That night I was walking down the street and THERE WAS F*CKING FOG EVERYWHERE. As I continue walking through the fog I see a unicorn with a bucket full of food get startled by pony in a cloak. I hide behind a cart and peek over it to see what happens. The reason I was hiding was because that pony in the cloak was giving off some pretty bad vibes.
"Very sorry, heh you came out of nowhere" The unicorn with the bucket said. Then when the cloaked pony talked I thought his voice was really creepy.
"Is he friend or is he foe the pony wondered" The creepy cloaked pony said.
"I can assure you I am no friend, I am Lord Tirek" said Tirek while holding up his hand and clenching it.
"And I will take what should have been mine long ago" Tirek said as he seemed to suck the magic out of the unicorn's horn via a blue stream of magic. Then a few seconds later the unicorns Cutie Mark disappeared and he fell to the ground with very dull and lifeless eyes as Tirek grew a little bit. I stared in both a mix of fear and shock. So after I saw what happened I got the fuck out of there while trying to not say "HOLY BALLS!". I went back to my room in the palace and slammed my door shut while breathing heavily. I wondered if what I saw was real or if it was just my imagination. I decided that I was to tired to think about it right now so I turned in for the night.
why are why short.
Wait is mark human?
i like that markplier is here it's just that it's way to ....jumbled is the best i can say. always love markipoo but it doesn't have structure or how did mark even got there or even how the other ponies reacted to him. like did it take a month for equestria to get used to marky or a year? did he get stoned and mark just make a joke and became friends with discord and made him good (.....ish) or what. i think you need an editor and restart or revised this story. this is by no way flame at you just a suggestion and some advise. please keep writing and do your best.