Chapter 1
Chapter 1
I was tired, I was a little scared, I was hurt, and I was pissed. I came to Ponyville for… I don’t really know why I came to Ponyville, but it certainly wasn’t to have five of the Elements of Harmony attack me.
I ran through the field outside the little town as I was being chased by Rarity, Applejack, Pinkie and Fluttershy. Rainbow Dash was flying overhead and waiting for her next opportunity to dive bomb me. Fluttershy, in her defense, didn’t really seem to want to hurt me, but was there just in case I went back for the town. Rarity had tried to use her telekinesis on me, but for some reason, magic only ever affected me if it were cast by somepony extremely powerful. She had resorted to throwing things with her magic. Applejack had pelted me with a few apples already but was now trying to lasso me. Pinkie had used her party canon once already and made me wish I had fur more than ever, thanks to high velocity confetti and thousands of paper cuts.
“Get the buck outta our town, you damn monster!” Rainbow Dash yelled as she dove at me with one of her back hooves extended for a near sonic speed kick.
Luckily, my vertical, two-legged stance allowed me a great deal of maneuverability. As she dove in, I spun around, dropped one leg back for a pivot point, grabbed her lead hoof and used her own momentum to spin her around and fling her back up into the air. She tumbled, but would be able to recover before hitting the ground. “I already told you, I’m not a monster!”
“That’s wut all munsters say!” Applejack was furious that I had attacked her friend, despite the fact that she was the one who attacked me. She charged at me as fast as she could. Luckily for me, she didn’t expect me to side step and push her off balance as she ran by. She wouldn’t be hurt, but it would take her some time to recover. I would have to thank my cousin for all the special training the next time I saw him.
Of course, I could hurt these mares, but I really didn’t want to. For one thing, it wouldn’t help my image as a monster any. Another reason is that these five ponies made up almost all of the Elements of Harmony and I didn’t want my home to be without its greatest defense. Most importantly, they were friends of my cousin. Besides, I only wanted to escape now, I gained nothing by hurting them at this point.
Another volley of rocks were being thrown at me by Rarity. “You brute! How dare you hurt them!”
I caught two of the rocks, one in each hand, and dodged the others. “I didn’t hurt anypony and I never wanted to!” I threw the rocks I caught straight down to the ground.
Pinkie Pie, who I’d always heard was random beyond belief, suddenly appeared on my back. “HERE, I BROUGHT YOU THIS!” I’d also heard she was loud, but damn. She had dropped a gift box into my hands, but unless it was a clock, it sounded like I didn’t want it. I threw the ‘present’ in a random direction, unfortunately, that direction led to Fluttershy.
Hearing Pinkie gasp was enough to tell me I did a bad thing. The box didn’t hit her, thankfully, but I didn’t want to take a chance that it was harmless. I ran as fast as my tired legs would let me to get to her. For once today, luck was on my side. Right as I reached the box, I could hear its ticking was a great deal faster than it was when Pinkie dropped it on me. I threw it straight up in the air and dropped to cover Fluttershy’s body.
Turns out, my instincts were right. No sooner did I manage to cover her, then the box exploded. It showered candy down on me. Normally, this would serve to be only a minor annoyance, but with explosives propelling them… I could feel the blood starting to flow. Perfect.
I stood from over Fluttershy and could already tell I had no chance of winning any fight now. I could only watch Rainbow Dash come back for another attempt. There was no way I was going to be able to deflect or redirect her now. Adrenaline was keeping me up, but I was already tired before I was pelted. I could only imagine how much damage I would have taken if I hadn’t thrown the bomb away.
Dash was living up to her name and flying straight for me at speeds impossible for any other pegasus I knew. I tried to dodge, but I only managed to fall to the ground, catching a glancing blow as I did.
The momentum from the Dash’s blow caused me to roll on the ground… right into Applejack. She yelled something at me, but I couldn’t tell what it was thanks to the pain and disorientation. I could, however, feel the kick. Luckily, or unluckily depending on your view, I didn’t feel anything after that. What happened after had to be told to me by my cousin, Twilight Sparkle.
