Looks like he should have paid more attention to what Celestia said about the garden. Plus, he probably should have waited until after dinner and after he asked Celestia about the garden before visiting it.
Dude/et, this is fan fiction, don't feel pressure, and don't stress(I know, easier said then done). If you want a successful fan fiction, just do you and don't worry about the rest.
Win the heart of the fainting princess with love's kiss; win the heart of the (semi) reformed arch-villain with a boot to the head.
THWAP "Did you just strike me?!" "You were being bad. Now stop it, sit down, and let's continue eating." "No! I will not-!" THWAP "You...! But...? I...? How...!? I..." "What did you learn?" "That I get to keep you now..." "Exactly. You get to- Wait, what?"
Looking okay, but a bit of a writing tip: If a character's explaining something long enough for more than one paragraph without interruptions, you don't need to add the end quotations and just start the next paragraph with another starting quote. If you're still confused, let me know.
6773480 Lol, now that I'm on winter break for a while hopefully I can get my ass in gear and actually update my stories instead of sitting at my laptop blankly like a mong like I have been for the past couple of months. So, probably another three months.
love this story so far
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dis gun be gud
Looks like he should have paid more attention to what Celestia said about the garden. Plus, he probably should have waited until after dinner and after he asked Celestia about the garden before visiting it.
Well... that was uncalled for.
Dude/et, this is fan fiction, don't feel pressure, and don't stress(I know, easier said then done). If you want a successful fan fiction, just do you and don't worry about the rest.
Calling it now, he's going to snap so hard he gains her respect.
Awesome story, keep it up!
Wow, the mistress of the night has some attitude problems.
Wow Nightmare went from 0 to 100 instantly...
6528828 That's the only way to go
Win the heart of the fainting princess with love's kiss; win the heart of the (semi) reformed arch-villain with a boot to the head.
THWAP
"Did you just strike me?!"
"You were being bad. Now stop it, sit down, and let's continue eating."
"No! I will not-!"
THWAP
"You...! But...? I...? How...!? I..."
"What did you learn?"
"That I get to keep you now..."
"Exactly. You get to- Wait, what?"
Celestia to Luna: "Awwww! They're adorable!"
she should reform her speech, just saying!
Looking okay, but a bit of a writing tip: If a character's explaining something long enough for more than one paragraph without interruptions, you don't need to add the end quotations and just start the next paragraph with another starting quote. If you're still confused, let me know.
6528987 Anymore?
6684628 Anymore
I know it's only been three months, but any idea when we will get the next chapter?
6773480 Lol, now that I'm on winter break for a while hopefully I can get my ass in gear and actually update my stories instead of sitting at my laptop blankly like a mong like I have been for the past couple of months. So, probably another three months.
Under pressure...
Pressing down on me, pressing down on you...
Under pressure...