This is actually pretty good. Now I'm not normally one for pointing out these sort of things but 'more kinder' is highly irritating. One does not simply place more before a word ending with 'er' without some negative feed back.
Do please consider that when doing work in the future.
it´s not bad but i not like it that thiere seems to be not really ponies. I think their anthro ? It´s still not bad but i don´t like the idea of ponies being human kinds
This is actually pretty good. Now I'm not normally one for pointing out these sort of things but 'more kinder' is highly irritating. One does not simply place more before a word ending with 'er' without some negative feed back.
Do please consider that when doing work in the future.
it´s not bad but i not like it that thiere seems to be not really ponies. I think their anthro ? It´s still not bad but i don´t like the idea of ponies being human kinds
should be break
recommend fixing this sentence since it is a run-on sentence
4515542 Oh no, it's a run-on! Tike to hit the breaks!
/sarcasm
I don't normally like anthro but if the story is good enough I'll read some of it.