RainbowDash73,
Hi there young lady. I apologize for the late letter but this is the 3rd one I've written. I keep thinking on how I should approach you and I've decided to just to keep it simple and ask if you will forgive me. I understood my behavior is probably confusing to you and actually quite unforgivable but...
People do strange things on drugs Rainbow, and it's not just some people. It's all people. Don't do drugs! Anyways, I miss you lots and don't worry I don't think they will lock me up for a too long time but right now I need to be locked up. I was out there being a terrible person (as you witnessed) and this is what's helping me get right, so when they let me go I will be healthy and have my mind back to normal! There is nothing wrong with punishment and you can never be too old to be punished. It's what you do with that punishment and what you can get out of it that's important. I love you kiddo and I hope you know that and never thought any different. I'm so sorry.......
,love Dad
How about that time you met a Dashing young changeling,
who was smart, charming, and just a little bit insane?
But where ever could you find a changeling like that?
*Smiles*
What?
Hey dont look at me, im just here for the muffins.
that was really touching, rd73
3397442 this is a serious thing,
and thank you CMC
3411391
Hmmm i dont think i can be serious.
Think of me as a mix between,
Pinkie pies love of fun, Derpys Obliviousness,
And just a little bit of Discords annoying self gratifying humor.
3411522 then how about you shut your trap and not read this because this obviously isn't your type of story
3413116
Wow someones not so,
*Sunglasses*
FlutterShy, about telling me how they feel.
3415524 are you stupid?
3416487
Nope
Just Autistic Bipolar And Schizophrenic!
*Pulls out a muffin and slaps you with it*
I must go now,
*Puts on a cape and underwear*
My muffins need me!
*Flies into the sky*
3416504 it's about time you wierdo
I'll be completely honest here: this is an amazing story. I love how it's literally "bits and pieces" done in a short story form. It reads just like a girl's diary, and that's great. I feel like you're true to yourself when you write.
Okay, here's my typical grammar nitpick. I love the letter and the relationship between Rainbow and her father, but your grammar could use work. Fear not, learning grammar is like learning to ride a bike. Once you know, you just...know!
For a formal letter (I assume that this is informal because it isn't on business), you'll begin with a greeting in the upper field.
Dear RainbowDash73,
Numbers below 20 can be written like this: one two three
Hi there, young lady. I apologize for the late letter, but this is the third one I've written.
I keep thinking about how I should approach you but I've decided to just keep it simple and ask you for forgiveness.
I know that my behavior is probably confusing and unforgivable...
Where do I begin?
First of all, this is just a bit repetitive. It could easily be mashed into one sentence and elaborated, like so:
Rainbow, everypony does strange things when they're under the influence of drugs.
Second off, her father's "Don't do drugs!" is almost a cliche. The example below shows him sounding sentimental and thoughtful, not just a D.A.R.E. mantra:
Please, don't do drugs. I don't want you to end up like me.
"Anyways" isn't much of a word, but it's dependent on writing style. You can change it to read "anyway" or you can keep it like it is.
I really miss you. Don't worry; I don't think I'll be in this cage much longer.
I picture Rainbow's father as wise and sentimental with a good sense of humor, kinda like my dad.
I acted horribly, as you saw, but this is finally setting me straight. When they let me out, I'll have my mind back to normal!
This ending is chaotic at best.
Love, Dad
Bueno.
I would also like to mention, to any future readers, this is all real, so I'm sorry if i get mad at you if you post something sily but its almost offensive, this letter, its completely REAL! Thank you!