Chapter 3: Running a Kingdom
(Twilight)
***
The cratered white orb had been put to rest, but stars still hung in the night's sky. Moments after the moon made its exit, its conductor brushed passed her counterpart. In her passing, Luna lovingly nuzzled her sister. The warden of the night welcomed herself to her sister’s royal bed. The edges of the sheets tucked themselves under the mattress with just an afterthought of her power. Only Luna's head poked above the sheets, lying back against luxurious pillows.
“I can’t do it while you’re watching like that.”
Luna's hooves hooked over the top of the sheets. “But Tia, we often watch you; what does it matter?” Luna asked innocently.
“I just feel... different today.” Maybe that was not the wisest choice of words.
“Art thou still upset?” Luna expressed with slight exasperation. “We know thou dost not like to share thy source of unease, but we are always there for thee.” Luna yawned, wriggling further into comfort.
Twilight glanced back towards the bedchamber, but quickly turned away to hide a blush. She couldn't unsee it. The quivering lower lip, the impossibly wide eyes that seemed to be on the verge of watering.
How could I shut down a face like that? Oh Celestia, this may be the hardest test you have ever given me.
The new princess was still looking upon Luna's night when she spoke. “Luna, I can not tell you what ails me.” Twilight said in her best Celestia impression. The likeness to her teacher, surprising even herself.
Twilight whirled around, realizing she hadn't heard Luna's reply. Fortunately, the Lunar Princess was fast asleep. Twilight sighed with relief. I don’t know if I can get used to being a princess, but I'll do it for Celestia... For Equestria!
Her cheeks reddened as she became painfully aware that she was staring at 'her sister,' while she slept.
Luna's right there, sleeping in my... no, Celestia’s bed.
Luna had insisted her sister dearest, needed company, even though Luna would have been asleep in her own chambers at this hour. Twilight had seen very little of the Princess Luna since her return. She knew even less about what Luna was like. Now, she would be sleeping in the same bed!
It was time for her number one panic avoidance technique. Reading! She removed the towel from her damp, radiant, rainbow mane, and spread the charts and books she needed on the stone balcony railing.
What if I don’t bring the sun up, what will happen? Would there just be eternal twilight? Did the sun and moon always need to be directed by magic? Now that I think about it, Lyra Heartstrings has that crazy theory about worlds with solar and lunar bodies that move by themselves. It is mathematically possible. Maybe I should have listened to her better?
Twilight remembered the theories the mint mare had about bipedal beings that ‘drove’ in metal chariots.
Stop that, you have to focus! You're already falling behind. You don't want to be... tardy!
A terrified expression crossed her face. One that her friends knew all too well, but still made them uneasy.
“NO! It will be fine,” She whispered to herself. That kind of frantic hysteria is what got you here in the first place.
She focused back on the books and scrolls before her. The texts were like nothing Twilight had read before. It’s so… unscientific, illogical, and kind of crazy.
No! These are not qualities I can associate with her.
It's one thing to read about theories of nuclear fusion reactions, but what was it like, to live it?!
With one last glance at her resources, her horn ignited. The point glowed like a small sun of its own, perched on the end of her horn. She had made a brief list to make sure everything went smoothly.
Okay, onto step 3 of 32.
Twilight spread her wings, spanning a third of the balcony; Her eyes, glowing with magic and visions of the cosmos.
At first, it was as though she were watching herself and the sun from above. Soon, she was the sun. The sensation scared her at first. At the same time, it felt... good... no... great! The energy of the solar mass billowed inside her, the power of endless burning flames seething beneath her coat. The same flames that were vital to all life on the planet, were also capable of ending all of it just as easily.
It wasn't an observation of malice. It was simply fact! Had she really shivered, or was it just her conciseness recoiling from the apocalyptic musings? It was hard to tell. Was this magical high a from of clarity or delusion?
The notes suggested this spell took on mental imagery based on the nature and character of the caster. For Twilight Sparkle, the results were similar to a chalkboard. The never ending void of space was her slate. A slate upon which to scribe the orbital mechanics of this world. A torrent of ellipses, and mathematical expressions flowed rapidly around her. The lines were drawn up by dancing chalk lines of stardust.
Hmm. It seems I have attained a form of omni-directional awareness. This would be great for taking notes!
