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The High Note

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When all seems dark in Ponyville, yeah im not gunna lie this is my first story and its kinda just something i did for fun. Its kind of stupid in "wtf just happend" kinda way. Language Warning

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nomotog

nomotog #1 · Mar 6th, 2014 · · ·

That was odd. I don't want to say bad, but I didn't find it to be all that good. You have some grammar mistakes. I found the swearing distasteful.

Both Vinyl and Octavia felt out of character in their first person narration. Octavia Was more out there more so then Vinyl, but there wasn't a shift in style between the two. I was half way into Vinyl's part before I realized it wasn't Octavia narrating anymore.

The drug cupcake is the pat that stands out most me me as the part I liked the least. I guess it's not out of the question for Vinyl to eat drugged cupcakes, but I don't like her as a drug user.