After defeating Tirek, Twilight notes that she's better at using alicorn magic than the other princesses. She decides it's best for the Kingdom if she names herself queen and keeps the power for herself. Bondage, violence, and eventually vo
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"I think Trixie just peed herself a little." said Trixie.
HA
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exactly
kek
Congratulations! Trixie will be next "biggest" broodmare.
LOL
This is wrong for all the wrong reasons. Twilight is a complete monster, she killed over a dozens of guards for not following her, killed their family, raped Celestia and Luna, forced Shining to become his own loving wife's abuser, someone who literally fought certain death to be with him, and then raped Celestia and Luna in front of a whole hall of ponies, and if implied, impregnated them, and then allowed for every other pony in the room to rape them. And then she's planning on keeping them alive to continue to rape them, which in very basic moral codes, is considered merciless to continue to torture somebody without killing them. So no, she wasn't a complete monster then, she was a complete monster from the beginning. No arguing about it.
Other than that, I just wished you gave Twilight's friends a chance to try and reason with her, because I wanted to root for them, but their baseless argument was fodder to Twilight, so I just end up wanting them to die. Because no matter how you slice it, if you have a baseless argument, then it doesn't matter if the other person's argument base is weak or strong, they're gonna win because they actually have a base for their argument to stand on. It just felt like you rushed this scene and didn't bother trying to improve on it, which is a real pity because these scenes have unimaginable potential to hit someone in the feels, and even then, at least try to not make it a total snooze fest to read through. And Trixie as the Element of Magic, really? You couldn't come up with a better substitute, like MoonDancer? It would make much more sense. And what does Zecora has to do in all of this? What purpose does she serve? And why the hell didn't they just give Trixie the Alicorn Amulet for crying out loud? Either go big or go home. And again, what the hell is Zecora's purpose, unless she was able to freaking bend fate and temporarily give Trixie the Element of Magic? But again, Trixie is a terrible idea.
And one last thing to say, that little bit of a fight scene is more rushed than a parody of a parody of a joke. Nothing overly exciting or even a bit attention grabbing, it's about as bland as a watching a wall of paint dry, like it just happens and doesn't stick with the reader. I feel like the reasons these scenes feel so choppy and pales in comparison to what you pulled off in the previous chapters. It's like you lacked any talent in writing a compelling scene other than a torture rape scene, or just rush it because you don't like it. It just feels like a good throwaway to something that could've been great or moderate, instead it became this bitterly bland stale potato chip that stood in the sun for the whole summer.
I think you all know how this ends 🤷
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Lol
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I laughed but then again spoiler trixie dies
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How does it end? I forget.