She teleported into the field where she had been told her friends had chased a monster out of town. She looked around to get her bearings. The first pony she spotted was Fluttershy, still curled up in fear. Then she saw the others standing over my unconscious and bleeding body.
“Do ya think it's… dead?” Applejack asked.
“I… don’t know. Maybe,” Rainbow Dash answered.
“No. Oh no, oh no, oh no.” Twilight galloped over to me. She shouldered past the others. She looked over me, the already obvious horseshoe shaped welts, the cuts on my face and the blood on my shirt. Twilight lifted my head to try and look into my eyes, but one was swollen shut and the other was simply closed. “No, no, no, no, no. Please, wake up.” She gently shook my chest. “No, this is so bad. You guys need to get out of here, now.”
“What are you talking about, Twi?” Rainbow asked, “it’s just some mons-”
“Don’t. Say. That. Word.” Her eyes gleamed with anger. “Go, right now. If she finds out what you did… oh, this is so bad.”
The five mares looked at each other in confusion. Rarity spoke up first, “if who finds out, Darling?”
Before Twilight could answer, the skies turned black. Not figuratively black either, genuinely black. Storm clouds raced in out nowhere and spiraled above them and roared with deafening thunder.
“It’s too late. She’s here.” Twilight looked despairingly up at the brilliant burst of light. The others followed her view and saw the most furious alicorn they have ever seen.
“WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!” The Royal Canterlot Voice was not something anypony was used to hearing, and now it was the last thing anypony wanted to hear. When Celestia touched down, the ground trembled beneath her hooves. She trotted over to me as all but Twilight stepped back to give her room. When she saw what had been done, her eyes shone white and tears formed but were evaporated instantly.
“Princess, I don’t understand,” Rarity started.
“WHAT HAVE YOU DONE TO HIM?!”
“W-we chased him outta town,” Rainbow began to explain. “We thought he was just a mon-”
If it weren’t for Twilight being so quick to raise her shield, they may have had to bury Rainbow Dash in the trench that she undoubtedly would have dug with her own body. Celestia had just tried to strike her.
“MY SON! IS NOT! A MONSTER!” Celestia glared with still glowing eyes, daring anypony to say anything else. A moment later, she teleported both of us back to the infirmary in Canterlot.
*****
Now I know some of you may be confused. How could I be Celestia’s son if I am clearly not a pony? Well, that is short answer and a long story. First, I will tell who and what I am. My name is Chris Sol and I am a human from Earth. What is a far more interesting question, is the how.
For the answer, I will have to go back to Earth, where I was born. Now, I’m not gonna bore you with things you already know. Obviously, I was born and had a mother and even a father. We all have seen pictures of the Hall of Honor, the throne room, the ball room and even the Royal Dining Hall in the castle. Any foal in school or pony capable of reading a newspaper has learned about the Elements of Harmony and who wield them. I would even go so far as to assume that there have been photos of their homes floating around. Therefore, I will not waste your time describing what those ponies and places look like.
I don’t have a lot of memories about my time on Earth. After all, I was only six when I was taken from my family and that was fourteen years before the events of today. I do remember that I was a happy child. I loved my parents and they me. We weren’t rich by any stretch, but they never let me want or go hungry. Instead, they taught me to enjoy the free things that life had to offer and, most importantly, humility. Most of my days were spent running in the park and playing soldier with sticks for swords or guns.
It was on one of these days in the park that it happened. I was running through the woods, which was nothing more than a few trees with some palmettos growing in between, but to a boy of six, it was a jungle. I was in the middle of fending of my home town from Nazis when a bright light surrounded me. The last thing I heard and saw of Earth, was my mother screaming my name and running to save me.
The next thing I knew, I was in a clearing filled with flowers and a creek, bordered by trees. I could hear birds singing and feel the breeze on my face. I was looking around trying to figure out just where I was and what happened to my mom.
“Mommy!?” I screamed over and over, tears pouring from my eyes.