She observed the sun's position in her model. I'll just nudge this along this line here, and...
...It was over. She was left staring over the balcony railing at the city below.
Twilight Sparkle, barely held back a foalish scream of excitement. She lightly bit her lip until the urge was thoroughly strangled. That was amazing. I wonder if that's how Rainbow feels about Sonic Rainbooms? Nopony will notice it was 1.735 minutes late, right?
With the power of the sun no longer within her, the exhaustion of the evening's events bared upon her. She caught herself staring at Luna once again at her bedside. So peaceful, powerful, and beautiful all at the same time.
A post sunrise nap was part of Celstia's normal routine. This she knew from all the times she snuggled with Celestia on this very bed as a filly. Often too excited about some upcoming personal magic lessons to get any real sleep. Instead she would just bask in her mentor's warm embrace and count the feathers on the wings wrapped around her.
Finally, Twilight reluctantly slipped under the covers next to Luna. She faced away from her, but it did little to reduce the awkwardness. I can’t wait to move it again, she thought.
“Finally sleep… at 5:53,” Twilight half whispered half yawned.
She missed the brief peek she received from across the bed.
***
Twilight stirred a little to the sound of voices in the hall, before she forced herself back to sleep. Outside the large chamber doors, many mares and colts in various staff uniforms were gathered in a heated discussion.
“You know what happened last time she didn’t get them,” a colt exclaimed. He bore a fancy accent and white cuffs around the top of his hooves.
“There isn’t anything I can do. Doughnut Joe didn’t tell me about this until twenty minutes ago,” a mare chimed in.
“You have to keep your voice down Golden Chalice,” a second mare added, putting a hoof over the other two mouths. They scowled at her, but stayed quiet.
“You all agree somepony must tell her though, or it will be the ruin of all of us,” she said in a whisper.
The others nodded in agreement.
The stallion stroked his mustache. “Excellent idea! Porcelain Pot, you can tell her and we will stay out here.”
“Silver Platter." Porcelain Pots addressed the stallion with clenched teeth. "That’s not—”
“Thanks a lot for volunteering," Golden Chalice said, cutting off the maid's objection.
The mob of staff ponies pushed the ‘volunteer’ up to the doors.
“Your highness, your highness.” Porcelain Pot’s voice was accompanied by a tapping hoof, slightly muffled by the chamber doors.
“Wha... what,” Twilight groaned, lifting her head from a saliva soaked pillow. Groggily, she looked at the metal alarm clock on the bed stand.
8:00, only two hours and seven minutes of sleep.
The voice outside the door continued. “I don’t know how to tell you this, but something terrible has happened. Would you please let me enter? I must tell you face to face.” She sounded scared and distressed.
Twilight was the princess now, and considered going back to sleep.
Should I let them in? It could be a real emergancy. Twilight rolled in her bed with her eyes barely open.
“I guess… I mean, you may enter!”
There was an odd silence for almost three minutes. Twilight thought she heard somepony cough. The sound echoed in the marble halls beyond the door.
“Um princess, are you going to open the door?” The mare’s voice sounded meek and confused.
“Oh, of course.” I forgot about the magic doors.
The doors swung open with a gold envelope of force, and Twilight found a groveling mess in front of her. She was a unicorn, with a blue grey coat and blue and white mane. The mare had a fine tea set as a cutie mark and wore a simple serving outfit.
“Your... your majesty. Your shipment has been... lost.” The mare covered her head in shame.
“What shipment?” Celestia’s face showed genuine concern. "What valuable resource has been taken? Information, medicine, equipment for the guard?!"
“Your Cloud Cakes, they were st... sto... stolen,” she stuttered. “Please oh please forgive me.” By this point the mare's chin was pressed to the polished floor.
“... What... what?” Twilight’s face contorted. “Oh come on! You interrupted my sleep for this?!”
“You told me you desired Cloud Cakes at 8:00, every morning no matter what. We... I have failed you.”
Porcelain risked a glance upwards to her Princess. Oh no, not that face. I’ll be lucky to just be fired. Porcelain Pot looked back through the doors and noticed a scowl from Silver Platter and the others for almost getting them involved.
“Well, its 8:05 now and I don’t see any cakes.” I just want to sleep.
“Wha... what do you wish to be d-done?” I’m going to be banished or turned to stone or made into pastries myself and consumed by the princess.
