In an attempt to recapture a sense of belonging, Prince Lune hires a new assistant. One he, and the other Equestrian alicorns, all may be infatuated with.
What the fuck... I feel dirty. First with you, then with me, and then a bit of both. This submission, domination, mental break... GOD!! I'm frustrated in so many ways now!! The thought of boss man over me, glaring at me with lustful eyes, tears comng off my face as he bended me to do whatever he wanted. FUCK YOU!! FUCK THIS STORY! FUCK THIS CHAIR IN PARTICULAR!! You, you, YOU SIR!! Do not know what to have just done! I was thinking 'Yay, a nice love story with a bit of dom, maybe a little drama, a love triangle.' But NNNOOO!! You had to go let me fuck with Cole like this. Now you have a whole new paradigm to satisfy. What will Candenza do to Felt? Will Dusk toruture him? And how will Lune react to all this!? FUCK! What if this is normal to him? He expected this? What if he didn't?! Damn you! My first moments off work and I have to feel like bucking something?
3551517 Yes... Yes... Very much. But now I don't know where this story is gonna go. Dusk seems annoyed with Felt's presence. Solaris is like you protrait Celestia in your other fic, though maybe a little kinder. Cadenza... I don't even wanna know. And Lune... Now I'm just guessing here... But does he have a harem of servants? I mean between them all. Do they treat all the servants like this or only Felt? I mean come on! It would be a little romantic if it was just him, but if ever one is... Oh... OH!! That's beautiful!! What if Dusk was not annoyed with Felt himself but how he acted, seeing it happen on multiple occasions. Another name in a long line of stallions, mares, just wanting to be near their 'idols' and being disillusioned. If it goes that way I'm kicking your ass mind you but it would be acceptable.
This fic will be taking a turn here, and in the next chapter you'll see that Felt holds value to Solaris in more ways than simply as a servant. In the last part of the chapter he actually reveals that he feels quite a bit for him, mainly through his actions and what he did after he was done using Felt. It has to do with Felt's gift, but it also relates to his jealousy towards his younger brother finding a servant that wants to get to know him as a pony, and didn't become a servant simply to get paid. Dusk Shine's reaction towards the whole situation should be golden , and the dynamic between Lune and Solaris will be revealed later on, which will obviously lead to problems.
I'm not going to lie, I didn't completely enjoy this chapter, and mostly because of how Solaris acted towards Felt. I understand that his empath ability gave him no real way of resisting, but that just makes me resent Solaris so much more.
The very next day I learned why the Prince of Light wanted me to be put under the microscope, as the colloquialism goes. I must warn you that, in light of the fact that some are indeed sensitive to such subjects, the following events will seem rather… uncouth. If such subjects aren’t within one’s range of comfort you can enhance the endurance of your patience and skip the rest of this specific chunk of narrative. If not, then I implore you to read the events of the following Monday, the one-week anniversary from meeting the Prince of the Night.
This paragraph, while reinstating the fact that we are being narrated this from a point in the future, is a bit jarring. It breaks immersion by changing perspective, and taking the narrator out of the story. The only other way I could think about going about this is either by omitting the paragraph, or putting in a disclaimer in an author's note.
What the fuck... I feel dirty. First with you, then with me, and then a bit of both. This submission, domination, mental break... GOD!! I'm frustrated in so many ways now!! The thought of boss man over me, glaring at me with lustful eyes, tears comng off my face as he bended me to do whatever he wanted. FUCK YOU!! FUCK THIS STORY! FUCK THIS CHAIR IN PARTICULAR!!
You, you, YOU SIR!! Do not know what to have just done! I was thinking 'Yay, a nice love story with a bit of dom, maybe a little drama, a love triangle.' But NNNOOO!! You had to go let me fuck with Cole like this. Now you have a whole new paradigm to satisfy. What will Candenza do to Felt? Will Dusk toruture him? And how will Lune react to all this!? FUCK! What if this is normal to him? He expected this? What if he didn't?! Damn you! My first moments off work and I have to feel like bucking something?
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I can't say I'm sorry because I already did.
Anywhooves, did you at least enjoy the chapter?
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Yes... Yes... Very much. But now I don't know where this story is gonna go. Dusk seems annoyed with Felt's presence. Solaris is like you protrait Celestia in your other fic, though maybe a little kinder. Cadenza... I don't even wanna know. And Lune... Now I'm just guessing here... But does he have a harem of servants? I mean between them all. Do they treat all the servants like this or only Felt? I mean come on! It would be a little romantic if it was just him, but if ever one is... Oh... OH!! That's beautiful!! What if Dusk was not annoyed with Felt himself but how he acted, seeing it happen on multiple occasions. Another name in a long line of stallions, mares, just wanting to be near their 'idols' and being disillusioned. If it goes that way I'm kicking your ass mind you but it would be acceptable.
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This fic will be taking a turn here, and in the next chapter you'll see that Felt holds value to Solaris in more ways than simply as a servant. In the last part of the chapter he actually reveals that he feels quite a bit for him, mainly through his actions and what he did after he was done using Felt. It has to do with Felt's gift, but it also relates to his jealousy towards his younger brother finding a servant that wants to get to know him as a pony, and didn't become a servant simply to get paid. Dusk Shine's reaction towards the whole situation should be golden , and the dynamic between Lune and Solaris will be revealed later on, which will obviously lead to problems.
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You have made me expectant of the next chapter. Now if you don't mind, I am gonna have Bubble rape Butter.
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Okay! Bubble Berry is best r63 pony!
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Dude how many people has you pissed off!? Boss man's gmail just reported you as spam. You doing something I should look out for?
I'm not going to lie, I didn't completely enjoy this chapter, and mostly because of how Solaris acted towards Felt. I understand that his empath ability gave him no real way of resisting, but that just makes me resent Solaris so much more.
Ugh... I fucking hate Solaris.
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It would seem... a few. Hope this next chapter rectifies my mistake.
Huh. Well, when I thought I was getting a simple romantic story, it appears I was wrong, and read a rape one instead.
This paragraph, while reinstating the fact that we are being narrated this from a point in the future, is a bit jarring. It breaks immersion by changing perspective, and taking the narrator out of the story. The only other way I could think about going about this is either by omitting the paragraph, or putting in a disclaimer in an author's note.
You have some serious explaining to do.
This chapter outright villified Solaris. It makes him out to be tyrannical and conniving.
Also...rape.
I'll keep reading, but this took the expectations I had for this fic and threw them out the window.
And this kiddos, is why you don't trust royalty