I cant really say I enjoyed this, im getting the VERY bad feeling about this story, I'll be keeping watch from here on out, giving advice, also I don't recommend making short chapters like this, people, myself included, tend to find this annoying, and spending twenty minutes JUST to write this? not a good sign, spend MORE time writing longer chapter, then go back, read through what you wrote and ask yourself "does it make sense and where do I want this to go?" don't just write a story as it goes, plan the ENTIRE thing out first, then as your writing, go into details. Just trying to help - AuzzieJustice
Really good story.Thou the only reason why I cant fully enjoy is because of the very... complex words.. I don't even know But I dont mind .Anyway's I wanna ask, is Orion and Twilight gonna in future chapters? Anyways, like I said, excellent really good story,can't wait for more P.S you should add some detail to the background or the movements of the characters.It would really give the story a more.. 'realistic' feeling.If you understand o.o
*ships decloak before unleashing super-heated plasma rounds down onto Canterlot, most lasers striking nobles houses. As for others they destroyed farms, buildings, and cities. After the 10 minute war we erase the ponies memory and revered their evolution to when God put them on this planet. We did the same to every other species on Equis. As for the mane 6 1,000 years of cryo-stasis and the princesses to be judged by a hire power*
I probably should have mentioned it, but the humans in my universe live normal lifespans (around 80). Though, that should have been implied by my statement that Orion is 16 and not fully grown.
I have to say I am really starting to enjoy this new genre that is spinning up. About Ponies enslaving Humans and them fighting back. Yet no one has yet to go to the point where Humans fight back in numbers. Which is a bit surprising. Humans are apex-predators. We battled our way to the top of the food chain with technology and wits. And we a species that would fight to the death. While ponies would most likely run away. And with the idea of freedom and revolution that would rile up a mass of humans. Well we all know what happened with the Soviet Union... This will be very interesting. Something to never under estimate is the power of the human spirit. Ah well, one step at a time I guess
That, and we'd be pissed with the ponies. Feral turned sapient or not. After all, we wouldn't do that stuff the ponies if we discovered they were capable of sapience. Of course, we'd have to advance far enough to discover that, but once we did we would quickly go through upheaval about pony rights and such to the point it would likely become law and a large effort made to giving/restoring that sapience would be made.
The ponies would just refuse to believe it because if it were true then it would mean they were doing something bad. We all know how childish the ponies on the show are, so they'd react in a rather dramatic way to doing something bad. Like children trying to cover up doing something they know is naughty by pretending it doesn't exist. In this case it is magnitudes worse because the ponies apparently know that the humans were once sapient. Highly successful sapients.
There is a chance of rejection that could scar Orion for life
It would hurt him, but he would be fine. Humans can take a lot. Both physically and psychologically. Makes me proud to be human. If anything, I find it interesting that the above quote makes perfect sense coming from a heavily herd-oriented animal.
boo! I was hoping for Orion to start talking and making planes to kill all the ponies!!!
I... was kind-sorta hoping for a longer chapter. But the scientific study approach suits this quite well, so no real complaints there.
3709601 agreed, but I do want to see a rapid rate of learning. both for Orion and for Twilight (about Orion).
I cant really say I enjoyed this, im getting the VERY bad feeling about this story, I'll be keeping watch from here on out, giving advice, also I don't recommend making short chapters like this, people, myself included, tend to find this annoying, and spending twenty minutes JUST to write this? not a good sign, spend MORE time writing longer chapter, then go back, read through what you wrote and ask yourself "does it make sense and where do I want this to go?" don't just write a story as it goes, plan the ENTIRE thing out first, then as your writing, go into details.
Just trying to help - AuzzieJustice
Twilight becoming a surrogate mother? This early?
Hell, I would have expected more time than that, maybe set over time for a relationship to grow.
Really good story.Thou the only reason why I cant fully enjoy is because of the very... complex words.. I don't even know
But I dont mind .Anyway's I wanna ask, is Orion and Twilight gonna in future chapters?
Anyways, like I said, excellent really good story,can't wait for more
P.S you should add some detail to the background or the movements of the characters.It would really give the story a more.. 'realistic' feeling.If you understand o.o
Pssst, could I ask you something?
I was wondering you could add a plot twist of somehow sentient humans survived that war and return to provide weapons to the soon non-feral ones.
I'm not expecting him to read Shakespeare. He needs to WRITE SHAKESPEARE WITH A TYPEWRITER, AFTER HE INVENTS ONE!!!!
MAY THE ALMIGHTY SUNBUTT GRANT UPON THIS HUMAN HER BLESSINGS, AND MAY HER LARGE AND PLUMP FLANK LEAVE UPON HIM THE MARK OF INTELLIGENCE.