“Do you know what I’m going to do?” Twilight said in a raised voice, while she closed the doors.
“Please don’t turn me into cake and eat me! Just fire me. Doughnut Joe didn’t tell me in time...” The pleading continued.
What is wrong with these ponies? What does Doughnut Joe have to do with this?
The quivering mare stopped staring at the floor and looked up at the princess for an answer.
“I, am going, to sleep!” Twilight grabbed a dry pillow and set her head down upon it.
After a few moments, she opened her eyes to see Porcelain Pot still bowed on the ground.
“Are you leaving? I’m going to sleep whether or not you stay.”
The serving mare was beyond confused. She backed all the way up to the door as if expecting a trick. She fumbled at the magically sealing door.
The door isn’t opening, what is she planning? If I become a pastry will I still have a pony mind? Porcelain Pot’s thoughts kept racing.
She started scraping at the doors in panic, until golden magic opened them with a sigh from the bed. As the doors slammed shut, Twilight realized Luna was missing from the disheveled covers.
She must have gone back to her room. Thought Twilight.
“What in the hay is going on around here? What is so important about giving me pastries?” Twilight shrugged. At least I can sleep in peace now. She started snoring almost immediately.
On the other side of the double doors, Porcelain Pot stood, hyperventilating against the enchanted wood.
“Are you okay?” Golden Chalice looked relieved to see her.
“So what did she do to you?” asked Silver Platter.
“She yelled a lot and then... went to sleep.”
***
After being woken up by the royal shoe polisher, crown polisher, room maids, and a few royal messengers, all within five or ten minutes of each other, Twilight ordered the guards to keep everypony away until noon.
Why can’t they have one polisher for the crown and the shoes? Efficiency sure is lacking around here.
Six hours was all she needed. After all, sleeping was a waste of time. Especially when one could just binge on coffee for a few days of proper study!
As if on cue, a knock came at noon. At least this time the studious mare felt relatively rested. A large box of scrolls, around seven by seven hooves, had been left at the door. A note was pinned to the side:
Princess Celestia
I am sorry to present you with this now, but there are many important matters within these pages, along with the usual paperwork. Please send these via a royal courier before 4:00pm.
Department of Royal Affairs
The two guards by the doors grew uncomfortable as the princess stared at the stack of paperwork.
“This is great!” The shriek caused both the pegasus guards to fly up into the ceiling, loosening some chips of marble. Their gold colored helmets prevented any serious damage.
“Could one of you send for some lunch... oh, sorry? I got a little too excited.”
Twilight apologized to the dizzy guards, slipping back through the thick doors with the large crate grasped in telekinesis.
Stonewall headed off to the kitchen, his head still sore.
Why did you have to do so well on your Royal Guard exams? It had to be better than perimeter post, right? ‘Just stand in front of the big doors and be intimidating,’ they said. It's easy bits, they said!
The stallion most certainly did not stomp down the halls. No, he was marching with vigor.
***
“Okay, time to learn about Equestrian affairs.” The alicorn gave a squee of excitement before levitating the first page to Celestia’s work desk.
I hope what I’ve read will help. How hard can politics be? All I have to do is pick what is best for Equestria.
“For Celestia, for Equestria!” Twlight quietly declared with a hoof pump.
As she breezed through all the paperwork, she couldn't help but feel it was written to influence the reader into a decision. She felt confident her final checks and signatures were made out of her own reasoning.
The tax system is fascinating, although it could use some tweaks.
A few scrolls stuck out from the rest, not just because they were in their own special cases. Twilight recited the basics of what she deemed noteworthy.
“ACT 42 Waste Management Improvement Plan: includes the upgrading of many cities from outhouse-style waste disposal, including Appleoosa... Approved! We have modern plumbing, everypony! It’s time to get with the program.”
“ACT 52: Expansion of Renewable Energy Projects Plan: This one includes a dam construction on Forelock River near Ponyville, and experimental windmills in Maneasota... Approved! Renewable energy still seems important even though the environment appears to be doing fine.”