A voice from behind me caught my attention, “hello there, little one.” I spun around to face the speaker. To my surprise, it was a unicorn with huge wings. It was Celestia and behind her was a tiny, filly, Twilight Sparkle. They were both confused, as was I, but Twilight looked downright scared. For some reason, I wasn’t.
“I-I c-can’t find my-my mommy,” I told her. My voice kept catching in my throat due to the crying.
Celestia cooed and lowered herself to the ground. She wrapped me up in her huge wings, which made me feel so very safe. “Calm down, young one, we will help you find her. Guards!” Out of nowhere, ten white pegasi came to her side. Their golden armor and large frames made me uneasy. I clung tighter to Celestia’s chest and she in turn tightened her wings’ grip on me. “Search the woods. Look everywhere for this child’s mother. You must find her.”
Those guards looked for hours, but found nothing, not even a footprint. It had later been determined that I had been brought here by accident. Twilight was being taught magic by Celestia and her spell got super charged somehow and took me from Earth’s realm to Equestria’s.
For months, Twilight avoided me. She wasn’t afraid of me, she was just afraid I would hate her. I never did. I blamed her for a time, but it was brief and didn’t last long enough for hate to form.
I did cry myself to sleep for the first year, though. And every night, Celestia would come to comfort me. In fact, after the first month, I simply started to sleep in her bed with her, her wings being used as the best security blanket ever. At first, she had tried a nanny, but I wouldn’t calm down with anypony but her. Even Twilight Velvet couldn’t help me sleep. She did help Celestia a lot through the years, which is one more reason why I never hated her daughter and even considered her and her family as my own family. That’s why I called Twilight my cousin.
What I didn’t realize for years, was the grief I had caused Celestia. She had decided it was best to keep my existence a secret, except for a few doctors, guards and maids. Most ponies who met me, feared me. It had something to do with the fact that humans are predators. Strange how creatures don’t want to spend too much time around creatures that could eat them.
Because of my secreted existence, rumors had started to spread that Celestia was sneaking lovers into her room at night. After all, no one was allowed into her chambers at night and strange noises could be heard coming from inside.
With us spending so much time together and her doing so much to protect me, it was only natural that after some time, I would call her ‘Mom’. The second the word slipped from my mouth, tears of joy formed in her eyes and she hugged me tighter than she ever had before. She officially adopted me within the hour. I learned later that she had always wanted a child of her own, but with her official duties, she never had the chance. Worse yet, she never would again.
Are alicorns powerful? Yes. Are they immortal? Yes. Are they gods? No, not at all. Alicorns, like all living creatures, have a limited time in which they can breed, and Celestia’s had passed centuries ago. She was doomed to never experience the joys of raising a foal like other members of her family had. Those royals that had given up either their wings or the magic to become mortals, leaving only herself, her sister and eventually her niece Cadence as the only alicorns left and therefore shouldered with an unfair amount of responsibility. Then, suddenly, here was this child from out of the blue in need of protection, shelter and love. This was her chance, so she took it.
Thus, Prince Christopher Sol of Equestria I became.
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humans super strong and flesh rendering super predator?
what just cause we eat meat along with those veggies? wow ponies don't know what make a real monster or predator that well do they?
im guessing the some pony to take care of are male is fluttershy it always the shy or princesses why not derpy or Trixie? heck even gilda! give a shock please?
this looks strikingly fimilar...
4062080 I know its been done, but I wanted to do my own vrsion. Besides, everything's been done.
4062439 well, great job so far.
4062080 Familiar to what?
..No character tags?
I really like this story so far
This has the makings of something great.
This looks like it will be interesting, but the entire thing just seems too improbable. Celestia somehow managing to keep the fact that she has an alien son a secret for 14 years and the mane six minus Twilight attacking him on sight both seem unlikely (unless he did something to provoke them or convince them that he's a threat. Sure, they can be xenophobic racists, but I think this might be a bit much), but I think the most improbable part is that this guy apparently showed up in Ponyville without Twilight or Celestia there to introduce him. I hope you'll give some explanation for how that happened, because it just really doesn't make much sense without one.
