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    New Stuff!

    Hey, followers. I have a new story coming out! This is a collaboration with the author Cade YYZ ( http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Cade%20YYZ ).

    I just wanted to give you guys and gals a heads-up; I just submitted it for approval, so it'll be up soon. It's mainly about the Princesses, but our two favorite musical mares may or not may not be involved in a large way... :D Those two really make writing worth it. I'd appreciate the read when it's published, so keep an eye out for the Prologue and Chapter 1!

    In addition, I'd like to give a large shout-out to Jackie (also known as JackiePhantom13) for being not only the cover artist, but also an awesome person. Everyone should go check out her DA: http://jackiephantom13.deviantart.com/ . Comment, view her stuff, give her points; whatever you DA people do. She deserves it.

    Finally, if anyone is interested in my own personal stuff, I am still working on my Rarity x Cactus shipfic. It's taken waaay longer than expected due to unfortunate interferences like work, school, and a personal life. I should work on getting rid of those.

    Anyway, hope to see you reading (and commenting) again soon.

    -Aryn


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When Octavia and Vinyl Scratch decide to combine their respective musical styles into a new genre that will celebrate not only their talent, but also their unique bond, they feel confident that they're the pioneers of the new age. So when the two find their music challenged by another pair of musicians, they set out to make sure that theirs is the best. However, the rival two aren't bad artists themselves, not to mention they’re certainly not… of the same persuasion as Vinyl and Tavi. In the snow-wrapped streets of Manehattan, can they risk exposing their new found -and still taboo- relationship, or will they be doomed to second place?

Incredible cover art by JackiePhantom13! DA: http://jackiephantom13.deviantart.com/

EQD!!

Link: http://www.equestriadaily.com/2012/04/story-mixing-relationships.html

First Published
4th Apr 2012
Last Modified
24th Jun 2012
#1 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Oh good, it's here, too. You might want to let EqD know about this mirror, BTW.

#2 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>408030

I sent them an email to update the page, yeah. They just haven't yet, I guess. :applejackunsure:

#3 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Very nice and cute!

#4 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Definitely setting this on watch. Read a few choice sections, and as far as I can tell, this is something I'm definitely gonna have to read.

#5 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Very nice, very nice. Keep up the good work!

#6 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Vinyl/Octavia is my favorite shipping. The real good stories with them have amazing music and the teasing is hilarious. Vinyl is awesome, too sad that she dont have a real appearance in the show except for her 5 sec. unbelievable. 5 sec and she become a Legend.

#8 · 133w, 12h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Noooo! I must know who the voice is! :fluttershbad:

#9 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

And Suddenly... Pinkie Pie:pinkiehappy:

#10 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

They're so adorable! I love that they, as a couple, are both doing what they love, and then combining it together. Just love it! :rainbowkiss:

#11 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Did you HAVE to write this center alligned? I'm sorry my 3ds does not do center allignment and I'm banned from my computer.

#12 · 132w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>443053

My bad. Fixed.

#13 · 132w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>443609 Thanks. Great story by the way.

#14 · 132w, 13h ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

Cute so far. Why would you apologize for a cliffhanger?

#15 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

UNSOLICITED ADVICE : :scootangel:

(I've been writing for years myself and yes it's still an amazing feeling to create something out of nothing)

It's a good premise but I do feel like I've read this version of Vinyl and Octavia a million times before.

You just need to make the characters your own more, need even a few little different details.

You don't want people to claim you're just piggybacking off VST and Allegrezza.

While yes it was cute (thanks for the diabetes) I felt that it was possibly all style and flashy quips and not enough substance.

You have enough potential for a good plot but you just need to make something in your characters that your readers can latch onto.

Don't be afraid to challenge the fanon depictions and go your own way.

You need to be adding to the fanon not just reusing past fanon.  You can build off it yes but the reason to write fanfic is to add to the community, that you feel something is missing that you think needs to be there. So you accepted what has gone before you but then you throw in fresh ingredients.