“ACT 66: Project Pie: This one came in a magically sealed cylinder, labeled top secret. “Full scale experiments on the mare Pinkie Pie... Declined. What a waste of government spending. Besides, Pinkie Pie has to be ready to wield the Element of Laughter, and of course she’s my friend. Am I letting personal bias sway my opinion? No, her powers could be wrongly exploited by the military, then fall into the wrong hooves. It's unethical to kidnap and experiment on live sapient beings.”
“Speaking of military, let’s not forget about the ally proposal with the Griffons in a declaration of war against the Diamond Dogs. That was a tough one to decide. The Diamond dogs gem mines have been stretching into Equestrian and Griffon territory. That explains what happened to Rarity. I hope everypony, and I guess every Griffon, is accepting of my decision.”
She rested a hoof on her chin, trying to think of anything else that needed to be reviewed.
“Well it’s only 2:30. It’s time to go see how Canterlot is faring and get to the bottom of this pastry nonsense.”
I also need to learn how to send letters back to Celest... me... oh whatever. That can wait a bit. I can handle things around here. Besides, it’s been a while since I gave Joe a visit.
“Celestia, your food selection has been prepared. Would you like us to bring it in?” Twilight recognized the voice speaking through the door as Porcelain Pot.
“Don’t worry about it. I’m going out to eat. Oh, and while I’m out, have somepony install some sort of communication device in here. Yelling through the door is inefficient!”
Twilight never saw the train of food carts prepared by the serving staff file back down the halls. Stonewall facehoofed. He caught the irate serving mare just as she made a rush for the door, flailing her forelegs menacingly.
“Celestia! I’ll get you for playing with my feelings so help…” Porcelain Pot’s muzzle was plugged by Stonewall’s hoof.
“What was that?” Twilight inquired.
Stonewall kept the raging serving mare silent and answered in her stead. “We’ll get right on that your highness!” At least the pay is good. Just keep thinking about your daughter in Ponyville. Hold on Dinkey, daddy's coming soon?
Porcelain Pot stopped struggling and sighed, “She is right. Yelling through the door is stupid.”
***
To be continued.
wait what?
another changeling invasion threat…
hum..... you know.... unless you're saying that episodes 51 and 52 happen BEFORE episode 3 in the series chronology.... this is impossible
I'm pretty sure Tia and Twi wouldn't have stayed switched for that long or if they do, it wouldn't have taken months for Twilight to learn how to move the sun
809889
Fixing now!!!
Everything is prior to Lesson Zero so I fixed the time traveling.
Keep with the one-character chapters. While it would be nice to see a bit of either one each chapter, their individual parts would be too short in my opinion.
*reads description*
L-l-lesson z-zero?! *shudders*
I have nightmares about that Twilight.
810091
Agreed.
Also wonder if Twilight took the monetary expenditure of some of those into account like the dam and plumbing modernization even though they do seem like good things to do.
Huh? Discription no make sense.
810177
Lightweight, i have nightmares about Party of One Pinkie (Pinkamina). That's actually threatening... Lesson Zero Twi's only interested in learning something about friendship, while Pinkie has absolutely nothing she can lose or gain, she's just doing it 'cause she can. Which makes her unstoppable, or pretty much so. Luckily her imaginary friends didn't have enough time to fully turn her to the dark side...
Imagine a serial killer who can materialize and disappear at will, who can follow you wherever you go... and you have Dark Side Pinkamina. Sweet dreams...
810265
Nincompoop. Pinkamena was just talking to herself. That's not scary at all.
Twilight, however, demonstrated the will to sow discord and destroy emotional bonds, the fact she can teleport INSIDE things smaller than herself and then destroy them (maybe a pony?), and the toast of it all... the WILDLY abusive and VASTLY overpowered Want it Need it spell. Mass mind control.
810091
Thanks
810177
She's so adorable though.
810203
I'm sorry about that. The funny part is they are one of my editors and did a great job on my first couple chapters. They are just super busy lately. Sorry it upsets you. If you would be another editor, then that would help a lot.
810207
WOW! Somepony noticed the staggering bill this would create. I was hoping they would. You sir are win!
810239
What about it?
810247
Is this better? I re did it. Like I said before, more editors would be great! You could also just PM me once, all your complaints and I will fix it. it is also easier for me to write Celestia's dialogue, because she and Ponyvillians are less amnic.
810265
Let me put it this way. Pinkie can hold 1-2 knives/weapons and be any ware. Twilight can levitate hundreds of or very large objects/weapons, can teleport, cast spells and is now interested in pony anatomy.