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Sorry, I should clarify; We do use all of our brain generally but not at full capacity, or else, like you said, horrible seizures.
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Best thing I've read all day!
Interesting chapter.....but OH so short!
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Don't worry, it was a joke.
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*tips hat*
This can only end in pitiful disaster...
And so I wait, popcorn in hand.
3709595 well while planes could kill the ponies he would need a PLAN first
3709995
Agreed
I want a human just talking to them normally like nothing is happening the started to kill them
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Heil Der Menschheit! (Hail Humanity!)
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Assemble the armada.
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news.bbc.co.uk/media/images/47726000/jpg/_47726090_bsea_rex.jpg
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No
BIGGER
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thelmagazine.com/binary/9b10/1253033030-the_largest_fleet_in_history.jpg
?
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Go to Google images
Type in tank armada or space armada
Then I am pleased.
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static.comicvine.com/uploads/original/6/63715/2510625-empire_fleet_700x437.jpg
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Now
The war against the ponies has begun
Wait no
Not war, extinction of ponies
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YOU CANNOT JUSTIFY GENOCIDE!
^all the ships turn towards yours*
Goodbye....
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Genocide?
Dude I'm not Hiltler.
Just kill the ones who Doesn't deserve life anymore.
Leave he rest.
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I am watching you.
*we go to light speed*
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:
Dude for real this time
I'm watching you.
We both have troops loyal to both sides.
We don't need a civil war.
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Whatever.
*cloaking his ships he positioned them over all the pony cities.*
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"Gilbret assassins in position."
MISSION
Kill or capture word leaders
after mission complete contact Recon Shot spaceships for target coordinates.
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*ships on standby, ready for orders*
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"Target locked."
Use 500 MM cannon on military barracks left of the city.
Alpha and Bravo squad will kid nap Mane 6 and princesses.
After there have escape (do what you please)
Shall we do this via PM?
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Hehehe...
*ships decloak before unleashing super-heated plasma rounds down onto Canterlot, most lasers striking nobles houses. As for others they destroyed farms, buildings, and cities. After the 10 minute war we erase the ponies memory and revered their evolution to when God put them on this planet. We did the same to every other species on Equis. As for the mane 6 1,000 years of cryo-stasis and the princesses to be judged by a hire power*
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Agreed
And one day the mane 6 will rule Equis under our law and regulartions.
All hail the human race.
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Да здравствует Человечество! (Hail Humanity!)
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人类冰雹( hail humanity)
Chinese
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կարկուտ մարդկությանը( hail humanity)
Armenian
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saluer l'humanité (hail humanity)
French
oh god… I see somebody is a fan of Pulse Percussion. That pic, Renegade. I approve.
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I probably should have mentioned it, but the humans in my universe live normal lifespans (around 80). Though, that should have been implied by my statement that Orion is 16 and not fully grown.
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At' žije lidstvo! (Long live humanity)
Czech
Y u no make it longer. Other than that, I'm I interested
3709595 He has a long way to go before being able to aerial strike Canterlot. I think he's gonna need some sort of plan for that first.
Hmmm...
I have to say I am really starting to enjoy this new genre that is spinning up. About Ponies enslaving Humans and them fighting back. Yet no one has yet to go to the point where Humans fight back in numbers. Which is a bit surprising. Humans are apex-predators. We battled our way to the top of the food chain with technology and wits. And we a species that would fight to the death. While ponies would most likely run away. And with the idea of freedom and revolution that would rile up a mass of humans. Well we all know what happened with the Soviet Union... This will be very interesting. Something to never under estimate is the power of the human spirit. Ah well, one step at a time I guess
3709995
That, and we'd be pissed with the ponies. Feral turned sapient or not. After all, we wouldn't do that stuff the ponies if we discovered they were capable of sapience. Of course, we'd have to advance far enough to discover that, but once we did we would quickly go through upheaval about pony rights and such to the point it would likely become law and a large effort made to giving/restoring that sapience would be made.
The ponies would just refuse to believe it because if it were true then it would mean they were doing something bad. We all know how childish the ponies on the show are, so they'd react in a rather dramatic way to doing something bad. Like children trying to cover up doing something they know is naughty by pretending it doesn't exist. In this case it is magnitudes worse because the ponies apparently know that the humans were once sapient. Highly successful sapients.
It would hurt him, but he would be fine. Humans can take a lot. Both physically and psychologically. Makes me proud to be human. If anything, I find it interesting that the above quote makes perfect sense coming from a heavily herd-oriented animal.
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"Human for ever."
3730073 WE MEET AGAIN NAZI PONY!
Ha ha, you're adopted!