Chapter 1
Welcome Home
‘Man it is good to be back home and to my old self’ was all I could think about as blinding light fading reveling our friends and Princesses Celestia waiting for us. As Twilight and I walk towards the girls I couldn’t help but feel somewhat funny but chalked that one up to just coming back from an alternate dimension. That though was quickly dismissed when I noticed how they all had a shocked and confused look on their faces.
“Huh, is something wrong girls? I thought you would be happy to see us.” I asked with a concerned tone.
“O-oh we are happy to see you both back save and sound darling. But…”Rarity said not looking me in the eye.
This was when Twilight finally looked over to her right to see what could be wrong. The next few words that came out of her mouth raddled me to my very core.
“Spike! You’re still a dog!” Twilight shouted running over to me to getting a better look for herself.
“WHAT!!” I yell as I turn around to look into the mirror and see a gift from our time abroad that I really do not want. There I stood a dog just like in the human world. But I wasn’t the little puppy I was there, I was much larger then I was there. I was just shy of being around the size of an average pony, my ear fins where now normal dog ears (with fur around the ears to match my old fins.). There I stood a purple and green teenage (just taking a shot in the dark on that) dog.
“W-why didn’t turn back to a dragon like how you turned back to a pony!” I shout to Twilight without looking from my reflection in the mirror.
“I don’t know Spike. Everything should have gone back to normal when returned” Twilight stated with a somewhat shacking voice. She was clearly racking her brain trying to figure out what could have gone wrong.
“Well tell ‘should have’ to my paws, or to my lack of scales!” I say with a somewhat snarl as I wave my paws in her face.
“Spike calm down I am sure Twi’ didn’t know anything like this could happen when you two went into that crazy mirror” Applejack says in a calming voice as her and the rest of the girls walk over to me.
“Yea and besides look at you Spike you make such a cool looking doggie” Pinkie says as she start to pet my head. I have to admit I do like the feeling of being petted but I can’t help but not like the idea of being treated like a common pet.
“She is right Spikey-Wikey you do look like a absolutely adorable like a dog,” Rarity says as walk next to me and stroke her hoof against my cheek causing them to turn slightly red. “Your fur is so soft and silky I know some mares that would kill to have their mane like this”
I turn my head away to stop her from touching me and also to try to shack the blush before I speak again. “Thank you girls for trying to make me feel better but I don’t want to be a dog. I want to be a dragon like I am supposed to be.” I turn back around and walk to Celestia. “You can fix this can’t you princess? I won’t be stuck like this right; I spent enough time as a dog in that other world.”
Celestia tried to keep her poker face up to keep me calm but with all of the time I spent with her I could see past it. I could see the worry and sadness behind the mask she spend thousands of years perfecting. “I do know what has gone wrong with your return home young Spike but rest assured that we all will do everything we can to try to return you back to normal.” Celestia says as she places a hoof on my shoulder. Looking into my eyes doing everything she can to try to comfort me in this crazy time.
I sigh as do the only thing I can do at this moment. I accept that I am stuck as a dog alittle while longer till we find a cure for this. “Thanks Princess Celestia, I trust you and Twilight will find a way to get be back good as new.” I say with a weak smile showing off my new canine teeth. My mind can’t stop thinking how did this all go so wrong.
The Princess returned the smile and removed her hoof. “I’ll go to the library to see what I can find to help you Spike. I would recommend taking this time to try to get some rest. You both have been through an experience and even more of a shock returning home. After saying this Princess Celestia disappeared with a teleportation spell.
As I am lost in my own mind I didn’t notice Twilight walking up to me till she wrapped her forlegs around my neck and burry her face into me. I feel her start to cry as she nuzzles into my neck whispering something too low for me to hear till she finally start to speck loud enough for me to hear.
“I am sorry Spike. I am so very sorry. You are stuck like this because you came with me to help get back my crown. If I had been a better princess I wouldn’t have lost it in the first place. I-if I was a better student I would have made sure everything would have been okay for us to go and come back. *sob* I-if I was a better sister I wouldn’t have put you at risk in the first place!”
I feel my heart break seeing her like this. I may be the one in a shitty spot (what else is new) but she is this. I know Twi better then she knows herself, and I know that she will blame herself and run herself ragged to try to fix me back even if she breaks down doing so. There is no way I am going to have her do that to herself not even for my sake, the last thing I want is to see her trying to do everything herself again.
I start to run my paw through her man and stroking her gently to try to calm her down. “Hey, hey Twi I don’t blame you for anything. There is no way you could have seen any of this coming. You are a great princess, student and even better sister. I know you will find a way to fix me but I won’t have you overwork yourself for me. We made it back healthy and alive; I see that as a win in my book.” Her crying turns into slight sobbing as she pulled out of my neck and looked me in the eye. “Besides it is not like I don’t have experience being a dog anyway. Also have you looked at me” I strike a pose straighten out my body to its full height showing off every muscle under my fur. As I am showing off my new stature I turn to Twilight and give her a wink. “I am one sexy beast if I do say so myself.”