810321
Does the above help your case?
810434
Thank you! Not to mention as of the Royal Wedding, we see that all the fanfics of Twilight with combat spells and war magic were right. Twilight is a SCARY girl. The most powerful mortal spellcaster in Equestria, second only to the deific avatars of the heavenly bodies. If she loses her mind, we lose our lives.
810493
The scary part is Twilight has the authority of the Princess and the vast knowledge of stuff and Celestia has eons of knowledge and Twilights very magically capable body. The threat has been doubled.
810321
I think you're overselling it a bit by saying she "demonstrated the will to sow discord and destroy emotional bonds". Twilight's plan was to offer three little girls one super cool toy, and then when they started arguing about who got to play with it she was going to step in and teach them about the importance of sharing. Yes, it was executed with maniacal behavior, but that's still as sinister as her plan got even at her most crazy.
The problem of course was they somehow didn't see Smartypants as being one super cool toy (Inconceivable!) and so she tried to get over that little hurdle with a "Want it, Need it" spell, which, as it happened, turned out to be *way* more powerful than she expected. This is nothing new for her though... Pretty much every time Twilight's magic misfires it's because the spell comes out way more powerful than she intended: from the runaway plow during Winter Wrap up to the attempt to alter the Parasprite's diet to Smartypants becoming so desirable that an entire town would fight over it. As Celestia laid out, Twilight's problem is that she's freakishly powerful and needs to learn how to control it all.
But her intentions are pretty pure. Hell, I know plenty of parents who think that one toy for multiple kids is a good exercise in learning how to share.
I like how each chapter is separated, but it would be nice to know what happens to Twi and Tia in the same chapter, so I am a little split on the choice (I would be happy either way just as long and it does not feel rushed and the reader knows what character they are following). It is kinda funny reading what each is doing and how the personalities are not matching up with the bodies. I would say it is similar to knowing you have two weather systems slowly moving together to create an awesome shitstorm.
810434
I really have no clue who would be scarier, Pinkie you just can't get away form and can't touch unless you are shoving a hoof in her mouth, though she is limited to smaller tactical strikes. Twilight on the other hoof can cause mass destruction on a level Pinkie can't match, she however can get hit (mainly by pianos and anvils); though I feel were she more aware, magical shields would prove to be difficult to bypass. And don't get my started on the other four.
as to your question on whether it's ok to change the perspective between twilight and celestia within the same chapter:
I dont see anything wrong with it. However, my logic states that If I say no, then you might be convinced into splitting it up into two chapters. these chapters may need additional writing to justify them as chapters. with this in mind, my greed says no.
810621
"If I can't FIND a friendship problem, I'll MAKE a friendship problem."
I shouldn't have to explain it any further after using her own words. Regardless of intention, she had gone insane. And don't undersell the potency and abusive power of the WINI spell. Regardless of the fact Twi made it too powerful, it subverts the viewer's own willpower into the designated effect of the spell. I wasn't saying Twi was evil, I'm saying Twi is -scary- when she snaps. Far scarier than Pinkamena, who only sat there talking to herself in a fit of sheer depression.
twilestia stikes! good job, keep it up.
811819
I have no problem admitting that that picture makes me feel uneasy. Veeeeery uneasy.
811341
I'm not terribly convinced, as the phrase "a friendship problem" doesn't exactly send chills up my spine. Especially so when the most she intended was to have a group of kids all want to play with a toy at the same time, and then immediately step in and teach them how to share. You can cackle like a mad man, but if the scheme you relay while doing so is a plan to intentionally jaywalk it just doesn't cause the same concern.
I'd be far more spooked if one of my friends was stewing in anger and started holding conversations with disembodied voices that were telling her that I was no good, against her, and that things are better because I'm not around. That is legitimately unsettling to me.
That said, they're both sweethearts, and I'd trust either of them without hesitation.
810872
OBJECTION!
How can you be IN an age? that doesn't make sense, unless you're speaking about eras.
I propose the proper wording would be "We're (we are) the same age, Applejack."
