Two days after a wild party, Rainbow Dash starts to feel feverish and is experiencing symptoms she has never had before. She worries she is ill and contacts Twilight Sparkle, believing the intelligent alicorn could help her find out what's happening. Together, the two ponies find out exactly what's wrong with her.
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Well, besides slips out of character it wasn't bad, but it wasn't too good either. Maybe because STDs might not be the best story focus to start your writing on.
I could be wrong...
Oh well, keep writing maybe try something different for a focus. Someone had to give some feedback. I don't like seeing someone with so many dislikes and no comments.
What made you to write this!
Well, I'll be honest. My Review:
Though not one of the most pleasant of Fics I've read, as I'm not too fond of fics that involve STD Discoveries like this, I do have to say, that this was indeed a very well written (save for the swearing and cursing) and very sweet story where the Main Character discovers something tragic about herself and she has the love and supprt of her friends.
And the character being Dash? Although expected in my own opinion, not like the other characters, who has a dream obviously, discovering this? Incredible in its own way.
I give this story a 4 out of 5.
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My kudos to you, my friend.
that's what you get going out with Soarin!! haha! applejack's joke was epic!
GREAT STORY!! 
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Thank you for the review. :)
I'm not really proud of this story, I'll be honest. I do believe it has so many dislikes because the out of character behavior, and maybe because it's about Rainbow Dash having STDS. While I was writing this I was worried it would offend some people, even though that's not the purpose. I really just took a shot in the dark with this story, and I suppose I rushed with finding a topic for the story.
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
Great start on your first fanfic!!
great start on your first fanfic!! Try putting much more detail into it.
.....................NOPE!
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;)
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What even drove yo to make this?!
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Nothing, really. I was rushing to find a topic for the story, which was probably a bad idea.
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Yep.
This is your first story? Mine is notably more sucky.
You have potential as a writer, but this needs a lot of work. First off, the grammar and syntax are weird pretty much all the way through. Secondly, this needs to be longer. Everything is just way too abrupt and awkward. And speaking of awkward, I'm not sure if there is a way to make "Rainbow Dash gets herpes" work. You have a good feel for the characters though, and a good idea of how to write for them. Fix the grammar, and maybe pick a different subject matter next time, and it should be good.
3713459 Oooh, didn't really think when I wrote that.
omg did she get a STD 💀💀💀