We cannot just have the old 'look how cute they are when they bicker' version of them. The plot of the music rivals seems very interesting and what could make this really interesting is in the dynamic the characters have with each other. Not just random quips but like you see around you, people (well ponies in this case) are complicated and have many layers.  I think this could be a great read if  you elevate the characters from fanon stereotypes to full characters that we can really connect with.

"You may not be a Picasso or Mozart but you don’t have to be. Just create to create. Create to remind yourself you’re still alive. Make stuff to inspire others to make something too. Create to learn a bit more about yourself"

You have the ability to do this, to breathe life into these characters so don't be afraid to put the characters in tight situations instead of just cute ones,

readers love to find out exactly what characters are made of and how they handle problems.

But of course have fun. Writing is one of the best things I think a person can spend their time doing. :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>451128

Wow, that was a lot of advice. Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

I have to respond to a few of those comments. 1st of all, yes, I have read Allegrezza and VST, and I loved them both. And yes, I am taking the majority of Vinyl + Tavi's personalities and description from the fanon. I'm also taking (somewhat) their relationship from the fanon. See, I didn't want to make up a different Vinyl or a different Tavi. I love the fanon descriptions of them! I really didn't (and still don't) want to change them in any major ways. I'm sorry if you've seen these iterations before; I personally love them and want more of them. That's why I'm writing in that style. However, you are correct in that we need to see more than just them sparring verbally, and I hope to get more into that in later chapters. They do have normal conversations. Don't get confused, though; this is a comedic story, so much of it does have to have some laughs.

What I wanted to accomplish with this story was taking the two pre-established characters and their pre-established relationship (with a little history thrown in) and put them into a storyline of my own making with characters of my own making. They're not stereotypes exactly, they're more like.... like  (and I am nerding SO HARD right now :twilightsheepish: ) playing D&D with one character. You make your character, and then you can reuse him/her for various campaigns and storylines. Same character, same traits, different surroundings, different story.

(By the way, I'm not planning to have them get married or anything like that at the end, because, even though it would be sweet, that particular storyline has been done to death.) So yes, I am taking some things from the fanon straight, but ONLY the characters and their relationship. The difference is that I'm going to fit them into writing of my own. I don't consider that copying, and I'm sorry if you do... :fluttershysad:

And hey, don't knock me on the plot yet. :raritywink: I've only posted up to chapter 3 at this point, and there are a LOT more to go. I'm thinking around 10 at the moment, but it could be more or less. Believe me when I say that the music rivalry is going to be the main conflict, and that, even though Vinyl and Tavi will have their own moments outside of it, the main conflict is going to take up most of the story. Like I said earlier, I may be using pre-existing characters, but the plot and OC's are going to be all mine.

Finally, thanks for the compliment! And I really appreciate the feedback. I rarely hear any of it, and you were both polite and informative. Extremely helpful! :D

(Oh, and I love writing. You're right, it is a good way to spend time. :twilightsmile: )

#17 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Yay, Update:yay:

I really liked it and im glad to hear there will be more:twilightsmile:although im not so keen on the waiting part though:twilightsheepish:

#18 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

It's probably for the better there are less story updates for all these fics i'm tracking, seen as I have exams too, but I cant help feeling sad each time an author predicts llonger waits for updates...

#19 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

^^^^^Sorry, everybody. I'll do my best to keep them coming! Just wanted to establish the fact that it could happen. :scootangel:

#20 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

I know that feel :ajsleepy: High-level university exams on the way sadly. Anyway, another great little chapter, looking forward to the next one when you get round to it. Keep it up! :twilightsmile:

#21 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

I'd literally just said to myself: "You're going to bed now, there's only been one story update this week and still you sit here every evening refreshing the page every 15 mins or so..."

And then, just as i was about to close my browser this pops up! :pinkiehappy:

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Edit:

Once again, good work on the chapter. Particularly enjoyed Vinyl upending the wine on Lyricas head.