-Phoenix Write, Ace Grammar Nazi
810629
Agreed, she does SEEM scary, but it's not at the same level as Pinkie. First, she's not aiming to maim, kill, destroy, etc. anypony or anything. She's only trying to cause some mischief that will allow her to write a letter on time. Besides, she's obviously distressed about what she's done after casting WINI, because she makes sure her friends don't look at the doll and wonder how she's going to fix this mess. And then the princess pulls Deus ex Machina.
Pinkie, on the other hoof, is downright psychotic. The voices in her head, left long enough, could very well have turned her against her friends to such a point where she actively seeks to harm them, possibly even cupcakes style. Adding in her Pinkie Sense and Reality Warping, and you have yourself a neigh-unstoppable bringer of death. Did I mention she has easy access to the Cake's kitchen knives, and likely has knives hidden all over for a knife emergency? Like eyepatches and balls? Yeah.
811341
I agree that, in general, Unicorns are a larger threat than Earth ponies or Pegasai. However, Pinkie is the obvious exception. Her Pinkie Sense tells her, much like Spiderman's Spider Sense, when something's afoot. Which means not even small tactical strikes can take her by surprise.
812162
Agreed.
It seems I've started a slight divide among the fanbase, due to what (i hope everyone realized) was essentially some lighthearted teasing. I'm not out to make enemies, and if I've upset anyone, I hope you won't hold it against me... please...?
Only way to make this better is if Twilight's ocd is not only a part of her personality, but is a part of her very body as well, forcing Celestia to suffer from it as well (possibly freaking her out and causing mild to severe insanity), until the mind swap gets reversed.
810872 yea, yea. Laugh it out. I'm not good at english
812311
I will admit your point that Pinkie has the faster train to the looney bin, but I think Twilight if pushed hard enough can have a large snap ("If I can't find a friendship problem, I'll make a friendship problem" isn't far from "If I don't have a world to end, I'll make a world to end). Also her quizzical nature and scientific background only mean she is a hop, skip, and a jump (just move your little rump) from asking the questions that lead to vivisection.
812311
I fixed it. I was writing that late at night and forgot to proof read my correction.
Oh yes, and just because I feel like entering this discussion.
I've actually always kind of viewed Pinkie as a separate species, considering the fact that she is almost incapable of walking and bounces everywhere this would require a revised bone structure, add in that she can move faster than Rainbow Dash (I forgot the episode name but the one where she goes insane she actually ends up in front of Dash when she flies away at max speed), breaks almost every law of physics (The list of examples is endless), she can hold something without touching it and without a horn, she could walk on air without wings or a horn to self levitate, etc etc.
tl;dr: Pinkie pie is her own species.
Which would be more dangerous though? I haven't the slightest idea, Twilight is a mobile artillery platform with a countless number of spells capable of doing anything imaginable, yet Pinkie, well, she's just Pinkie, you will never have any idea what she can or will do until she does it.
813847
In the fic A different kind of magic, Pinkie travels through mirrors and portals. I agree with this concept because its Pinkie Pie like and No one is faster than Dash.
As for dangerous, I put my money on Twilight. Let me put it this way. Pinkie can hold 1-2 knives/weapons and be any ware. Twilight can levitate hundreds of or very large objects/weapons, can teleport, cast spells and is now interested in pony anatomy. I half to finish the research on the differences between Pegasi, Unicorns and Earth ponies and don't have any cadavers. Well there are plenty of townsfolk and I don't want to raise the dead...or do I?
On another note. I don't think Twilight could do anything that Pinkie wouldn't see, but Twi could counter/shield spell whatever was thrown at her.So, tie in a fight and Twi wins most dangerous to society. (IN MY OPINION)
814066
That situation of "I need bodies for research and I don't have cadavers" sounds suspiciously like a Twilight-mirror of the Cupcakes serial murderer fic.
You make a good point. But while without a doubt Twilight could do more damage, she would probably be caught way faster while Pinkie's murder/crime spree would take much longer and much more resources to end. I'm pretty sure Twilight would win in open combat considering Pinkie isn't really that powerful, just very, very maneuverable. Also to add some additional points to this discussion, would it count to bring Spike and Gummi to this fight?
While I'm thinking on those lines, Pinkie did have that flying machine from episode 5....
Woah, why is it so fun to discuss candy colored child's tv show characters ability to cause havoc and engage in mortal combat?
Nice work, you get a thumbs up and a fav for being awesome
810265
Are you speaking of Cupcakes now?
