Check your tense and punctuation. Also clean up some of those run-on sentences.

3559786>>3559656 I know I just cleaned it up with MS works and have Bloody Brandy looking it over. It should help it.

aww thats so sweet and really creepy

3559828 True but considering that this is Slendermare we're talking about it's understandable. I'm just glad that the balance between the cute and creepy is decent.

3559863
agreement

i loved it you should keep it going

Needs a Sequel, nothing more to say!

3560261>>3560183 Well I have considered doing a story would be the sequel to both this story and one of my other stories, Shadow Spike's Nightmare Night.

there are only two things I can say to this:
yes
more

As much as I hate the way Slenderman has been hamered into the pony universe. I do enjoyed this a lot. Is avery nice stand alone story. But maybe a sequel or an epilogue will be nice.

Clean it up, make it longer, give it more back story and it will be better than ever!!!

so awesome i wish this cud continue >U<

UMMMMMMMM 5 out of five moustaches though

Why can't I bang Slendermare?

The balance is excellent, and I want to see more of SlendermarexSpike.

You have doomed yourself to our needs.

loved it need more.

lets have twi meet thr slendermre and see what happens *evil~grin*.

Slendermarexspike? HOW DID NO ONE THINK OF THIS BEFORE? You sir are a genius

3562087 Like I said it wasn't my idea. It was John the Dragon's. He brought it up during a discussion and Bloody Brandy wrote about a two hundred long passage base on the idea. I got permission to use the idea from John and the passage from Brandy to use it as a starting point. I just did this is because I couldn't get the idea out of my head. I'm honestly surprised it got this popular this quick.

i demand a sequel ...........
if thats ok

3562210 it may not of been your Idea BUT I'm still gonna give lots of credit, plus your a great writer
So TAKE that complement!!

3562244 Thanks.

3562362your welcome

y u no edit

3562687 Sorry but that's a no on the no Spike thing. If you see my other stories you can tell I'm a huge Spike fan.

I...I think I got laid, Twilight

.....*snrk*.....*hnn*.......BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA,HNHNNHNHNHNHNHNhnnnnnn.......That was fucking beautiful man Here,take ALL MY MOUSTACHES!!!

hahahaha damn that was awesome
will there be more? and will we be seeing some dragon/demon hybrids in a couple of months?

3560339nice cant wait

Why the hell didnt i think of this.

Well, you did good. You made a female(praise Luna) Ponified version of the slender stalker have some sexy time with our favourite little dragon. It was well-written, though, So I give you Double Kudos.

Glad it wasn't slendermaneXSpike, or else I'd have to kill you.

Don't like killing, not for me. S'for Slenderman and the Marblehornets gang.

3564351 Don't worry. I have nothing against M/M shipping but you won't get any from me.

Personaly, it would have been better if Slendy erased Spikes memory of that

So....that was.....just....this image:
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I wouldn't want anything with teeth like that anywhere near my tongue or dick.

I liked it!
Hope you make more spike fics like this

3559863 3560852 3562087 3562687
I requested a similar idea a while back instance of it having Spike replace with Big Mac and it is a shipfic here more on the idea here.

3566509 The thing with Big Mac is... Well since he has no backstory, still needs to find a personality and the only real conversation he has ever had was with his own sister in chapter 4... You might as well use an OC for the story.

I would very much like a sequel to this

3564506 I don't have anything against homosexuals or bisexuals; I just don't find that shit attractive. Plus, you need to put in Rarity's reaction to Spike's relationship. This isn't a request, this is an order from the masses.

And I do mean relationship. This is too cute/creepy/hot to not become a lasting romantic bond.

3567656 I was thinking about doing an epilogue. Maybe have it take place a year later and have a "bring the secret girlfriend over for the Christmas party" thing.

3567815 Do this. Please

Sequel please.

3568704 I agree. Sequel. Please. BRING IT BEFORE MEEEE!

Ha that was quite cute a few more chapters of this could be made.

3562718 Me Too man, Me too

3562687 you mean like spikes sexual revolution, with slender running around and f****** everyone, excuse my french

This requires a sequel! Tis not a question or request! Tis a demand, nay, an order from the highest court of Tartarus (that being me ) and all those who follow! (They being EVERYONE ELSE that wants a sequel )

3567815 All of my yes. I would enjoy that very much so.

Godspeed, Gentleman.

at first iwas liek: what
but then i was like: aw yeah