Two bronies are killed, but instead of being sent to heaven, they go to Equestria. They then meet the other ponies and adapt to their new bodies. A so far unfinished story. Co-author is Isaiahayah (Gizmo).
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Is AJ really that...horny?
And if you noticed,your chapters are short and things are going really fast. I know you HiE authors want to get in Equestria and get friendly with all the ponies ASAP,but sometimes you've gotta slow down a bit for plot/character build-up.Other than that,not much grammatical errors. Keep it up,and good luck.
Ok this was fun to read
The derp is pretty bad.
You need to make this a LOT longer, and so much more detail, I'm sorry but this is just.
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As a co-writer of this I wanted to say that things will get more descriptive, things will slow down, and things will get a lot more fun.
Thank you for all the feedback
287187 Yes, yes she is
But yes, this is more of to develop AJ's romantic preferences. This is a long story, so there will be more character dev later on.
Just one thing, it should be "Well maybe you're her pick." Apart from this I didn't notice errors, though there is probably some others. Anyway, I shall read more.
Really, all of a sudden she loves someone who she does not know and has only been around for an incredibly small amount of time. Not to mention she took things quite far. That is really strange and was odd to read. Still, I look forward to reading more, I just think you should have left it a few chapters before she told him and put hints that she loved him in the chapters before. Just saying.
Yeah, you're moving way too fast with this story.
Also, I would have just sat there and watched the rape. (Possible while touching myself)
While I am enjoying the story so far, I agree that its needs to be slowed down a bit. Even though almost every Brony knows what these places look like, any good literature needs descriptive details.
When AJ started raping Gizmo I was like
then I was like 
and lastly I was like 
Ok, maybe the chapters could be a lot longer.
Again, LONGER CHAPTERS AND MORE EVENTS!
>>SonOfTheNorthe a little screwed up but I won't judge
Nice fic. could be longer. keep up!
288391 Brohoof
288124
You thought I was being serious?
It was supposed to be funny.
(But then again, I've got a dark sense of humor.)
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Sorry for misunderstanding you, I tend to do that, and I dont quite understand dark humor so you can't blame me haha.
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Alright we get it!
287801 Thank you for the advice. It will be cleared up in the next chapter.
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Too bad, I'm blaming you anyways! I'm assertive now!
*clop clop clop* so far so good. I really like it
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288152 Thanks!
292318 Someone's been following Iron Will's lessons
cool story, brony
302748 On the behalf of Isaiah, thanks!
my pleasure
310789 Hey connor
Last
and uhh write faster please if you dont mind 
354186 That's why I was surprised!
353727 On the contrary, I actually i think you guys should slow down with the writing and add more to the chapters. But eh, what am i saying? I'm not a writer. Keep up the good work!
Sorry if this chapter takes a while... Lately Jetfire has not been writing, and practically refuses to due so. So again sorry for the inconvenience you may have to wait longer than expected... to the expense of Jet
IT BAD
This is quite literally the worst piece of literature I have ever read in my life
write quicker so that i can laugh at this
Write please just finish