Party of one Pinkie makes me a bit uneasy, but Twilight was scary there.
810434
Yes. But the only episode at the moment that have given me nightmares is Lesson zero. Sometimes I hear that crazy voice, I have never been so creept out in my life. I can't think of anything that have creeped me out more.
812311
Me too. It is giving me some chills, but well, Pinkie is not scaring me that much. But, she has her scary moments. And, I have nothing against you, or fealing insulted.
814215
I have only read one Twi gore fic and it wasn't that one. I think a Pie vs Twi story could be good.
814215
This argument is why TwiPie is the worst possible thing for Equestria.
Apocalypse fights. And their kids would be… wubstoppable.
815034
There are Twi gore fics? I was just saying that because it kinda sounded like the story would be almost parallel to the Cupcakes but with Twilight being the murderer with a reason tailored to better fit her mindset.
815054
The. Worst. Possible. Thing.
But the best possible thing for all of us. Tell me that would not be totally awesome thing to watch/read?
815081
Hmm. I don't think a writer could ever write the true extent of that multipartite apocalypse. Twi's magic and perfectionism, plus Pinkie's randomness and utter ignorance of several natural laws… geesh. I doubt anything could stand in the wake of that chaos.
815115
I have to write this now. (not now now, but soon) Twi and Pinkie as competing dictators of the world. Pinkie Pie's Part Hearty Alliance (Discord, chrysalis, maybe Diamond Dogs VS The Ever Dawn Order (Twilight, Luna, and Griffons)
Order and control VS Chaos and fun, leaving the rest of the mane six to choose sides or search for Celestia...if she is alive!
Tags(Dark, adventure, Tragedy, maybe alternate universe)
815081
Yeah, it was called The Experiments of Twilight Sparkle. She felt the need to do an "in depth" study of the magic of friendship, which lead to "physical" examinations of her friends. (Personally I thought it got out of character and was unnecessarily violent.
815281
I'm not into gore or horror, personally. My mind just ran with the idea.:derpytongue:
That said, I write apocalyptically a lot.
Call it… The Twinkie Wars…
815281
I'm sorry.
>>Spanner
Dictator Pinkie, makes me think of how her Ministry from FO:E turned out.
I like.
815842
Sorry for what?
815881
What is FO: E
815726
I'm not a gore guy myself. Awesome name, but it is behind seven other story ideas!
Combat ratings, in descending order from strongest to least useful:
1: Twilight Sparkle
2: Pinkamena Diane Pie
3: Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash (Now that both have control of their respective abilities)
4: Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash (Now that both have control of their respective abilities)
Five and six are hard to say. Rarity is more dangerous at range than Applejack... but if Applejack gets in close she can cause massive internal damage and with a headshot-buck probably kill you in one kick.
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@Spanner:
This part:
It's OK. Twilestia just needs to get to Canterlot and switch back with Tiasparkle before revealing their identities. But why not have some fun along the way?
I don't get it. Twilight + celestia and techniclly the same thing? What?
away, until noon.
no comma
Just stand in front of the big doors and be intimidating they said.
intimidating, they
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no space
Other than that, I liked it. Sorry for the lateness.
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Twilestia = Celestia in Twilight body and Tiasparkle = Twilight in celestia's body.
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Thanks. No problem.
... That awkward moment when the entire comment section is a complicated conversation/debate/something.
Anyways, my two cents are for you staying with one of them each chapter, it helps with the immersion of just that one character.
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YOur the tenth or so to say this the decision has been made.
815281 I wasn't suggesting anything like gore, I was only suggesting crazy and crazy=/=gory. Something along the lines of Celestia basically doing her own version of Lesson Zero in Twilight's body.
Though I thought of something else that could be funny, Luna thinking the reason Celestia is acting a bit off is that she is possessed.
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Fallout: Equestria.
Whilst I enjoyed this chapter, the constant switching between italics and normal font is very confusing.
It makes me wonder who is thinking what, especially as it isn't formatted the same way each time; sometimes a character's thoughts are beside their speech and sometimes it's not.
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I'll fix it latter, i hope it wasn't too bad.
Oh, Twilight. You're adorable.
"So if the moon is now out of sight and the sun is not up, what is this period?"
umm... twilight?
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First person to get that...yay!