Data Disk, an Earth pony from Pittspur, ventures into the Equestrian Wasteland after meeting a unicorn who claims to be able to solve his problems. Little does he know the dangers that await him... or the danger that walks by his side.
and maybe this is less of an overall pacing issue and more so with the structure of this specific scene.
I think it also might be because of the massive rewrite Galvin and I did of this chapter and the next when we were a bit into the third. Regardless, I will keep it in mind in the future.
as I thought it was going to be a simple job until he mentioned wanted the Crystal Goddamn Heart.
Just so you know, your story was added to the Fallout Equestria Group by G-Man64. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions!
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I think it also might be because of the massive rewrite Galvin and I did of this chapter and the next when we were a bit into the third. Regardless, I will keep it in mind in the future.
Working as intended.
really good so far
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Glad you liked it. Do you have any suggestions on what I could do to make it better?