I stood here looking at this little filly Luna as If I were dumbfounded, in which I was. I back out of the room slowly so I don’t startle her, leaving the door open. I went to the fridge to see what was in there that she could eat. A couple minutes later, I found a salad in the back that wasn’t dressed. I come back to the room as slowly as possible, trying not to scare her. As I round the corner, I see that she went back under the covers, as a form of safety between me and her. I put the salad on the bed so she doesn’t have to go far from her “safety zone”. After placing the salad I exited the room so she could eat. I came back a couple minutes later to see the plate was empty of all the leafy greens. I took the plate to the kitchen, rinsed it off, and went to go sleep on the couch.
As I was sleeping, a bundle of warmth managed to lay beside me, but not on me. I was happy, even if she only came to me for comfort. As I start to doze off, I start to wonder how I am going to raise this filly while trying to keep everyone else away. It took me a while to realize I am going to have to go somewhere secluded from society, and a miraculous amount of money. That morning, I found that she had disappeared into my room again. So I went into the astronomy room to do some research on first, how to raise a pony, Second of all, where a good place to live, and lastly, how I need to get a decent amount of money in a short period of time. Then it hit me, a theory I developed would sell for at least $2 million dollars, but then I wouldn’t have the right to say it was mine. So I did what I had to do, I sold it. I had little filly. 2 weeks later she started to come out of the room more, but if I moved to fast she would just dart back in.
So I learned that if I don’t move in her line of sight she won’t dart back in her room. Yes I did say her room because I now consider that room highly off limits, only to give her food I am allowed in. As usual, I sleep on the couch, and yet she somehow gets near me and sleeps there. I once tried to get to sleep closer, but that never ended well. I startled her and she ended up kicking me in the head. A week later she started staying out of her room and more in the living room. I still think she doesn’t trust me, even if I do feed her and stay out of her room. One day, she started to snuggle next to me, I couldn’t move to the shock she actually came up to me without being asleep.
I spent the next 2 hours stunned at what had just happened. I started to move around, and she started feeling a little nervous. Before I did anything I noticed she didn’t have her cutie mark; In the show, I never knew how she got it. I slowly raised my hand over her, and she stared at my hand as it moved. I gently put my hand on her back, feeling her tense up then relax. I started to pet her, and that seemed to make her happy. This is where we started to become friendly to each other.
my god.... THIS IS AMAZING
my god.... THIS IS AMAZING
Like the story, but it seems to be rushing. Try to put more details as you write ,and try to put more dialogues.
Otherwise, it's nice.