Dude, you write a great Gilda.

Uh oh. He's screwed.

You have missing periods at the end of your paragraphs! That is annoying, unless I am just reading this wrong?

I finished reading this... please do tell me this a prologue! Just fix the period mistakes and make a second chapter, and this should be making much more progres. Ahh, there must be more seeeeeeeexxxx. The worst part was that you write completely sexy with these scenes, but yet there isn't more sex!

Edit > I just saw the incomplete tag. Yay! Favoriting this... ignore the last sentence.

OH NO!! Anon's getting Screwed!!!

I hate female molesters (that includes female clowns, they are scary, but male clowns are annoying like Pennywise)

I just hope that I will never get raped by a big scary woman with big jugs.

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Well, I originally wrote this for 4chan in greentext form. Converting to prose is a time-consuming process, one that also leaves room for a lot of mistakes. My previous story also had this problem, but I'm not really inclined to fix it as I am inclined to finish the story.

Wow, thanks for the read.

5061876 Oh, well you should look over it at least then publish it. Best luck of finishing this story!

Having read this, I think I might be a half-decent idea to stick a trigger warning in the description to be safe, since this is pretty much leading into rape.

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Having read this comment, I think it might be a half-decent idea to stick a trigger warning in it to be safe, since this comment explicitly mentions the word 'rape', and might trigger some people.

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5062353 Ooh, nice and edgy, the way I like it.

Ridicule me all you like, buddy boy. I was just giving the author a bit of harmless advice.

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Trigger warning added. Happy?

Trigger Warning: If you're an insecure bitch that can't handle a little rough sex, don't read my stories. I don't have to cater to your needs

My sides.

5062393
Please put a trigger warning for the word edge, as it triggers my ptsd about when I used to cut myself

Good story, just one question, why'd she have duct tape in her book bag? Just doesn't seem like something a normal highschooler would have

It is nice i think, i like it. Is it only a Clopfic or is it going to be a real story? I don´t mind, i just prefer it with a real story.

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Just a oneshot. I've never really been one to expand my ideas past what I need them to be.

5063849 it is okay, i like your Gilda, somehow remember me a bit of another one i had make my favourite, i think it don´t hurt to ask

Well nice work.

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It's Gilda. What do you expect from a badass like her? Anything less?

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If you're an insecure bitch that can't handle a little rough sex, don't read my stories. I don't have to cater to your needs

Lol, says the insecure bitch who can't handle a polite suggestion on their story without reacting like an over-defensive teenage girl.

I don't do chapter titles, ok?

Damn. I wish I was as badass as you like to think you are.

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Gherkin pls, your troll account isn't fooling anybody. Go back to Gaia and let the BIG DAWGS play.

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Troll account this may be, but a Gherkin I am not.

And if being a "Big Dawg" means having nothing better to do than lurk around in the comments to nip at the heels of anyone who doesn't bust a nut at the sight of this shit pile of a story, then I'm glad to say I'm not one. Honestly, the comment wasn't there for no more than a few minutes and here you are. On your knees, lubed up, and begging to suck my cock because you've grown tired of the taste of Prince_of_Autumns' microscopic pecker.

With that kind of punctuality I feel it's pretty safe say that you ARE Prince_of_Autumn. Armed with your own Anonymous troll account. Here to do oral battle with my wang. Only difference is you've had yours a bit longer. Kinda sad that'd you'd need one. But I'm not one to talk am I?

No, long story short: Author's an over sensitive cunt who can't take a suggestion and a hypocrite to boot. But then, aren't we all?

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Come now, you wang wrangler. You're losing your touch. It's been five minutes. Hurry the fuck up and suck me off already.

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"hehe. That prinse of autum wont know what hit him!"
Gherkin sits down at his chair, the plastic groaning as it takes his overweight form
Opening up his favorite tabs on chrome, he sees a notification from the website between "Hardcore pone porn" and "How to make girls notice your intelligence"
Oh shit
It's fimfic
Looks like someone replied to your 'Duckduck' ruse
"Wow. What a loser. I bet he doesn't even know"
Wait
That reply is from King of the Carribean
>Gherkin please, your troll account.....
You don't bother to read the rest
You have been found out
You try to hang yourself, but no rope can support your weight
Fap to lyra
Cry yourself to sleep

You're obviously Gherkin, though. Who else would care enough to make a new account to defend his shitty, softcock idea?

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So, because I don't feel a need to warn people about the content of my story and because I am not used to having chapters, I'm an overdefensive ass?

Flawless logic.

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I'm actually feeling kinda bad for Gherkin right now. Cause there really is no way of him proving that I'm not him.

OH and I'll have you know the ladies love my rolls, thank you very much. I've been told it's like rolling in a sea of downy pillows with a penis.

And who said I was defending anybody. I'm saying the author is a pussy little bitch who can't take a smidgen of criticism without having to doublestuff his cooch with tampons to stem the flow of menstrual blood.

Honestly, who would login to and alt account to defend such a miserable sack of shit for being such a sad little bitch other than bitch himself? You're definitely Autumn.

Also, maybe Gherkin's idea wouldn't have been so soft cocked if you had just sucked him off like you were supposed to ya little comment gremlin.

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Gee Gherkin, you're trying pretty hard right now. Why, if I didn't know any better, I'd think that you were
mad

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I am livid m8. I'm in a right twister. Got my fighting socks on and everything.