#22 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

all kinds of cute. Too bad they're still hungry ponies.

#23 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Gotta love Vinyl, the trouble maker. :derpytongue2:

Loved it!

#24 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

(that awkward moment when you realize that equine height is measured, not in feet, but in hands.... :lyrahappy:)

I love Vinyl's little asides and comments. This has been most entertaining.

#25 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Loved it. All of it. Utterly and completely. :rainbowlaugh: :rainbowwild:

#26 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

MORE? VERE AHR DIS PONIES COMINK FROM? :rainbowlaugh:

Loved it. Great update, can't wait to see where thisis going. Keep it up.

~Caffeinated Brony~

#27 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

this? this right here? this is awesome.  keep doing more of this.

#28 · 130w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

The moustache killed me. I swear. Too much. You're awesome

#29 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

And them came the awkward talk with the villains

Gak
#30 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

Do i wield the power of first?

Gak
#31 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

It appears I do. Well anyway I love this story. I cant wait for more conflict between these rivals. I feed of it xD

#32 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

Oh wow. A sweet mix of adorabubble and funny in a single chapter? Win! Vinyl's reaction to the 'cute moment' made me giggle as well as d'aww so it seemed to transition cleanly from one scene to another. Oh, and can my back hooves find the faces of Lyrica and Vibrant Beats in all the violent glory I behold in them? They're itching to give out a good dose of FUCK YOU to ponies who deserve it. :pinkiehappy::raritywink::pinkiecrazy:

#33 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

This story is pretty awesome, i like both the comedy and the romance stuff, and here they seem to fit together well, so keep it up!

#34 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

i just lost it when I saw the TLT name drop, ahahahaha thats hilarious :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 129w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

i am really liking this story! can't wait to see what you pull next!

#36 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

so Vibrant's a DJ too? The thock plittens :rainbowderp:

VERY sweet octascratch moment there. Major congrats on that. Tho I can't wait to see Octavia's freakout when they realize her secret is exposed

#37 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>514359

And you may continue to, so long as you remember to use that power only for good! Or, y'know, at least only mild evil.

#38 · 129w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

? Since when have Vinyl's eyes NOT been red?

#39 · 129w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>536006

Season 2 finale. Vinyl's eyes APPEARED to be magenta. There's a lot of controversy over whether or not it was just the lighting, or what, but as far as I and most faithful Vinyl fans go, they will always be scarlet red. :D

#40 · 129w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

:twilightsmile: D'awwww! Very sweet romance and excellent writing all around! I'm super-excited to read the next chapter! Please keep writing, I'll keep reading.

#41 · 129w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>536306

Hey, thanks! :pinkiehappy: I intend to!

#42 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

"Kissing her gently on the snout..." I'm pretty sure ponies don't have snouts.

Also, I really like what you did with Vinyl's personality. I always imagined her as kind of a snarky, annoying Tony Stark type, but I really like what you've done with her and Octavia.

#43 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

"The eyes are windows to the soul." The eyes are not windows to the soul, they are doors. Beware what may enter through them. Honestly, have you learned nothing from Doctor Whooves?

#44 · 128w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 6 ·

>>572179

Thanks, glad you like it! And yeah, maybe it should have been muzzle? Ah well, not a big deal. :derpytongue2: And in response the other comment, I never watched Dr. Who. It's a great source of personal shame... :fluttershysad:

#45 · 128w, 4h ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

I loves this story

#46 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Ha, love the comedy in this chapter. Really loved it, keep up the good work! :pinkiehappy:

#47 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

I sometimes ask myself why most of my tracked stories are octavia/vinyl ones, but then I read an upadate and everything becomes clear again.

#48 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Vinyl's initial reaction was my favorite part.

#49 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Yay! The story continues :rainbowkiss:

#50 · 127w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Loving how this is going... and is anyone else reading Viny's lines in the voice of Rainbow Dash, or is it just me?

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