey to becoming a better writer.
May your pen never falter, and your ink never run out.
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Thanks for the advice and i will try to fix it all a bit later... But don't stop giving me advice like that! THANKS!
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I'm really glad I helped. If you have any questions or concerns about grammar or how you're writing something, don't hesitate to drop a line! I'm here for you, as are a lot of other writers and readers.
I won't stop giving you advice-- so long as you don't give up on writing. I can tell you have imagination and a lot of potential, and you owe it to yourself to refine your writing habits so that you can get it all out there. <3
I've added you as a friend, mi amigo.
There is not enough Arpeggio of Blue Steel Fan fiction out there and this is very good!
But the Fleet requires MORE!....please?
I would be interested in seeing this story continue. There isn't enough Arpeggio of Blue Steel fanfiction out there.
Ah, my search has finally turned up something. I have finally found a story crossover with Aoki Hagane no Arpeggio, and an excellent one at that. I'll be eagerly watching, reading, and faving this story.