Pinkie Pie's diary.
One day Twilight decided to give all of her closest friends a diary, and made them promise to write in it, even if only occasionally.
What started out as a fun activity for Pinkie Pie, turns out to be an outlet for something more as she slowly discovers love with a pony she never expected.
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I dub this ship "Pixie" since it's fitting.
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I was wondering what I could call this ship. Thusly, I approve of Pixie!
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All hail the newly named ship Pixie!
This is adorababble!
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Way ahead of you.
Sweet ass idea as a pairing. I can dig it.
You can do it, Pinkie!
This pairing is awesome.
I like the idea of this kind of story, but the lack of paragraph breaks here makes Pinkie's voice very, very difficult to read. I hope you play with that a bit, because I would like to read more.
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I completely understand. But I'm not sure what to do with it. I want it to really feel like diary entries ya know?
The sugary sweetness of this story is giving me cavities!
A sweet little look in the day-in-the-life of one pony and her special somepony. I enjoyed it and heartily give it a thumbs up!
You know what isnt fair?
Nightmare Moon, who attempted to plunge the world into eternal darkness,
Friendship beam and boom she is forgiven.
Discord, Embodyment of chaos itseslf, who ruled over equestria for 1000 years of pain and turmoil.
Well fluttershy likes him so he is forgiven.
King Sobra who tormented one city, and ruled with an iron fist,
Well he should get a second chance too right?
Nope Magic love blast destroys him.
Great read! please make MOAR of this!!!
This was really heartwarming
3424556 Given the choice between readability and believability, I'd stick with the former every time. The suspension people of disbelief people employ for a good story is incredible. :)
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I think you might be right. I'll edit it when I have a chance. Other than the paragraph spacing, what did you think?
I very much liked this- enough that I'm eager to read the rest of the series when they come out.
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Reading through it now, so the notes may not be the most organized.
So, basically this story is entirely predicated around the opposite of "Show don't tell" and is going to be harder to work with as a result. The problem I'm having going through it is that there are interesting things that are happening, but not much in the way of detail. Without it, I feel like I'm missing something through the format rather than gaining. I'm not exactly sure how to work with that, other than to try expanding each entry. You can do pretty much whatever you want with the format, since people will accept it as Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie, which is a nice freedom. If you want to do a straight up prose section, you absolutely can.
If I'm being totally honest, this feels like a sidestory to a fic about Trixie (that's not in and of itself a bad thing), but I'm actually very interested in what that fic might be.
The lack of a clear timeline is difficult too - a quick bit of dating by each entry number might help.
Your voice for Pinkie is well done, hyper without being annoying to read. I'm a bit confused about her motivation though. She's not proactive with Trixie, which feels very counter to the character as I understand her, and makes for a bit of a less dynamic read.
You mentioned at the end of the last chapter that "Diaries Six" was your intended format, which I didn't realize as I was reading through and writing these suggestions. Why not do the all six diaries, but combine them story-wise so they're happening concurrently? There's a lot of fun to be had in that.
I think there are good ideas here, but it really does feel more like an outline or side-story to the story itself. I hope to see this expanded in some way. Sorry for the long post!
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I'm glad you made such a long post! Because you actually touched on many of my own ideas. For one, the reason I wrote this the way I did is because I'm trying something new. The general outline of the story is there, but a lot is left out. First and foremost is because it is set up like diary entries. Not every single detail of the events unfolding are gonna touched upon. Another reason is because I like the idea of my readers knowing the broad scale of what's happening, but not the finer points. It leaves a lot to the imagination, which leaves it open to a broad range of reader interpretation. Each reader could very well have their own idea about what's happening. Which I love.
Later I might come back, once the other fives diaries are done, and write out the whole story in a narrative.
The reasoning behind the timeline being as it is is because of what I mentioned in the first paragraph; reader interpretation. It's actually a lot of fun, if you think about it. The rest of the journals will be done the same.
About Pinkie being proactive...that part I can actually really understand. The way I was playing her character in this is one of her being new to the concept of relationships. Unsure and wary. Especially when Trixie initially turns her down. She's not entirely inactive in this, but is spurned early on. Which initially forces her into a spiral of self doubt, which she is known to have.
As for putting them altogether as one story happening simultaneously...that's something I've been thinking about. I very well might do that once I finish the series. It's an interesting concept, to be sure.
Thanks for reading, though! I really hope you enjoyed it. And I hope you read the following parts of the series! I've already got a good idea for the next step, and I think you'll be surprised. Rare ships ahead! I like trying things not many people have done before. :)
That was a very cute little love story. Definitely deserves a place in my favorites.
Regarding the rest of the series, I suggest you keep this the way it is. There's nothing wrong with having multiple installments - especially not if the others will focus on other characters. More importantly making them one fic will require you to either expand this one or take it down so you can repost it as part of a larger story. I'd rather just keep this one like this, and see where you're going with the rest as you write them.
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Personally, I like how most of the story is implied - it makes you use your imagination to fill in the blanks while keeping the story fairly short and easy to digest. I thought that was the real charm about it fic.
3424906 Noooo! You have fallen to the Espurr! I SHALL SAVE THEE!
Wow, that was pretty good! Can't believe no one has done a Pixie ship before! (Especially since Pixie stixs are, like, the BEST! Especially the Blue Raspberry and Grape ones, those are the bestest!)
Awww, this story was so cute. I have to favorize it immediately
This story has strength in that it is compelling in its ambition. Pinkie makes for a challenging narrator through her diary entries, and curiosity comes with the unlikely situation that is the pairing of her and Trixie. While the narration style is handled believably, the story suffers when it comes time to deliver on the exotic premise because of issues in the areas of characterization and conflict.
Characterization in this story is serviceable when it comes to voice. However, I was not as convinced when it came to certain aspects of the characters. The revelation that Pinkie is somewhat seasoned in romance is unexpected given her canonically hyperactive, immature nature. Perhaps more unexpected is Trixie appearing in the road, thoroughly depressed over her past actions and desperate to make amends. This is all not to say that these things are not possible, but rather, are unexpected enough to warrant some amount of development or build-up.
The area that I mostly want to focus on is the area of conflict in the story. The elephant in the room is Trixie’s reappearance in Ponyville, and while it would not be wholly believable for her to run into open hostility there, she seems to be accepted too easily in this instance. After the welcome party, then, it seems as though the conflict is coming within the foreshadowed relationship, and while conflict does come, it does not come as strongly as it could. There is a risk, that if Pinkie tries to pursue a romance she may endanger a friendship. This risk is not able to build tension, however, because (1) it is apparent early on that Trixie would like to get closer to Pinkie, and (2) Pinkie eventually accepts that she might only have a friend in Trixie anyways. Considering the above, the victory of the story comes off as a bit hollow.
Awesome fic!
my heart... it feels....weird, like,.... like it hurts?
and what this liquid coming from my eyes?
huh....weird?