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Amazing as always!
And so the Followers of the Apocalypse was born!
It's a xmas miracle! Gret update :)
"it within myself to scramble up the floor"
Is there a word missing there?
"when I realized that it was the firearm that Scope had dropped when Burst attacked him"
The gun isn't much heavier than light surgical equipment mentioned together with scalpels?
"I could bare the strain"
"I could bear the strain"?
"about acting despite of fear and not"
"about acting despite fear and not" or "about acting in spite of fear and not", depending on what you meant?
"remember that fear exist only in the mind"
"remember that fear exists only in the mind"?
"and making sure he’s attention is on me"
"and making sure his attention is on me"?
"considering he have known about PipBuck’s"
"considering he had known about PipBuck’s"?
"searching for liveable Stable, sweetie"
"searching for liveable Stables, sweetie" or "searching for a liveable Stable, sweetie"?
"there is only a few dozens of them"
"there are only a few dozens of them"?
"And an ‘informant broker’ in Fillydelphia’s contingent"
"And an ‘information broker’ in Fillydelphia’s contingent"?
(Who was that, by the way? Have we not found out yet, or am I just forgetting? If the latter, sorry about that.)
"and you so told me so little"
"and you told me so little"?
"I deducted, smiling."
"I deduced, smiling."?
"I’ve began to believe you aren’t"
"I’ve begun to believe you aren’t"
"in it had began to increase my horn’s"
"in it had begun to increase my horn’s"?
"They can open them to whichever place they chose, as long as they know it’s location"
"They can open them to whichever place they choose, as long as they know its location"?
"but they also can tap into existing Portal Talismans, which from what I heard is easier."
Seems kind of potentially dangerous information to let get out, but then, Angel isn't planning to let Scope get away...
"I’m assuming that the fact the reason why you’re not asking me about Stable Eight’s Security is that you don’t intend to attack my old home?"
Oh, hm... good point. Though it could also be (or have been, it seems, judging by his response), as I was more thinking, that they're confident they can win without such information from her.
"problem with that idea; me"
"problem with that idea: me"?
"or just somepony will knock on them from the Outside"
"or just somepony will knock on it from the Outside"?
"years of them remaining dormand and undisturbed"
"years of them remaining dormant and undisturbed"?
Also, should that "them" be "it", if it's referring to the door?
"who know of Stable’s locations"
"who know of Stables’ locations"?
(Though it depends on the style you're using.)
"coming to hug as much as my muzzle at they"
"coming to hug as much of my muzzle as they"?
"So he laid there, gurgling and bleeding out"
"So he lay there, gurgling and bleeding out"?
"spells while operating two patients at the"
"spells while operating on two patients at the"?
"patient alive while I’d operate the other"
"patient alive while I operated on the other"?
"weren’t for it innate glow"
"weren’t for its innate glow"?
"I added as several shoot towards the punctured"
"I added as several shot towards the punctured"?
"I sew them into the"
"I sewed them into the"?
And I wonder what Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie made of that song. ...Though, did they ever hear Rarity? But, then again, they're made out of Rarity... Hm.
"everything back in its’ place"
"everything back in its place"?
"like watching seamstress instead"
"like watching a seamstress instead"?
(Error spotting quality is dropping somewhat in the second half of the chapter, I'm afraid, as I started speeding up a bit due to the advancing clock and some other things; still enjoying the story and not rushing too much for that, though!)
"bounded past me unto the floor and"
"bounded past me onto the floor and"?
"something strikes a cord in my soul"
"something strikes a chord in my soul"?
"“ It’s like you’re… already looking"
"“It’s like you’re… already looking"?
And done! Another good chapter, and I continue to be interested in seeing where this story will go next. :)
Oh Christmas presents came early!
You really had me worried when Scope started taking out everyone in the party. Super glad Jack survived, Angel needs a combat proficient teammate. Plus I have a bias for griffins.
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Thanks^^
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Thanks^^ Was wondering about posting this a day later so it would come out on Xmas Eve, but meh ;p
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Wow, that is a lot of... and I had 4 people looking over it...
Um... you know, it was a very light gun, 10mm one or so (didn't specify cause Angel doesn't know much about firearms)... so while it is noticable heavier, it is still very light, compared to some other stuff in that room, like a table or terminal- Okay, I might have derped there a little The point was, it was still light enough for Angel to hold it under such conditions.
Nope, you hadn't found out yet. It was only loosely mentioned that Jack and the others got the holotape with location and over-ride password to Stable Eleven from some Steel Ranger Scribe.
