Fluttershy was experiencing some changes in her that she didn't know what to do about. Due to fear she went to the only friend she knew that could help her. That's when things escalated and curse emerged, threatening to eliminate ponykind.
Ps: The ponies in this story have human features, like hands, breasts and can stand upright on two legs. However, they are still ponies with manes, coats, tails, etc.
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Hi, just finished reading the chapter. First, you have a few errors with punctuation and some places were you double spaced between the sentences.
One thing I noticed in the beginning was Fluttershy thinking and when that happens you usually would want it to be italicized like this:
[ i]What is happening? This isn't normal at all. I mean, I've looked in every medical book that I own, but I didn't find anything about whatever is causing the changes that are happening to me. I need to calm down a little; maybe it's a little illness right? There's nothing to fear. But why do I always want to bite somebody? Am I going mad?[ /i]
So it would appear like this.
What is happening? This isn't normal at all. I mean, I've looked in every medical book that I own, but I didn't find anything about whatever is causing the changes that are happening to me. I need to calm down a little; maybe it's a little illness right? There's nothing to fear. But why do I always want to bite somebody? Am I going mad?
Or else it would be interpreted as someone else speaking at that point.
That would be all that I saw for the chapter that concerned me, but other than that keep writing. It shows promise.
A.k.a. Anthro. We don't need to know that, there's a tag on the story.
5136384 Hmm, I think I might do that now. I hope also the editing is improved on the long run. Thanks for the comment though.
5136587 I know that some people know. But some others get confused between anthro and humanized so I just wanted to clear things.
5138839 Yeah, no problem. From what Shadowblaze is saying, the bottom part of the description doesn't need to be there because it's in the tag already.
Some may not know what it means, but in any case they could read or ask around for what it means which I'm almost certain they would come to find on their own.^^
Woah. Now things are gonna start getting interesting.