Seriously?

Thats a cracked up pairing right there. Also, didn't think I'd find straight shota on this site, but then this....

Normally I don't get into foal clopfics, but for this I made an exception. Maybe because it seemed like such an odd ship? Maybe because in the back of my head I thought there might be some Thunderlane in there? Maybe, even, because Cloudchaser just looks awesome? I'm not sure. Either way, I was pleasantly surprised by what I found. There were some very cute moments in there, enough that it made me wonder what this would be like as a cute shipfic rather than a clopfic. I digress, though. Few typos aside, it was fairly well done, and seeing as how it's Incomplete, I'm actually waiting for more chapters. Never thought I'd say that about a clopfic before! Nice job.

Yum yum. How cute!

I gotta say, that was pretty good. There were a bunch of small grammatical errors but nothing drastic. Sooo yeah, kudos.

I Uploaded this to the directory if you don't mind. I can take it down just as well.

This was good! And I mean REALLY good! Dude if you keep this up I will have no choice but to watch you! I mean holy FUCK that was good! I really do hope to see more from you!

Stay frosty!
~Hazard~

You have my attention.

If this really is incomplete, by all means continue.

This is a very good piece of clop here. And, if I am not mistaken, the first piece of straight shota in this site.
Eagerly awaiting for more.

I can't believe I'm sayint this, but this was cute. I mean, I never thought that a story like this would be so sweet. I hope you write more of this pairing. I want to see more of them. They make such a great couple.

(I can't believe I'm liking the idea of an older mare with a young colt, but you pulled it off.)

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I'm slightly ashamed that I know what "Shota" means...

NONETHELESS, this is a great story, really damn sexy.
Continue

"Augh! Stoppit!" said the foal to the grown mare.

And then they had sex.

Stay classy, fim community :)

401540 Aren't we always?

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I like crack ships. Anyone can write appledash, but it takes skill to write, say, Mayor x Gilda, and make it work (skill that I absolutely lack, in that specific case )

is there going to be more?

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I'm working on it!

I foresee his brother having a crush on her too, and a shitstorm will ensue.

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...I read everything in Alan Wakes voice. Don't know why...

I was going to mention it being incomplete and wanting more, but because you said you were working on it...

...I'll mention it anyway, oh god, I want more.

Read this on tumblr yesterday. At work. Things got a little... constricted... downstairs.

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...I'd ask what kind of work you do that you browse clop from there, but I'm afraid i might get an answer

It'd be hilarious if she got pregnant.

I posess the strangest of boners right now. Ugh.

Cloud Chaser is a slut.

Cute clopfic. Btw you described Cloud Chaser as a filly. She's not a filly, she's about as grown up as the Mane 6

I am so glad I stumbed on this fic.

Why is it that I like this? Oh yeah now I remember, it's vaguely familiar with a past experience I had just not as... Intimate, damn she was cute too, apparently so was I for being only like 8 or 9 years old...

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...Is there a Mayor/Gilda fic?

I think this was written really well, only that there were a few things that put me off, but that's just because my personal writing style is... Different ^^

Great job though!

Inspired by Tiarawhy at all?

Not bad. Not bad at all. Fun little read.

424635 Or an orgy.

2005946 My first thoughts when I read this, too.

A pair of battered foal-sized roller skates rested by the door,

Just a quick note, you might want to change that to set; four hooves, not two.

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Yep. I forget what it was called, but there is a clop fic with them inspired by that comment.

Cloud chaser is best pony.
That is all.

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I'm surprised nopony posted the actual comic yet.

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...There's a comic? Really?

392470 ... XD oh god all i hear when i read your comment is your pictures voice. (shitstorm for not knowing his name i know... i want to say tom hanks.)

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Nicholas Cage.

He went with Spectrum and Starburst.

....I have an OC named Spectra and Star Burst......
Well this is awkward

542044 I VWANT TO KNOW! I VWANT TO KNOW!

The begining scene with the bean-bag made me think of this:
roflcat.com/images/cats/270911980_0baa512314.jpg

Nice!

DAMN! You have just rightfully earned a like, fave and follow. HOLY SHIT THAT WAS GOOD.

Wow, that was very well written. You executed every action with precise detail, and just the right pacing. And the sex scene was probably one of the hottest I've read. And I've read a lot of clopfics. So that says a lot. You did really well on this! Keep up the awesome writing!

2970326 *SNNNNRK* Hahahaha! I have GOT to download that.

Ok, first of all, what is this shota that everypony's talking about? Second of all, this and a couple others are now in my favorites. This is a really good fic and I have read it, what, like 20 times now?

YOU GET LIKE AND FAVORITE!!!

2513613 Yep. I could only get to the first maybe ten panels, and I searched really hard, so it seems like somepony needs to get drawin'!

Hmm I found this very interesting. Very good story You get a like.

So hawt.