Fluttershy was in the garden watering the flowers. She was completely unaware that Discord was watching her from a tree above.
"She is beautiful," he whispered to himself quietly. "If only she wasn't so innocent."
"Hello, Discord!" Fluttershy said. "What are you doing up there?"
"Oh... um nothing, my dear!" He yawned. "Just relaxing."
"In a tree?" Fluttershy asked.
"I am the Lord of Chaos. I can relax anywhere I like," Discord said.
Fluttershy giggled and looked up at Discord. His eyes met hers and he got lost in their teal gleam. They were a void that seemed to go on forever. "Discord are you okay?" Fluttershy's concerned voice asked, bringing him back to reality.
He snapped out of his daze and said, "Of course, dear Fluttershy. Now, I'd love to chat but I have some work to do with Tia. Being reformed and all has made me quite the helper, and of course Tia can't do anything on her own. Who knows what she'll want from me this time?"
With that, Discord snapped his fingers and was gone. The thing was though, Discord had no plans with Celestia. He was going off to think. He needed to find a way to corrupt Fluttershy. No, he needed a way to deform her.
Fluttershy woke up to the sound of running water. She looked down to see water rising up from the floor. Terrified for herself and her animals, she scrambled out of bed and yelled for her animals to follow her. Then, she flew out of her house with her animals trailing her. She took the animals and put them all in trees to keep them safe.
"Stay up here, while I go find Twilight and the girls," she told them.
The animals chipped and chirped in protest, but Fluttershy assured them she would be fine. Fluttershy flew off to Twilight's new castle quickly.
As she flew, she saw many other ponies struggling in the rising water. She wished to help them, but knew it was for the greater good if she went to Twilight's as quickly as possible. She made a mental note to check back later, just in case.
As Fluttershy entered the castle, she noticed Twilight casting spells in order to keep the water out.
"Must...protect...books..." Twilight gasped, her spells not holding out the water for long.
"Twilight, what are we going to do? Where's Spike?" Fluttershy asked, helping Twilight by mopping up any water that got in.
"I don't know what's going on! Oh, and Spike is with Rarity." Twilight told her, while struggling with her spells. "This is just way to chaotic."
Both girls froze. Behind them they heard a deep, low chuckle. Fluttershy started weeping, knowing exactly who had caused this mess. She had thought that after the Tirek incident, Discord had changed for the better. She had hoped that he was finally completely reformed. Sadly, she was wrong.
"Took you long enough, Princess. I've been standing here for a full hour, waiting for you to figure out that it was I, Discord, the Lord of Chaos, who has turned Equestria into a swimming pool. Totally chaotic, right?"
Twilight glared at Discord, while Fluttershy continued to weep.
"We'll stop you with the Elements of Harmony!" Twilight told him. "We'll turn you to stone!"
"Wouldn't you need the rest of your friends to do that?" Discord asked with a smirk. "I'm afraid that by the time you reach them, they'll have been without oxygen for quite some time now,"
With those words, Fluttershy snapped. She flew up to Discord and glared at him. He just smirked at her.
"Why? Why are you doing this? I thought you'd changed," Fluttershy cried. Then, almost in a whisper, she muttered, "I thought we were friends."
"That's the thing!" Discord bolted at her. "You tried to change me. Why is it me who has to change? Why can't you change for me?"
Fluttershy was about to respond when Discord cut her off. "Now, this brings us to my little deal," he said as he softly ran his fingers through Fluttershy's mane. She pulled away him and hid behind Twilight, who was frowning at him.
"You want Equestia back to its boring old self. I want a student," Discord said, calmly.
"A what?" Twilight asked, her ears picking up at the idea of learning something new, even if it was from Discord.
"A student, someone I can train in my chaotic ways. Of course, I'd give this student some of my magic. Then, we'd go onto our own little piece of land in the Everfree Forest. There, I'd train my student, and we can spread our chaos freely."
Twilight stared in horror at Discord, while Fluttershy continued to hide behind her. Finally, Twilight looked up at Discord and asked, "How long do I have to decide?"
He responded, "Oh, I'd say you have five minutes before everyone drowns."
Twilight sighed, "Deal, I'll-"
"Take me."
Discord and Twilight turned to see Fluttershy come out from behind her. Fluttershy held her head high and stared at Discord. Then she turned to Twilight. "Twilight let me do this. I know him better than you do. I am the one who failed to reform him. I deserve this."
Before Twilight could argue, Discord snapped his fingers, and Fluttershy appeared in arms.
