This is a story of a Courier who meets five different females who came to the Mojave Wasteland. Question is will he be prepare to fight against the odds while trying balance this new relationship? Lets find out!
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I've only read a bit of this chapter, and I can definitely say it needs some work. I'd be happy to proofread or edit for you, it looks like it could be a decent story if polished up a bit.
Well... i'm not a grammar nazi or anything but the writing in this is just... bad. Maybe i'll read this after it has been fixed.
Klein not speaking in all caps? WHAT IS THIS ILLOGIC?!
Seriously though, this needs MAJOR editing. Also, might just be me, but the way this Courier talks is really irritating.
And why the hell did you have to run around Big MT when most (If not ALL) of the things you need are already in the Sink?
This is sadly unreadable in its current iteration because of the dire need for editing. If you need someone to overhaul the editing, let me know.