You might as well title this series: Shining Armor Bangs Everyone With A Hole. <__<

*complains about TW and TH not being updated* Went back and reread TW. Still love that story.

Also, this needs more editing. Most of the mistakes were in the first chapter, but there were a number in the second.

Of course YOU would write this to satisfy you hrony desires

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Jesus man, I just wrote a story, calm down.
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I don't see how that works.

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First of all I'm not complaing, I like your stories a lot

So take my first comment as a compliment if you will

Second I just want I know

Is Celestia the sole ruler in this universe or does luna rule alongside her as an equal

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My apologies, I feel really bad now

Yes, Luna is in this universe, and she is seperated from Nightmare Moon.

Her time will come...

Hmm looks interesting will read when my dog isn't sleeping on my chest.

I like it a lot please update

Read it. Now the story was a little slow but very well written. Far and beyond most fics. You have also grasped the concept that detail is in fact important to a story. Well done. I look forward to more.

Bunch of odd or missing grammar floating around in this fic, but the concept is real neat as is the evolution of the story.

Fantastic, absolutely fantastic!
The story flows so well, the vocabulary is wide ranged, the characters are convinving, the background is full of possibilities and generally: beautiful!
Unfortunately, I have to give a word about the grammatical mistakes too, namely, the complete lack of the quotation marks, for example, you wrote *mares* instead of *mare's*.

Nevertheless, this story won my whole interest, please continue and create more!

Oh, and a biiig plus at the Faust swearings, oh I love it when someone acknowledges it.

-Zeph

Oh my Luna! You actually did it! You made Fembar! YESSSS!

Damn, way to leave me begging for more. This is my first experience finding a skilled, and convincing depiction of female sombra. Good work, please continue.

4712159 Though I would suggest a pre reader to catch all those minor grammatical errors that interrupt the flow of reading the chapter, very well done.

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*Except his wife.

That's what bugs me about this series. Like, Shining needs to nut the fuck up and tell Celestia to fuck off. Does he love his wife? Because, I mean, wasn't that the entire point of A Canterlot Wedding? That their love was so pure and strong it can overcome anything? I know, his memory is wiped, but cut the poor guy a break!

Don't misunderstand, it's a good series, and incredibly erotic, but I'm just a pathetic wimp who likes the idea of "true love," so all this playing around irks me.

Okay, so it's a given that these two are gonna bone, like... hard, but I really hope Shining puts this smug bitch in her place. SO far he's been the simpering submissive in these encounters. While the stubborn romantic in me agrees with my above post concerning Shining and his love for his wife, the soldier in me is chomping at the bit to see Shining show Umbra the true might of the Solar Guard. So, regardless of the fucking, Shining needs to kick the Queen's ass.

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I can't exactly tell you how it's going to pan out, for the sake of spoilers, but just rest assured that the issue will be addressed at some point in the future.

Shining Armor, should win... I mean if that land's rules are like that, there would be no negotiation if she wins seeing the "Southerners" weak.
And I would like to finally see Shining on top.
but anyway, a VERY Appreciated idea and Umbra being used. I can't wait for Eris... and maybe the Countess even? Tirek's r63

Frankly, I'm a little disappointed that this is R63 Sombra. What's the point? Aren't there enough female characters for Shining to bang? Call me a stupid fag, but I think it's kind of ridiculous to reverse the sex of one of the few male characters there are in order to make this hetero.

Don't get me wrong, I'm still going to read this, and I'm probably still going to love it just like the others. It's just an annoyance that came to me immediately upon seeing this.

Kinda reminds me of Cadia from W40k

Your interpretation of Queen Umbra strongly reminds of Queen Mab from the Dresden Files. Very nicely done.

fillies Gentelcoltes,

-Chik chik-

See you in hell.

It's a good story so far

Approves.

I'd approve even more, but I'm missing more chapters! I need to infuse you with inspiration somehow. *throws piles of bits at you*

Hmmmm...
I approve.

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Wow, you are right! (Love that series btw)

This is written quite well, and I like the dialogue so far. This is on my watch list for more.

Have a green thumb!

I was hoping Cloptober was going to be the one, but apparently it was not!

Better luck next month!

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I hope in future installment of this series we get to see Shinning Armor with:
Eris the r63 version of discord:
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and the r63 version of Tirek:
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For the unedited version of the first pic try reverse search image the pic in images google or on Derpibooru you will find the uncrop version. And to find another pic where the R63 Tirek is draining magic though sexual acts you can try looking up the artist who calls by the name "cold blooded twilight" you will find it.
And is Shinning Armor gonna have a harem full of villainesses (including Nightmare Moon) by the time this series is done?