"Welcome to Discord's School of Chaos!" He snickered.
He snapped his fingers, and they were gone.
Nice work! I love the story line
Not bad. Keep up the good work.
Awesome! Cant Wait For More
5433500 Thanks!
5433530 Thanks! I'll try!
5433592 Thanks! I'll try to update soon!
This is pretty rushed, but it's a refreshing premise. I take issue that it's set after the events of season four. Discord got a LOT of character growth. But I'm interested to see how YOU interpret his character.
5433921 Sorry if it's rushed! I'm new at this! I'm excited to continue the story and see the characters grow. Stay tuned!
Is anyone else kind of being reminded of 'Bride of Discord'?
I am ;P
Nice idea, I like it
Though I do think you made Discord too insensitive, you portrayed him well enough and the way Fluttershy burst into tears straight after she realised it was Discord who was behind the flood was perfect.
But seriously, it felt really forced when he said he was making her friends drown
And also how he STILL WANTED TO MAKE HER INTO HER DISCORDED SELF
5434398 It does remind me of Bride Of Discord... do you watch the Youtube episodes? Still original and great though 5433655!
I'm looking forward to more chapters! Can't wait to see how this goes!
Also
Quite bold, ay fluttershy?
Sorry, couldn't resist5434398 I needed him to be insensitive in order to get the story rolling. I had a writer block sorry!
5434558 I know it was kinda like BoD! Sorry! DF is such a good writer! I didn't mean to copy her!
5434574 Thanks! I'll try to update soon!
5434636 You haven't copied her, its very original! Plus, we all get inspired by something, I mean, how do you think, say, Twilight was made? Well, there must have been things before it to have been made like The Vampire Diaries or Buffy the vampire slayer... Even the Mane 6 were something else to begin with! Its really good, sorry if I got the wrong message across... If it makes you feel any better, I've had a few story ideas based off DF! Xx
5434745 Thanks! This is my first story, so I'm really sensitive about it! Oh, and btw Mane 6 are probably based on G3 mlp ponies!
It seem it would made more sense if it was set right after Keep Calm and Flutter on. I doubt Discord would even dare to create chaos or make schemes after Season 4 finale. Not to mention using blackmail.
5433655 Your welcome
5434907 I know! I needed Twilight to be a princess and some other things, which
I can't say because they would be total spoilers! I agree with you, but I just needed it to happen now! Sorry if this makes or breaks the story for you!
LOVE IT
Whoa, whoa. Slow down, dear author, and let me get all of this to sink in... because I'm having trouble doing so. What was his thought process into wanting to deform her? Especially considering the events mentioned--involving Tirek--in the actual story. What made his regrets and concern for his friends vanish just like that? Why would he threaten to drown ponies he was starting to become friends with? It sits not at all right with me.
A lot happens in this starting chapter, and it's not completely appealing to the eye. It's a storm of confusion, but the dark clouds refuse to go away due to the rushed storytelling.
As a writer, one should go into the story slowly--but not too slowly else the readers grow bored. Tell us what happened to make Discord want to wreak havoc again and deform Fluttershy. Show the tension between the characters from when Discord reveals himself to the deal. There's plenty going on, but I don't quite sense the emotions going on due to its rushed pace. Don't be afraid to extend on things because we want to know what they're feeling, through subtle narration or dialogue. I'm intruiged by the premise, but the story needs polishing.
Also, I don't want to come across as mean, but having Discord say chaos or chaotic can only be done so many times before it becomes forced. He doesn't have to declare his title as Master of Chaos all the time, you know. Oh, he can do that, but in the show, I don't remember him going wild with the title itself so keep that in mind.
5436659 I know! Thanks so much pointing all that out! Why Discord wants to deform her and cause havoc will hopefully be in one of the next chapters! I'm sorry if it feels rushed. This is my first ever story! I hope to improve! If you have any suggestions, let me know! The next chapter is coming to me real slowly and I could take it sooo many ways! Thanks again for pointing all that out! I'll try harder to go slower!
Whoooooooooop!!!!!!
I wanna swim now
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Interesting premise!! I definitely want to see this move forward, and as a first story I think this is wonderful! If you still would like some help with editing, or even perhaps adding in a few more descriptive paragraphs, just give me a holler and I would love to help!!
I love a good Fluttercord story "Yay" the chapter was short but it was enough to catch my interest.
FLUTTERSHY I RESERVED THAT SPOT IN DISCORDS SCHOOL OF CHAOS!
Yes, a straight Fluttershy!!! *you gain a like*