Hm. Where is this story going to go?

Also I thought the minimum word count for publication was 1000. Maybe the word counter's wrong?

5132735 See the Author's Note.

5132763 Ah, thanks for that.

Interesting....

I feel like you spoke to my soul…

Really great start!

It feel wrong to debase

felt

Oh, I liked the second chapter as it was when I read this first posted. Hopefully you don't change it too much? It tonally counterpointed this really well, and established a great picture of Twi's psyche. (As much healthier and more relateable, honestly.)

5135083 Thank you. There's some problems with her character voice and such that I need to hammer out. I also had the usual trouble with tense shifts.

Stop being in my head.

Woah... That was deep, depressing and accurate to me to a point.

5140565 5133740 5140926 I'm glad to hear it reached you like this. One of the big challenges in this story is keeping Twilight Twilight while also making her relatable to the reader, and having the narrative reflect that. Which is why the second and following chapters are giving me such trouble—and that's trouble with a T and that rhymes with C and that stands for Clop

She did not want to think of her friends, her neighbors, her acquaintances like that. It felt wrong to debase and use their image in her mind.

This very much resonated with me. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.