An Alternate Universe where Discord is defeated... at the cost of Twilight Sparkle's life. What if the Last 5 Elements decide to split away for good, leaving each other to live their own lives? And what if the disappearance of a certain Pink Pony leads to the answer of a few Gruesome murders?
We look from the perspective of Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy as they venture through Equestria, having no place to permanently call home, and only each other to call 'Friend'... but what if.... they became something more along the way?
And what if... the missing Party Pony finds a new kind of party... involving a Dance with Death?
(First Fanfic ever, feel free to comment and give advice on what might be wrong with the story. Thanks.)
Chapters (2)
Sorry if it's bad folks, again. This is my first Fanfic ever. So... advise me if you feel something isn't right with it. And if you like it...
Let's just say the Great and Powerful Sister Keg expected it.
I find nothing wrong with it. There may have been a grammar error somewhere, but i wasn't looking for any. When will the next chapter come out?
I was going to work on a story like this...
DID YOU READ MY MIND?!
EDIT: Actually, that's a lie.
My story would be nothing like this. Twilight dieing would be about the only similiarity.
Good story
Interesting concept. I want to see where this goes.
Haha, glad I'm getting a bit of positive feedback for my first story.
512885 I plan to explain it sometime later on, but there isn't much to explain, really... I'll try and see if I can add a little bit of spice to that topic.
512912 Well, I myself am Unsure. Though I do hope to have a weekly release schedule. When I have school off my back.
512940 Haha, Great minds must think alike.
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That's a lie...
intentive minds think alike.
You, sir, have swagger
512987 Well.. I am a girl but thank you anyway kind sir.
I'm pretty interested in this. Can't wait to see where this goes.
I really like both the concept and the style of writing and I can see this having a good run!
twilight's... dead?
I shall try to give it a chance anyway but I hate it when that poor unicorn gets it.
That ending whip lashed me. Arousal? at a time like this? What of subtlety my dear pegasister?
Ok positive thing is lack of many syntax mistakes, I notice none that jumped out at me. Good job.
I really need to stop reading these grimdarks. They start hurting after a while and I've just read through three of them where Twi gets emotional executed through the course of the story and only one brought her back from the brink (Trixie's Magic Bit but It is a mature one so... 18+... amazing though.) I will try to find something more uplifting and try again to fully enjoy the emotion you are trying to put into this.
My god, PLEASE don't make Rainbow a lesbian! I'm sick of gay fanfics!
513442 Well, buddy. Don't like it, don't read it. Simple as that.
Got Homophobia? Either get yourself cured, or leave :)
513409 Hrm... I was actually thinking I was putting that sort of feeling a little TOO early into the story. Glad to see I'm not the only one. I'll be sure not to make it as obvious later on. Thank you for the advice
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It's not that I'm a homophobe, I just hate the steriotypes about RD.
515111 Sorry about that
Schooltime frustration got to me
I for one am not fond of generic Lez RD stories myself so I don't intend to push her into the 'filly fooler' zone just yet. I intend to give her a mental conflict for a moment, possibly a few chapters.
But, then again the story's just begun so let's allow some progress for it first yeah?
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Let's just see where this story goes.
There has NEVER been a fanfic where RD has feelings for Applejack or Fluttershy, goes through mental conflict, and gets over it and stays friends.
Y IS THERE NO FICS ON THAT?
Hey everypony! I'm the legitamate PinkaSisterKeg, the one replying has been Pinkie Bro Jc, and Oh my gosh!
when I saw these reveiws~ I'm very happy, also Jc and I agreed that this is yes going to start kind of sad but guys through the story it will get happier, we are already planing to make another story that is much darker~ Also guys most our storys will probably have girl pairings so if you don't like please don't read,flames make Fluttershy cry, creative critism is a writters best friiend and a positive reveiw keeps the plot bunnies happy~ Thank you everypony and Jc and I will hopefully release another chapter by the end of the week~
This is an amazing continuation to the first chapter and I honestly love the story. I feel so sad yet I am shaking in anticipation!
I am looking forward to the next chapter.
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Thank you very much! I am sure Keg would be as pleased as I am when she reads this
Oh, and for everypony else who would be reading this I would like to add that although we won't be releasing on a 7-day week basis, we will be releasing within a 10 day time frame so just keep tabs on us if you really like the story so you can keep track of our updates.
Again, constructive criticism and advice is always welcome. If you like it please feel free to say so
If you don't please also feel free to tell me what changes you might like to see and I will see if I can squeeze it in
Finally, you bronies all keep on truckin'.
This is JC (Or Jay) saying: "Peace out!"
You followed up a good chapter with an awesome chapter. Once again, good job.
Hey everypony! This is Keg, we're working on the new chappie now!
THANKYOU for the nice comments~
FlutterDash, oh hay yes!
Always in the mood for that. >w<
As a whole, this story looks pretty good! But gosh, what a shame that Twilight was killed!
Poor ponies, and wow, Princess Celestia even broke down in front of everypony! Really does come to show that she's a pony like everypony else and has feelings, especially considering how much Twilight meant to her. :< 
To think that even the Princess herself can't hold in her emotions, it really has her subjects see the whole situation and herself in a whole new perspective, doesn't it?
I'll be following it! I look forward to how it shall turn out.
I do not know what to say but pinkie being a serial killer is so overdone. can people just leave the poor girl alone she wouldn't do that to her friends neither in canon or fanon. but pinkamena would now she the one whose doing it all. this story isnt dead right? it hasnt been updated since july just wondering.
