It's been a while since Twilight has spent time with her brother and Cadence, so she decided to go to visit them for a little while. She was packing in her room, when Spike came in. "Twilight are you sure I can't come?" Spike asked. Twilight sighed, this was the fifth time he asked that and she started to get annoyed.
"Spike, for the last time, im only going for a little while. I'm just going to catch up with my brother and Cadence, you'll be bored." Twilight told him. Spike pouted but knew she was right. "Besides I already asked Fluttershy to look after you and she already agreed." Said Twilight. Spike looked and Twilight and sighed.
"Fine," Spike said smiling. Twilight hugged him. "Don't worry I'll be back before you know it." Twilight told the baby dragon. Twilight got the rest of her things and walked out. She looked at her friends who were coming her way.
"What are you all doing here?" asked Twilight confused. Pinkie was the fist to speak. "You didn't think we weren't going to see you off, did you silly?" Pinkie said. "Friends watch friends off when they go on trips, especially when they're best friends." Pinkie finished. Twilight smiled.
"Well, then we better get going to the train station before I miss my train." Twilight said starting to walk, with her friends following her. When they got to the train station they said their final goodbyes and a group hug. When they let go the train had arrived and Twilight got on. When she sat down she waved at her friends until they were no longer in sight.
Twilight know looked at the window and started thinking about what she would do with her brother when she got there. her train of thought was disturbed when the train came to a stop and everyone started getting out. When Twilight got out she saw Cadence waiting for her.
"Cadence" Twilight said going over to hug her old foal-sitter. "Twilight, it's been a while." Cadence told her returning the hug. Twilight looked around and turned to Cadence. "Where's my brother?" asked Twilight.
"Don't worry he's at the palace waiting for us."Cadence told her. "Then let's not keep him waiting." Twilight said. Cadence nodded and they started walking back to the palace. when they arrived she saw a training course with some guards training, but what got her attention was a guard who was walking around the field.
Twilight couldn't stop looking at him and just smiled. Cadence of course noticed and gave a little giggle. "Come on Twilight, you can stare at your coltfriend later." Cadence said. This, of course, got Twilight's attention and she started to to turn red.
"He's not...im, just...I'" Twilight started to stutter. This made Cadence laugh a little. Twilight gave her a somewhat mad face. Cadence looked at her and placed a hoof on her shoulder. "It's alright Twilight, I was just having a little fun with you." Cadence said. Twilight smiled and rolled her eyes playfully.
"What? He's your first crush, it's cute watching you love struck." Cadence said. "I am not love struck" Twilight said walking away. Cadence smiled and followed Twilight.
They entered the throne room where Shinning Armour was waiting fr them. "Twily" Shinning said hugging his sister, who returned the hug. "How was the train ride kiddo?" Shinning asked. "Fine" Twilight told him.
"Twilight, why don't you go unpack and then we can go to the park and have a picnic?" Cadence asked. Twilight nodded and walked out. She went to the room she was staying at and started unpacking. When she was done she walked out the door and saw a Flash walking down the same hallway.
She hoped he didn't notice her and just kept walking, but he stopped and looked at her. "Hello, princess. I didn't know you were here." Flash said. "Yeah, I came to visit my brother. I just arrived an hour ago." Twilight said. Flash smiled.
"Well, I hope you have a nice stay, princess." Flash said bowing. "Twilight, you can call me Twilight." Twilight told him. "Twilight, that's a beautiful name." Flash said. Twilight's heart started beating faster. Dang it, how does he always make her feel this way, Twilight thought to herself.
"Well, I better be off. I'll see you around Twilight." Flash said. he kissed her hoof and left. Twilight turned red and stared at him until he was out of sight. Twilight then started to walk to the throne room to meet up with Shinning Armour and Cadence.
When she got there she was still a little red about what happened. Shinning Armour noticed this. "What's wrong Twily?" Asked Shinning Armour. "Nothing, I'm fine." Twilight said. Shinning wasn't buying it. "Are you sure?" He asked again. Twilight nodded. "Alright." Shinning gave up.
