You are invited to trade lives with a pony from Equestria as a respite from Earth. The deal sounds too good to be true. With no strings attached the deal winds up being more than you have bargained for.
Normally I'm not a fan of Brony in Equestria stories. At all. Or tragedies. At all. But this has definite promise to it, and I hope that in spite of that orange tag hanging over his head like an executioner's blade, our protagonist will be able to explain his case and that cooler heads will prevail.
It could use a bit more spacing in between the paragraphs as it looks more like a wall of text than anything else. But aside from that, you keep up the good work.
Very good story I quite enjoyed it though I only have one problem,spacing.Other then that a good read and I hope to see more Faved,liked and followed.
Normally I'm not a fan of Brony in Equestria stories. At all. Or tragedies. At all. But this has definite promise to it, and I hope that in spite of that orange tag hanging over his head like an executioner's blade, our protagonist will be able to explain his case and that cooler heads will prevail.
ETA on next chapter?
A HiE with a plot?! They say these only exist in the realm of darkest fantasy!
This has gotten my attention. Please continue asap! BTW, I really am liking this characters introduction into Equestria.
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Liked and faved.
Thos is going to be good
awesome
Continue...
It could use a bit more spacing in between the paragraphs as it looks more like a wall of text than anything else. But aside from that, you keep up the good work.
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Working on chapter 2 right now.... I had no idea this story would explode...
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I have been told this a few times... and it also seems that such a format is what everypony else on here uploads with as well...
4466143 Yeah. That way, it makes the story easier to read.
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Fixed
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Ah, now this is better. Have a like, fav, and follow.
Keep writing!
Words to live by, in more ways than one.