Really liked how you illustrated the argument. Might have an extra false ending or two more than it needed, but much better than a couple of people arguing at each other while sitting on a bed. Particularly liked that Twilight was still there under her monstrous shell. Even more that she doubled down on her pain and drew more strength from it for her hate. I think her heart being full of poison might be the most interesting description here.
I've had a sneaking suspicion as to how this will all play out since the end of the last story, and this chapter seems to foreshadow that end fairly directly. Full steam ahead.
5987232 I think the real issue is they'd like to hit me in the face. Humans, Flash Sentry, sex, sex which was promised but hasn't happened, a sequel, fourth wall break in the description, an out-of-character OC Twilight, everything about Shimmer... All I need is a disgusting fetish and some little kids and this would be the holy grail of burn-it-with-fire fics. The actual content becomes irrelevant, and I'd be lying if I said I've never downvoted a story on principle before. So, really, having a less-than-perfect rating doesn't bother me. It's just a reassurance that I'm not doing this to impress anyone, and it makes any positive comments mean a lot more.
5994491 I think the real issue is they'd like to bite me in the... you know what, never mind.
5995726 I'm just grateful you're still writing and releasing this story, especially without any guarantee of gratification from a large following. I've seen other authors whose works I enjoy lose the desire to write when they perceive a lack of acknowledgement or response from any readership. Been kinda dreading that you might get discouraged, too, after so long.
This series is really something else, not at all what I had expected. It addresses its plot elements in a far deeper and mature manner than I can presently recall reading, even those concepts which I have seen used in other stories. You challenge Equestrian values as seen on the show without willfully ignoring that they do in fact work, or at least that they have worked numerous enough times for Princess that she has very valid reasons for her arguments - arguments I agree with, even as I agree with the other arguments. Indeed, no character seems to have the Right Answer, only beliefs that, while flawed in their own ways, give results which validate their actions. Shimmer amazes me; I can't really find the right words to do justice to this character you've written. It's really, really... something else. A good something. Wish I was better able to express that. So many more things I could try to say.
I just wanted to comment, hoping it can at least express my appreciation for your sharing your writing with us.
Nonagon- I've been kind of skimming through and catching bits and pieces, so I don't know the while picture of this series yet, but wow. I'm blown away so far with what I've read. I'll put all of these on my to read list, and give my thoughts when I get a chance to catch up.
6027940 Actually, I don't think that one word does full justice for her though I can't exactly pin down something better. Sure she's a sadistic bitch that enjoys being an asshole to everyone around her, yet she still has an incredible amount of charisma. Normally I hate people like that, but here I find myself siding with Shining and I just can't seem to hate her.
Great visuals in this chapter by the way, that was quite the read.
6211057 I can! Hate Shimmer, I mean. Her life with Shining Armor is like Twilight here explained, way better than she deserves and infinitely better than she would ever acknowledge. In a way, it's the same with what's been happening all throughout these stories: Shimmer is always in control, always comes out on top, and an utterly horrible person in the process who thinks she's skilled but is just luckier than everybody else.
It's finally here!
...Wow that fight was intense and somewhat dark.
This chapter is really, really weird. I like it.
Really liked how you illustrated the argument. Might have an extra false ending or two more than it needed, but much better than a couple of people arguing at each other while sitting on a bed. Particularly liked that Twilight was still there under her monstrous shell. Even more that she doubled down on her pain and drew more strength from it for her hate. I think her heart being full of poison might be the most interesting description here.
I've had a sneaking suspicion as to how this will all play out since the end of the last story, and this chapter seems to foreshadow that end fairly directly. Full steam ahead.
Look at them haters disliking this for no reason. They wouldn't know a masterpiece if it hit them in the face.
The people down voting wouldn't know good writing if it bit them in the ass. This should be top slot of the feature box
5987232
I think the real issue is they'd like to hit me in the face. Humans, Flash Sentry, sex, sex which was promised but hasn't happened, a sequel, fourth wall break in the description, an out-of-character OC Twilight, everything about Shimmer... All I need is a disgusting fetish and some little kids and this would be the holy grail of burn-it-with-fire fics. The actual content becomes irrelevant, and I'd be lying if I said I've never downvoted a story on principle before. So, really, having a less-than-perfect rating doesn't bother me. It's just a reassurance that I'm not doing this to impress anyone, and it makes any positive comments mean a lot more.
5994491
I think the real issue is they'd like to bite me in the... you know what, never mind.
5995726
I'm just grateful you're still writing and releasing this story, especially without any guarantee of gratification from a large following. I've seen other authors whose works I enjoy lose the desire to write when they perceive a lack of acknowledgement or response from any readership. Been kinda dreading that you might get discouraged, too, after so long.
This series is really something else, not at all what I had expected. It addresses its plot elements in a far deeper and mature manner than I can presently recall reading, even those concepts which I have seen used in other stories. You challenge Equestrian values as seen on the show without willfully ignoring that they do in fact work, or at least that they have worked numerous enough times for Princess that she has very valid reasons for her arguments - arguments I agree with, even as I agree with the other arguments. Indeed, no character seems to have the Right Answer, only beliefs that, while flawed in their own ways, give results which validate their actions. Shimmer amazes me; I can't really find the right words to do justice to this character you've written. It's really, really... something else. A good something. Wish I was better able to express that. So many more things I could try to say.
I just wanted to comment, hoping it can at least express my appreciation for your sharing your writing with us.
6012236 "Asshole."
When it comes to Shimmer, the word you're looking for is "asshole".
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6012236
Very good comment.
Nonagon- I've been kind of skimming through and catching bits and pieces, so I don't know the while picture of this series yet, but wow. I'm blown away so far with what I've read. I'll put all of these on my to read list, and give my thoughts when I get a chance to catch up.
6027940
Actually, I don't think that one word does full justice for her though I can't exactly pin down something better. Sure she's a sadistic bitch that enjoys being an asshole to everyone around her, yet she still has an incredible amount of charisma. Normally I hate people like that, but here I find myself siding with Shining and I just can't seem to hate her.
Great visuals in this chapter by the way, that was quite the read.
6211057
I can! Hate Shimmer, I mean. Her life with Shining Armor is like Twilight here explained, way better than she deserves and infinitely better than she would ever acknowledge. In a way, it's the same with what's been happening all throughout these stories: Shimmer is always in control, always comes out on top, and an utterly horrible person in the process who thinks she's skilled but is just luckier than everybody else.
She's sorry for pushing Princess but not for kicking Spike?...