"Well, the chiefs finished making the food for the picnic so we should get going." Cadence said. They picked up the basket and started walking out.
When they got to the park all Twilight could think about is Flash. He made her stutter, made her nervous, and he made her heart race and yet she still liked being around him. She never felt the same way before, and she liked feeling like this. Even if sometime she couldn't even talk. Was she in love? She didn't know yet. She was going to find out though. Maybe Cadence could help her. She was the princess of love after all.
I like this story so far. To be honest, I don't know how you are going to play the Shinning Armor card. Most people have him as an overbearing brother. Maybe he will supportive. I don't know. Your choice.
It's okay. Not bad, not terrific. There are a few errors in grammar and stuff, like:
*They're, or they are.
It's a question. It should be: "Twilight, why don't you go unpack and then we can go to the park and have a picnic?" with a comma added after "Twilight".
Not a huge issue, but I think there should be a comma before "princess".
There's actually no need for that comma there.
*I'm. And there should be something after "Alright", either a comma or a period.
Anyways, it isn't horrible. I gave it a thumbs up. But it would be better if you could also split different ponies talking into different paragraphs. Two different people shouldn't be talking in the same paragraph. But keep at it, and you'll get a lot better, I'm sure
Oh yeah, trust me. You can't even begin to imagine the hate I've received for making a FlashLight story. I don't love Flash Sentry, but I also see no need to hate him, either. I kind of like what I turned him into in my story. The human Flash kind of ticked me off because he was too good.
It will be great if Twilight's parents come over for a visit as well it'll be like a family outing.
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Well, I don't want to make Shinning Amour crazy but he won't be too fine with it either
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I'll make sure I fix those errors. This is my first Twilight and Flash fanfiction so, it might not be the best but you know what they say,'practice makes perfect.'
3975516 For sure! My first story was so incredibly poo that I deleted it after a day. I'm just really glad that I kept at it and turned into the writer I am today
3975509 Well Twilight is dating one of his guards. Best of luck with the next chapter. Hope it doesn't take took long to write.
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don't worry I'll post a new chapter everyday
this story already. Please keep writing more. I want to know what happens next.
I voted up just balance the downvotes this Fic is getting
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thank you, I'm not so happy about the down votes but everyone has their own opinion.
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also its Foal-sitter not foul-sitter
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im sorry...i really need a prof reader, spelling isn't my thing.
Can't wait to see how this story turns out. thumbs up and fav. keep writing please.
Please keep going, I like what you have so far
3975831 You could do well with a pre-reader and an editor.
It's a start. My first FlashLight fic had some problems too. Just a little bit of editing here and there. Mine kind of needs a rewrite.
This close, mothafucka, this close!
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I know right?
I don't know why so many people hate FlashLight either. I agree that they are an adorable couple!!! I'm also a HUGE FlashLight fan!!!
Love the story! I'm gonna keep reading...
I'm sorry, I couldn't get through this (you have so many grammatical errors that I get pulled from the story). Your biggest, and most consistent m, error is "im" where I'm should be. I really want to read the story, but the high number of grammatical mistakes is preventing that. I Would like to state that I am not a grammar stickler, I usually let little errors slip by most of the time but when those errors are consistent it actually annoys me. To avoid further errors I recommend you get a proofreader or editor and go through all you posted chapter and fix all the errors you manage to find. While spellcheck should be treated as a friend do not solely rely on it find your errors, some of the words and names you know are right will not be recognized by spellchecker systems.
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To me, I chalk it up to zero background.
Like think about it, It was around S5 when Equestria Girls first came out, and up until then we had ZERO knowledge of this guardpony from the Crystal Empire. Then, suddenly, a movie comes out, and he gets all of the attention and is suddenly thrusted into the spotlight as a character to possibly become a boyfriend to Twilight. That would be like one of the power rangers not having a boyfriend for 6 seasons, then they meet some guy in a coffee shop and suddenly, they're shown to be a prime choice by surrounding characters to be BF and GF