This gets a giggle out my crying mare. Unfortunately for me I forgot all the other girls were still in the room. I hear laughs break out behind me, when I turn around I see every one of them at the brink of tears laughing at my little showing. “Ha ha, laugh it up girls. You all just wish you would look half this good if you became a dog overnight.” I say while rolling my eyes trying to get over my embarrassment.
“I- I am sorry Spike it was just too funny seeing you strike that pose like that. But you do seem to be quite a healthy and powerful breed of dog. I would love to give you an examination later to make she everything is okay with you physical.” Fluttershy say as she straightens herself up after her little laughing fit.
“Sure Fluttershy that sounds like a good idea. I wouldn’t want to find out that I am missing like a kidney or something.” I say with a grin that is until I see Twi start to get that worried look on her face. “I am kidding Twilight. I am sure nothing is wrong, in case you forgot I have been a dog before. So I kinda know how I should feel to be a healthy one.” I state to her giving her one my famous reassuring smile.
That seemed to do the trick since I see the worried look fade from her face. I noticed some extra weight on my back and when I turned around I saw Rainbow Dash leaning against me. “It is kinda funny seeing you this big squirt. Not to mention having hair, just think of all the fun new pranks this opens up for me and Pinkie to play.” Dash says as with a smirk on her face. Clearly she is thinking of all kinds of new ways to try to torture me.
If I am going to be stuck as a dog for however long I will not spend that time worrying about what she might be planning for me. So I quick roll my hip to the side making her fall off of me. Before she can grain her balance I turn around and place my paw on her shoulder and press down with some of my weight pinning her to the floor. I look down at the startled Dash with a cocky grin. “Looks like I am not that much of a squirt anymore huh Dash. I wouldn’t get any funny ideas about trying to prank me ether. Who knows what a bad dog could do to something like… oh I don’t know a Daring Do collection or living ‘little’ surprises on your front step” I say with a toothy grin on my face.
The look of pure fear at the mention of her prize collection and being left with unwanted presents at her house almost brought a tear to my eye. “Okay okay! You win no pranks just don’t touch the collection and please don’t shit on my step. That is just super gross!” A disgusted Dash pleaded.
“You have a deal Dash.” I say in between laughs as I let her up off the floor. “Well I don’t know about you girls but I’m starving and could really use a bite to eat. Anyone want to join me?” I say as I walk towards the door. I hear Twilight stomach growl next to me already giving me her answer.
“Sure Spike lets go down to the dining hall and get something to eat as we try to talk and figure out what we are going to do next.” Twilight says as she runs to catch up with me at the door with the rest of the girls following shortly after her.
As we walk to the dining hall I can’t stop thinking about why did this happen to me. I mean I can’t say I am surprised, I am a magnet for shit to backfire on me but this is on a whole different level. I was having a hard enough time being a dragon, having people always being afraid of what I could become at any moment. But at least that doesn’t mean being treated like a pet; I have had enough of people looking down on me when I lived in Chamalot. There is no way I am going to let it start up all over again. Even if I am a dog for now I am still Spike.
Really interesting concept, and more realistic and detailed version of Spike's reaction about still being a dog after Equestria Girls.
The other ones about Spike being raped by Winona were just awful, but THIS, this is awesome dude, like and fav.
4343356 Thanks that means alot, I am trying to show that Spike is still the bad-ass that we all know he is even when he is a dog. I will upload my cover art and original art when i finish working on them.
It's a good concept so far and I enjoyed it, but it would help in reading if you make it easier to tell when someone is talking. Sometimes I think other characters are still talking only to realize that a new one has later.
4343410 I will make sure to do just that. I know in the later chapters I written already I made sure to make it clear who is speaking. So that should be better in the next chapter to come.
funky concept,but I like it.
I think this was a good opening. You got the right kind of reaction down for Spike realizing he hadn't changed back, and everyone's concern for him. I can't wait to see how this will continue on.
4343458 Lol thanks that means alot. Is that a good funky like 80's disco party, or bad funky like my dogs breath after he got into my onion rings last week.
I like it, and I can see where you are going with the story too. Just fix up some grammar errors and tighten up the humor, and this can actually be a interesting story!!!!!
You have my support!!!!!!
4343477 Thanks, I am trying to keep it the most Spike-ish responses to the events that are happening around him. I feel as though he would be upset about not changing back but try to keep others from feeling down themselves. Anyway I will do my best to live up to everyone hopes for a serious Spike the Dog story.
4343483 Thanks I am going to do just that. I know grammar is far from my strong point to be honest but I feel I can tell a interesting story and create a Spike we all can grow to love.
Not bad. Not bad of a start
4343575 Thanks I plan on becoming even better as I go. I know the start was a little rough. I do feel I have a understanding how of Spike (or at least my Spike) as a character.
Love it there are a few errors nut they arent glaring so they dont matter but this:
Dash realizes that she lives in a cloud home so how would he do any of this??
but anyway id be happy to preread of design a cover art
4343628 I will have some art out I hope by tomorrow morning, I have to borrow my friends scanner lol. I know she lives on a cloud, it was more of the idea of the threat then the threat itself. I mean if I told you I was going to shit on your step even if I can't really,just the idea makes your skin crawl right lol. But anyway thanks for readying and i know there are a few errors, I will try to better with them as i go on.