Cool.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
4066800 Don't worry, this is just the introduction. Everything will be explained, from his training to the ponies fears. I just need to finish my other story first.
4067192 This is a pretty good intro. I'll be looking further into your works if you can produce something like this.
Rainbow attacking? Maybe.
Applejack? Possible.
Rarity? Bit of a stretch.
Pinkie Pie? Dont make laugh.
Fluttershy just sitting there? Too OOC for its own good.
I also agree with others here. It seems rather odd that he managed to get to Ponyville on his own without help from Twilight or the princess. I hope you dont try to make it that only ponies in Canterlot know because it would be a big stretch to believe that his presents, let alone his relasion with the princess, wouldnt be widely known. Also Twilight never told her friends about him?
I will follow this fic with caution. But Lucy, you got some splainin to do!
4076113 I promise, everything will be explained.
Interesting, I also have a sense of familiarity with this fic like NightFusion1, mainly how the human came into Celestia's presence alone and afraid due to a spell, but I will continue reading to see how this turns out. This has potential.
In an effort to fully grasp the ENRAGED Celestia in the final part of the prologue,
I imaged her behaving similar to Nightmare Moon..because Dang, she sounded scary.
I sure would hate to be RD and AJ right now.
if Celestia doesn't kill them, she just may banish them to Tartarus, or something.
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To me, it reminds me of 'My Little Dashie'..but, in reverse.
course, I could be wrong.
4076360 Sorry but the first chapter killed it for me...
4066800 pretty much said it all...
if you read all of the other chapters before this one, the story makes alot of sense
wait..Nazi's!? does this mean that Chris was originally for the Earth of the 1940s
you know, back when WWII was going on and all that.
4223492 he was playing pretend
This story seems very familiar to a story where the main character ends up become Cadence's lover, except the Ponies all accept him like he were one of them, and proceed to bully him as such.
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Your profile pic is of Discord, and you bring up the subject of improbability.
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4321611 Honestly it sounds much more like something a kid from the 40s or 50s would do. Nazi Germany is not a very kid friendly topic nowadays especially for children who are 6.
...And kids could pretend back in the 1940s. Imagination is not a some new trait we humans acquired a decade or 2 ago.
4062004 yes, this is a constant annoyance. They deal with DRAGONS, GRYPHONS and BEARS on a regular basis. They're not going to go into shrieking hysterics because a sad little half-naked bald monkey looking thing stumbles in their path.
4489839 I think this all comes from the Zecora chapter.......were ponies were revealed for the xenophobic cunts they are
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Don't worry, it is only the unfamiliar species that freak them out
I was prepared to dislike this immediately, as most "human in Equestria" stories I've glanced over are kerfloffle, but you surprised me. I've only read the first chapter, but I like what I see. Very good.
I am more interested in why the Elements decided to run him out of town on a rail then why Celestia adopted an alien child. I can see her adopting someone if she feels she needs to, or if it would be in the childs best interests.
I cannot see the elements chasing said child around for no good reason. Throwing things at him? Attacking him? Potentially killing him?
Why?
I follow this story with caution.
Oh boy, Man with two brains clone... Sorry, man with two names. Yes, let's ignore griffons, minotaurs and the other Equusian intelligent species who eat meat and immediately decide humans = monsters. I could possibly see Rainbow Dash chasing an unknown creature over a misunderstanding and trying to subdue them, or Applejack and Rarity helping for that matter, but trying to kill them? Pinkie Pie using lethal expolosive devices? No, that is just so ridiculous as to completely throw me out of any possible suspension of disbelief.
Downvoted for unbelievable characterisation used for the purposes of generating cheap sympathy for the protagonist.
Then why are the ponies not afraid of griffons?
chapter 1 awwww sniff sniff a lovely sub chapter
For the life of me, I cannot comprehend how in the heck this story has the number of likes it does. From the very first chapter it tries as hard as possible to be absolutely absurd.
Take the quoted line above and the implication: ponies will not go near anything that's a predator.
You mean, like the dogs and cats many ponies have as pets?