(Seriously tho, Gherkin, I'm digging you a hole and I'm sorry. I just can't stand these limp dicked fatasses throwing a conniption just cause someone didn't praise them in the comments.)

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No it just makes you an ass in general. But the way you reacted, makes you an over sensitive little bitch .

The chapter title makes you a sad tough guy wannabe. Just icing on the cake really. Not a huge deal. Don't let it get you down buddy.

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This guy
This fuckin guy
You know talking to your self is the first sign of madness, right?

more like mad-ness lol

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Dude I am straight up fuckin nutz. But like I said. There is no easy way to prove I'm not him, so go ahead and keep blaming him. He's gonna be so fucking confused if he sees this.

god...I keep trying to think of a way to prove I'm not him, but nothing's coming.

You got any ideas, king?

EDIT: I can only imagine how crazy this looks if you're actually convinced I'm Gherkin. Have an up vote you cunt.

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I don't have any ideas, but even if I did, you couldn't prove that you aren't Gherkin because you are Gherkin.

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You got me! I'm him! Totally.

But hey. When and if he does see this and if he's stupid enough to comment and try to convince your dumb ass that he wasn't the one posting all these comments, go easy on him K? For me, baby? He's not gonna have any fucking idea what's going on.

And Gherkin? If you're reading this man.

First: I'm sorry. Kinda fucked you over on this one.

Second: Don't bother with it, just walk away and don't even try, alright?

God I'm laughing my ass off. Thanks for the chat, King. And Autumn, you're still a pussy bitch. But the fic wasn't all that bad. A little rushed and I would have like to see some actual fucking. But beggars can't be choosers. Don't get pregnant and don't run with scissors. Definitely don't do both.

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This was the most fun I've ever had. I-I'm gonna miss you Ducky.

yeah thats right. you better fuckin run you pussy bitch

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Well I mean...I can stay if you'd like.

I'm awful lonely.

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5067252

Y'all are faggots.

Such gripping conversation and critique about the story. Truly a comments section for the ages.

Ignoring the majority of the comment section(Its like aflame war off of youtube), you sir/madam are an evil person. Who leaves a cliff-hanger on a clop story?
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5066857 fair enough

Comment section hysteria aside, all seemed alright. Then I saw this;

"Trigger Warning: If you're an insecure bitch that can't handle a little rough sex, don't read my stories. I don't have to cater to your needs"

So... what, if people don't like the story then they are "insecure bitches"? Why does this disclaimer even have to be here anyway? I find the whole thing ridiculously overzealous if you have to go ahead and insult people who don't like a certain type of content.

Therefore, I won't be reading this.

I am pretty sure that a story must be good, i.e. it must fall into the reader's margin of good stories.
So, yes, you do have to cater to our needs, because if you have a story that will have questions unanswered, a cliffhanger for.... porn...
wadafak?
Why?
And some terrible reaction to someone basically saying "put a warning"..
You seem like a big asshole, waiting for the shitstorm that is the hate from the beautiful readers ugly cloppers that want to see sex, not some stupid clop story with an actual storyline.
Unless you're trying to make us feel afraid, the "unfortunately, your stuck in a damn shower with gilda, who is so fakkin sexy nd stuff! o god anything but that!" seems to sum up all the clopfics EVER.
Good try, I agree with DuckDuck, and he was rekking you all, no doubt about it.
I'm not going to read the story, not like you care but this story seems to be worthless because it has a dick author- you.
5/10, the 5 because I haven't read the story yet. Why not 10/10? Thats because you seem like a sensitive teddy bear, waddling around, all angry and stuff.

Oh and if you don't do chapters, why did you do it in this particular story?

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Oh and if you don't do chapters, why did you do it in this particular story?

That's how FimFic does stories. Then again, I'm fairly new to this site, so I don't know a lot about the internal workings.

a cliffhanger for.... porn..

Wow, it's almost like I'm not finished with the story!

this story seems to be worthless because it has a dick author- you.

To be bluntly honest, I couldn't give a damn what you guys think of me. I post on here with a bunch of other writers that migrated from /mlp/, but I still mainly post in /mlp/. This site isn't my largest or foremost concern.

5070433 Okay.
Thank you for clearing things up for me.
Obviously you have your own thoughts, and care to only apply to those thoughts.
I know you didn't finish the story, but why leave it like that?
Like you just said,"Fuck it! I'm going to finish this later!"
What is the next chapter going to be called, if you're obviously terrible at writing chapter names?
"sekcy tiem in the showers!" is my suggestion, but its all up to you.
A few more suggestions
Load Pump
Rough buttsecks
Tied Up And Screwed
Getting Raped In The Showers
No Turning Back, Its A Horrifying Sight, Really

!!! What about Second Chapter!?
Who would've thought of that!?

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I know you didn't finish the story, but why leave it like that?

Well, that's all I had written at the time I posted. I'm continuing to work on it(In fact, the paste is open in a different tab as I'm typing this), so please, try to be a bit patient.

sekcy tiem in the showers!

It's decided, that's the name of the second chapter. Thanks for the little giggle, m8

After looking over the comments section I find it easy to believe that the author (and most likely a couple commentators) are regulars of 4chan.

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It's been mentioned before. Yes, I hail from 4chan.

Loved the story, though your pissiness is a bit grating.