Congratulations on your first story. Anyway normally I hate anything having to do with Spike being a dog but I'm curious as to where you're going with this. It will be interesting to see how Spike proves himself in his new form. Maybe later on he could change from dragon to dog whenever?
4343695 Thanks. I can understand that you could hate Spike the Dog. Every story but one I have read so far has been mainly about him getting raped. I want to show that even in dog form Spike is still the hero and interesting character that we all know he can be (even if he doesn't know it himself at first.) Not to mention there are so many interesting creatures in MLP world that don't get enough air time. well my story I hope to fix that.
I didnt like dog spike as much as I dislike what radical has done to my game series with the sequel. Luckily, your description intrigues me and I will read when have time.
4343821 Great thanks alot
This has peeked my interest I shall keep on reading.
4343892 Thanks alot, I will do my best to not disappoint you
I hated Spike the dog in EG because it was reducing him from the friend/brother status to pet.
But I wonder how you'll play it in this story. I wonder if Spike will still have some of his dragon powers. Also, if he can't turn back to a dragon, he'll die sooner than the others characters...
It was an interesting start and I hope to see more.
4343907 That is the overall statement I have been hearing. Alot of people hate DogSpike from how he has been shown in not just EG but also in fanfics. I felt like that was a waste of a whole new world for Spike to explore. I plan on fixing all those mistakes that were made by making the bad-ass, sarcastic, good hearted, flirt Spike that we all came to know and love. In a world here he must protect those that can't protect themselves.
I like the image you chose for this story. It goes along nicely with how confident Spike actually is. I'll be looking forward to seeing more from this one. Don't you go quitting out on us now that you've piqued our interest, y'hear?
will read ASAP
4344002 K thanks can't wait to hear what you have to say
4343983 Don't worry I have no plans of quitting even if everyone hates my first story. I feed off of the fire to only become stronger and create something even better.
4344012 I dunno man. Seems like people are liking it. I mean, I like it. Gotta have some confidence. Some pizazz.
SOME PEP.
That was pretty good for a first story. The only problems were spelling errors, but looking forward to more chapters.
4344036 Thanks. Trust me I know full well that grammar is not one of my strong points. But I do plan on working on it as well as having more chapters. No stopping half way, I wont stop till I show Spike in his full bad ass Doggy goodness lol
Good concept and good idea, gonna keep an eye on this =D.
great work so far Corporal!
besides a few errors in spelling, this seems to be a great piece of work cant wait to see what you brew up next.
Panzerbrony
commander of the spike division
4344137 I am trying to dug the whole DogSpike out of the gutter it has been dropped and and make it into something much more respectable
Interesting story. I like how you keep things short and straight to the point. Fave
4344155 I notice the grammar errors and plan to fix those on the next chapters that will be coming out before long. I feel that my idea is refreshing and that is the draw of it. I want to make DogSpike not be the black sheep of the Spike family anymore but another viable idea to be used without people thinking your crazy.
4344172 Thanks, the next chapter will be a little longer though, but I just try to say and do what i feel the characters would really do.
4343955 I'll have an open mind to your fic. I admit that there is porential in the premise.
The reason why I didn't like EG was because it reduced Spike's role from friend/brother to a simple pet.
4344226 Hey I am with you there 100%. I mean Twi becomes a human and Spike becomes a "dog". Really?! Then the only time you really get to see him is when he is up Rarity's ass (no offense to the shipping though) I just mean he was the only one to go over to that world with her and he get reduce to that. Not cool. And that is what I am going to fix!
4344240 you first had my curiosity, now you have my full atention.
I wonder how you'll develop this.
4344240 you first had my curiosity, now you have my full atention.
I wonder how you'll develop this.
4343709 I look forward to more stuff.
4344179 you are correct there my friend and remember if you need an editor the division is always welcome to anyone
4343508 Can't say I've read a serious Spike the Dog fic, but I like this concept and where it leads!
...What? Oh, sure, I'll tell him.
The Spike Army supports your endeavor!
He still have his dragon powers right?
Not a bad start, but the summary almost made me think he would end up as a Diamond Dog.
4344763 Oh and why is that. I would love to know how you got that idea for a while.
4344775
Nothing major, it's just the first thing that came to mind in the thought that he wouldn't be a dragon or a pony after returning from the mirror world. Might have been that he 'isn't a puppy'
Alright, man, this is something interesting I like where this is going and can't wait to see more. In the name of the Spike Army, I salute you, my friend. Keep it up.
4344763
That's what I thought too, or some kind of Cerberus dog.
Dude, this is a good read. Been far too long since I've read a first person story, so I'm due for one, and I'm glad that this is my start. Spike begin a teenaged dog seems fairly interesting and leaves me to wonder how he is going to prove that he deserves some respect. I can't wait to see more from you.
You need a pre-reader and an editor or two. A number of spelling mistakes, words left out, and other errors made it very difficult to concentrate on the story you are trying to weave. I shall fave for now, in the hopes that you find someone to help with your storytelling.