Or the griffons we've seen (Gilda and Gustav, plus now the Eq Games griffons) that walk among them with their BIG CLEARLY PREDATORY BODIES without the ponies showing so much as a trace of alarm?
Not to mention, humans are OMNIVORES... who have no sharp teeth, no claws, frail bodies... and I'm sure a 6 year old is instantly threatening to full-grown stallions, eeyup.
You see, a little shred of synaptic activity in the ol' cerebral cortex and this central premise instantly falls to pieces.
This sentence encompasses everything that doesn't make sense to me in this story.
First off, how do the ponies even know about humans to even know that they're predators?
Second, supposing they do know about humans like we know about Xenomorphs (which is to say, through stories), then you've got the reactions of the ponies confused with humans. Ponies live in a society full of many various sapient species. A brand new human would be met with interest, not fear.
Thirdly, the weapons seen in Equestria thus far have been spears, magic, and pie. Where in the world do you get candy frag grenades from that?
Fourthly, and this ties in with the second point, if Ponies already know enough about humans to know we eat meat, then they would know that our carnivorous diet consists solely of non sentient seafood, beef, chicken, and pork. Rarely do we eat anything else unless we have no other choice, and considering how humans react to the possibility of creating sentient life (AI) there's no way in Tartarus we would ever harm another sentient for food, and they would know that, seeing as we'd view it as a taboo up there with the likes of cannibalism.
Fifthly, considering this thing they're chasing just risked it's life to save one of their own, this should've stopped the mane 6 cold and had them re-evaluating their actions and the threat this supposed 'monster' poses. Instead, they just ignore that and beat him senseless. That makes even less sense when considering how they act in the show.
From what you've explained so far in the narration, these ponies somehow seem to have some sixth sense warning them that we will eat them. That doesn't make sense. Not only is it wrong, it would also preclude ponies from ever befriending Gryphons, and would result in them wiping out all other meat eating species off the face of the planet. Not even we would be so cruel.
I would suggest that you fix those errors before moving on. Some explanation as to the senseless violence committed by these ponies would be a good start.
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Xenophobic yes, but violent? Not in the least. All they did was hide from Zecora when all she did was wander around town. At the very most, a human showing up in Ponyville would be causing them to do their impression of a ghost town again, while Twilight came out to make contact with the unknown hairless hornless minotaur.
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*cough* Shining Armor *cough*
4323355
... You really underestimate what both kids at the age of 6 can know. While yes, almost all of what the Nazi's did is wholly inappropriate for a 6 year old, I remember knowing they tried to take over the world and were evil, which is definitely enough for a 6 year old to cast them as today's evil to be vanquished before mother calls us inside.
I agree with many of the comments. Explanations are needed.
But for now, mother bear Celestia is interesting enough to continue.
I get the feeling that ponies are psychologically incapable of recognizing a difference between attacking and defending. They only see the violence and nothing else.
To those who say the mane six (well, five in this case) attacking a human child is improbable, I'll say this. Think about how they (including those same five) reacted to Zecora's presence. That is merely a reaction to a pony with a different coat design. So, imagine how they'd react to something so deeply alien looking as a human. Their fear was nearly at "rat in a corner lashing out" levels with just Zecora. For a human, they'd probably try to burn their own town down in order to "flush it out" in a flurry of panic-clouding stupidity.
Don't worry, Twilight. If he hated you, he'd have tied you down in a cellar and skinned you alive by now. Umm...maybe you shouldn't tell her that, though.
The dominant apex-predator on a borderline Death World, thank you very much.
Aw Rainobw Dash sounds so cute when trying to talk like a big mare
4062004
World War I - II, the Cold war, seven years war, the American Revolution, Hitler.
Just to name a few.
(Whole website on things we have done here)
Ok, that's bullshit. I mean, Griffons are predators as well and no one feared Gilda or Gustave. Heck, Griffons were even allowed to the Equestrian Games for crying out loud
5571520 Verious laws and treaties keep Griffons from harming ponies. They know nothing about humans. There is literally nothing stopping us if we wanted to harm a pony, at least thats what ponies believe. Make sense?