Exactly^^
That would depend on this organizations' forces and their ability to marshal them at this location (for which portals would be so happen to be very useful, bummer), but Angel believed Scope to be smart enought to realize that her Stable's Security was quite formidable.
Better question, do ponies in the show even hear the songs or is it just for the audience? Because those few "musical numbers" the background ponies participate in seem a little too random... not to mention the visual effects with changing scenes...
Oh, don't worry about that ^^
Thanks, hope you will enjoy the future chapters^^ Hopefully by this time next year I will finally finish the 1st arc... Anyway, thanks for spotting all those errors, I will correct them soon, wanna enjoy my holiday break a little more (searching for specific lines in such long chapters is a bit of a pain another reason why I prefer them shorter... and if this was supposed to be the shortest one the next one will be fun...)
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Yep^^
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Hm, I was expecting some "outrage" regarding Angel's ability to heal such wound... oh well, not looking gift horse in the mouth I suppose ;p
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" Wow, that is a lot of... and I had 4 people looking over it..."
Ah, sorry. Little things can be good at slipping through...
"Um... you know, it was a very light gun, 10mm one or so (didn't specify cause Angel doesn't know much about firearms)... so while it is noticable heavier, it is still very light, compared to some other stuff in that room, like a table or terminal- Okay, I might have derped there a little The point was, it was still light enough for Angel to hold it under such conditions."
Ah, okay; thanks.
"Nope, you hadn't found out yet. It was only loosely mentioned that Jack and the others got the holotape with location and over-ride password to Stable Eleven from some Steel Ranger Scribe."
And thanks.
"That would depend on this organizations' forces and their ability to marshal them at this location (for which portals would be so happen to be very useful, bummer), but Angel believed Scope to be smart enought to realize that her Stable's Security was quite formidable."
And thanks there as well.
"Better question, do ponies in the show even hear the songs or is it just for the audience? Because those few "musical numbers" the background ponies participate in seem a little too random... not to mention the visual effects with changing scenes..."
Oh, hm, somewhat interesting possibility. Though also interesting to me that I find it interesting.
"Oh, don't worry about that ^^"
Thanks. :)
"Thanks, hope you will enjoy the future chapters^^ Hopefully by this time next year I will finally finish the 1st arc... Anyway, thanks for spotting all those errors"
You're welcome, and you're welcome!
"I will correct them soon, wanna enjoy my holiday break a little more"
Sure; have fun. :)
"searching for specific lines in such long chapters is a bit of a pain"
Aye, it indeed can be.
"another reason why I prefer them shorter... and if this was supposed to be the shortest one the next one will be fun..."
Heh. Good luck. :)
Really nice story so far, i've been enjoying all the plot twists and looking forward for what you keep in reserve next for us in your following chapters! ^_^
I can see these two becoming close friends, despite his apparent annoyance towards her
There's the lure!
I think she's sick and needs a doctor.
ILLUMINATI CONFIRMED!!!
God, I literally cannot believe this.
Doctor doctor gimme the news,
I've got a bad case of reading about a delusional lunatic and need help figuring her out...if that's possible.
Damn… what an end to act one of this story! A lot of other fanfics just goes on and on with their acts, building leaning towers on sturdy foundations that at some point crackle under the weight of their words. But I could see a natural bookend after this chapter as if this was prof written and put into a book. I know that it maybe is a bit much, and a bit late since you have continiued the story, but throwing in a little something between the acts could be really really nice as it feels like we are opening another tome of the adventures of Doctor Angel, the Wasteland healer.
Nitpicks:
"could probably already guess what I intended to do Scope." Feeling as if a "with" is missing from here
"apparently the explosion had threw me against the corridor wall" thrown?
"Scope asked me as run up to stand between him and Apple Core," Missing an I, and don't know if it should be ran.
"Seeing Scope so up close with his patience quickly fading wasn’t helping me focus" Delete
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Thank you for your praise, but... this isn't end to the first arc It is an important point of it though. And trust me, when the arc will end, everybody will know it ;p
Hm, actually, I think in the first one should be "to Scope", not "with", seems better to me. But thanks for pointing this out, as well as the other three^^
I'm so quoting that and hanging it on my wall
Piece by piece, nerve by nerve, thread by thread, never stressed…and that is the art of the flesh!
omygosh, is that a reference to Rarity's "art of the dress" song?
whoa. i didn't ever expect it to turn like that..
I know a more morbid version of that it goes cross my heart hope to die stick a knife in my eye
I had grown rather attached to Jack in the short time we knew him.
So I was rather pleased when I caught on that Angel's spell had literally resurrected him.