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Dragonborne Fox
It's one thing to create/throw already-established characters in a story of some kind. It's another thing to develop those characters, regardless of the situation they're in.
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Nice story you have there. Short introduction chapters with needed information and a glimpse at the character. Looking forward for more.
A little thing though. It'd be better to read when you put the translation right behind the text in brackets and not in authors notes where the reader would've to scroll every time such a scene comes up.
Faved and liked for future readings and a promising start.
And thank you for entering the mayhem contest.
Dragon
4668974 You're welcome. The reason I did the author's note thingy was because I momentarily forgot the actual translation for a few moments (I swear to god I hate my own brain sometimes.) I shall fix it immediately.
Trust me, the original version was a complete clusterfuck. Sure, people liked it, which is why I left it up. This is a much cleaner (as far as execution goes) and more serious re-write.
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Well then. We shall see what awakes.
And don't worry about the translation thing. I wouldn't even know what those words meant. And the best thing is you can always fix it.
Dragon
4669118 Indeed.
A thing you might want to change. AJ is Braeburn's cousin, not his sister.
And about twelve sentences later "The orange stallion took kept going straight ahead," I think the took might be too much there.
Otherwise nice chapter.
Dragon
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I was actually trying to correct that phrase where took-kept happened. I got a map of Ponyville for reference when it happened. XD
Another awesome chapter!
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'Nother nice chapter.
Just pray tell. From the last time we saw her to the situation she is now in, did the thing I think happened to her, happen to her? The one thing that shouldn't happen to any girl or woman ever?
I hope not.
Dragon
4708206 Whoa whoa WHOA, you're getting a bit ahead of yourself. Just chill, and let me write out the rest. Answers will come in due time.
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Know that. Just love the mind games authors and readers play in the comment section.
Dragon
4709673 Same here.
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My brain promises me so much fun right now.
Dragon
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Didn't write last chapter so I'll do it now.
Knew it. Knew it right away that this little fuck had done her. I'd send him to a certain shed. Yeah, that one.
Dragon
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End of chapter. That question. Ugh. The pain in my heart.
Dragon
4773804 Ah.
From the way the story is running, I think it's exactly what she thinks it is.
*months later* congratulations. It's a filly/colt.
Dragon
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What is this a crossover of? Or did I already ask this?
4869651 You already asked me that. Waaaay back when. I went and Let's Played the crossover material.
Not too shabby for a clop scene.
Though you doubled a sentence.
Dragon
4894236 Fixed the double sentence. (I hate it when I do that.)
4894250 Happens. Just Twilight a bit more.
Triple checking the double checked checklist, checking the checked checklist of errors in your chapter.
Dragon
4894567 I finished the chapter right before going to bed. But yeah, I triple-check every few chapters to make sure I got everything right.
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Hush! Don't say that. You may wake the Twilight. She'll plan your whole life with studying.
Dragon
4894956 Speaking of Twilight, I went and put the story in the proper incoming folder. Now, I wait.
4869778 Oh... I'm sorry. I forgot.
4896588 It's alright.
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Hopefully not too long. :ajunsure:
Dragon
4896838 Exactly.
I can tell this is gonna be funny.
4902255 Yes.
Well. Koto seems to be a bit cranky. And the heat is rising. Period.
Dragon
4904552 Yes. Yes she is.
Trying to put a new spin on 'rape-baby' are you?
4908010 Gettin' ahead of yo'self. I'm trying to update the story.
4909389 Oh, come on!
That was funny!
...
Bah!
4909417 Ah, I see.
4909421 Eh?
Now I'm confused.
4909484 I meant I got what you said earlier. I just woke up thirty minutes ago, my brain's still kinda fogged.
4909488 What did you think I meant?
4909510 I meant you found that funny.
That was...umm...yeah...awkward...-ish.
4960284 Indeed.
I'm almost surprised.
I'd have expected the house to have been made improbable to teleport into.
4965649 If you read back a hefty few chapters, you'll see it's been done before.
Good chapter, but about the name, the Roman Numeral for forty is XL