5600765 No. We've already seen how Ponyville handles mysterious threatening creatures and it isn't like that.
Note to self, don't ever read the comments section of the first chapter. Apparently some people can't add -__-
6 + 14 is 20 you dodos, it says right here in this chapter that he's 20 during the events of the beginning. They're not attacking a damn child, they're attacking a fully-grown human male, which by the way can get to be about six feet, which is quite a bit taller than the average pony.
Sorry had to point that out. Also its possible for ponies to get used to the griffons... and cats and dogs are smaller then the ponys too
Wow seriously considering a downvote on this chapter alone but I guess I will read further since from the comments stuff will be explained. As it is, it is almost against everything from the show. The ponies are omnivores themselves. They have front facing eyes; eat eggs, dairy, and probably fish since the show has portrayed fisher ponies. The Bat-winged pegasi have slitted eyes and actual fangs. They also have pets that are omnivores (dogs) and carnivores ( cats, owls, raptors, alligators, seals, etc). Our canines aint nothing compared to dogs or cats. No claws or talons, no armoring like manes, fur, or scales.
I could see Rainbow being physically aggressive to drive him away and Applejack less so. They would drive a monster away from the city and made sure it kept leaving, but all of them trying to kill him? not in a million years. Fluttershy got the other elements to stop them from attacking a manticore, humans are nothing compared to that. Humans are persistence hunters, our ancient ancestors ran prey down, out endurancing what they were after. Nothing physically intimidating about us.
Ponies are used to minotaurs and gryphons, both much more intimidating. And less we forget, the real cincher for why the resisdents feared zecora was that she lived in the everfree forest.
Here is hoping there is a real reason for the elements to attack. Like him accidentally bumping into someone that then fell into a well.
Meh. So very, very meh. The entire first chapter, the setup. None of it make any sense.
First chapter in.. and the fact that a humie is Celestia's son and Twi's cousin isnt widely known by everyone and their dogs?
And.. he's been Celly's son for a long time, i'd wager. Still, nearly a decade of Celly not sharing this piece of info with anyone.
Heh.. not buying it.
And... being chased by the M6 no less, because that's obviously their job to play police/militia/monster killers. Because he's clearly a monster. See the evil magics, the horns (they ALWAYS have horns), the sharp fangs, the claws, the villaious laugh, the evil colors, the evil minions?
Oh wait, He doesnt have any of these..
So.. the M6 took a liking to the sights of blood and pain, and saw a nice target with no fur to hide the bruises. They are using lethal force here, against someone who obviously go out of their way to not respond in kind. Doesnt stop them from keeping the attacks up even when they can plainly see it.
They want blood.
Fluttershy seem oddly okay with all this.
Maybe the predators are really the ponies, when you look at it. They hunt him down like a pack of wolves. They likely were moments away from taking a bite when he fell.
Human as predators? HA! Good joke. He isnt the top predator here. If anything, he's about as dangerous as a basket of puppies. Dragons, diamond dogs, griffins are the sapient predators species and considered fine and tolerated/accepted. And then you have all the other predators (hydras, manticores, ect)
But a single human? Terror and KOS, no questions asked, no quarter, no mercy.
And a 14 y-o kid can fight off ponies like he's some sort of badass veteran ninja until he go the "heroic rescue" path for the 'lil damsel (that want his blood)?
Yeah... No.
6168987 Exactly my thoughts... this was a big cluster fuck of "What?" For me...
The most interesting thing about this chapter is the comment. How people lack the understanding of first grade math?
Now, this is on the "Good Hie List", so obviously it is good, to some degree. The first chapter, eh, you know, whatever. The setup? Cool, not the greatest, a little rushed, but I've seen worse. Potnetial? Oh, so much potential. SO MUCH potential.
I got to 'my son is not a monster' aaaaaand that's it. This is just too stupid for me.
There's no way Twilight could become close with an alien and the other 5 not know about it. Absolutely no way.
Aside from that, there's no way those 5 would react this way. Maybe there's a more thorough explanation later, but I'm not going to see it.