... it shot, like, five feet into the air... this the third time this has happened in the past two days. Are you going to do other stallions from the show? It would be funny if Iron Will, Shining, or hell, even Discord showed up.
Aww, Big Mac was so nice to her, much kinder than that first jerk. I also wonder why he called her lass, after all from his perspective, he might not have been speaking to a lass.
Well, this has been pretty entertaining so far, though I wonder WHEN Fluttershy plans on taking her first stallion somewhere other than her mouth... just cause, even if I can see her slowly building up to it, seems like she's gonna continue getting horny without getting really satisfied in return (since I don't think Glory holes work so a man could pleasure a female orally, at least). And I don't know, I can't really see Big Mac with a Scottish-like accent, if this is the first time you've ever written him in a story (to my knowledge). I think I've seen it done before, but it's been a while if so... anyway. Is this taking place during Applebuck Season? Due to this line:
He was resting in the bath, a bandage wrapped around his middle, forehooves folded in front of himself and and chin resting upon them.
Ironically enough, just saw that episode for the first time in a while, earlier today... since dunno if this is taking place during the series in off-screen moments or what, so far. And I wonder just how long before a familiar face enters a chapter as well on Fluttershy's intended side, if you have plans for her to be caught at some point, when someone else is already there or enters it during her time. Anyway, enjoying this so far, keep 'em coming!
3269796 I don't know, I just don't see Big Mac speaking that way really, outside of canon. It's not that I have it as my own headcanon and it's fine, though I kinda wonder why you called me on it, when someone else said something about it earlier... but eh. And cowfolk? You mean horsefolk? But fuhget about it and keep writing more! You're on a roll and I'd love to see more awesome writings from you, dude!
What I wouldn't give for a futa. I don't think I'd be able to handle it, possibly causing my groin to explode in a shower of blood at the epic-ness of being able to read such a scene... Please do it.
He probably wouldn't be speaking much at all, being Big Mac, and that's why the dialogue sounds so weird. Also, how does he know it's a mare inside the box, and why does he say 'aye' for 'I' like a pirate?
Its like I am superman and this is kryptonite, but I like some of the effects and am fatally curious about the kryptonite. Oh well I enjoy it so there is no reason to avoid it.
Ma'am, miss, darlin, sweetheart. If people are still complainin about the Scottish thing, take it from a southerner, ya can say lass in a Texas accent. But I'll leave ya a few if the more common ones.
3271380 Not really. There are horrible ones that have weak story, rushed, and bad grammar that are out there. If you think this is the type of fanfic that makes others hate fanfic then you have not been in this site long enough to know what is hated and what is not. TRUST me that we have WORSE out there. Not to say this in a mean or negative way.
3273070 If it had been said like that in the first place, I would have recognized it as a joke, instead of mistaking it for vast (but all too common) ignorance.
3273108 I'm mostly just messing around for lulz about it.
On a side note I hope the speed regarding Fluttershy's reception of events in this story picks up, there's not much action and way too much foreplay, not a huge complaint but that first chapter was kinda painful personally.
3273120 I think that's actually in character for Fluttershy, though. She wanted to tease, enjoy the moment, take it all in (so to speak). Dude just wanted to get his needs seen to...
3273139 I guess I'm over sympathizing with that first chapter's guard. I was... erm... revved up for action on it and afterwards found myself looking elsewhere in a tad bit of frustration
After seeing the Incomplete tag on Act 1 yesterday I spent about 3 minutes walking around my dorm room saying "I called it" after seeing the Macintosh tag to the story. Very well written and a pleasure to read, I hope to see more of our favorite red Clydesdale in the future (because of the rabid shipper in me)
Can we just take a moment to appreciate the fact that Macintosh is best pony. Not only is his cock beyond all reason of awesome in terms of size and "volume" but he was far more concerned about Fluttershy's safety, rather than his own orgasm. Please tell me they get to do this again properly without the box. They deserve eachother in this story^^
Saw this got featured. Didn't even see who wrote it at first. ...... Of course it's Anonymous Pegasus again.. >~> ....... How does he get me every time? *Opens to read it*
yus
... it shot, like, five feet into the air... this the third time this has happened in the past two days. Are you going to do other stallions from the show? It would be funny if Iron Will, Shining, or hell, even Discord showed up.
Hello, can we speak with you for a moment?
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ACT2... so soon... .YES...
3269346 THEY'VE FOUND ME!
Hm.
Seems awful familiar. In fact, this seems like a less entertaining version of the first chapter.
You should have made her do something different.
3269315 I SECOND THAT MOTION! Hell, why not throw Cranky, Spike, Mr. Cake or just one of the goat employees of Iron Will into the mix also!!!???
3269315 No Discord, please.
Aww, Big Mac was so nice to her, much kinder than that first jerk. I also wonder why he called her lass, after all from his perspective, he might not have been speaking to a lass.
and one day she got knocked up
Second chapter already?!
That's pretty quick! (Heyoo!!)
3269315>>3269447
I third the motion! Lets get some Shining or Spike in here!
Though no Discord.
Well, this has been pretty entertaining so far, though I wonder WHEN Fluttershy plans on taking her first stallion somewhere other than her mouth... just cause, even if I can see her slowly building up to it, seems like she's gonna continue getting horny without getting really satisfied in return (since I don't think Glory holes work so a man could pleasure a female orally, at least). And I don't know, I can't really see Big Mac with a Scottish-like accent, if this is the first time you've ever written him in a story (to my knowledge). I think I've seen it done before, but it's been a while if so... anyway. Is this taking place during Applebuck Season? Due to this line:
images.wikia.com/mlp/images/a/a7/Applejack_angry_at_Big_Mac_S1E04.png
Ironically enough, just saw that episode for the first time in a while, earlier today... since dunno if this is taking place during the series in off-screen moments or what, so far. And I wonder just how long before a familiar face enters a chapter as well on Fluttershy's intended side, if you have plans for her to be caught at some point, when someone else is already there or enters it during her time. Anyway, enjoying this so far, keep 'em coming!
3269793 it gives him a reason to be at the spa Time is relative, as always.
Also, what WOULD he call a female? Lass? Girlie? Sheila? I don't know how cowfolk be talking...
3269796
I don't know, I just don't see Big Mac speaking that way really, outside of canon. It's not that I have it as my own headcanon and it's fine, though I kinda wonder why you called me on it, when someone else said something about it earlier... but eh. And cowfolk? You mean horsefolk? But fuhget about it and keep writing more! You're on a roll and I'd love to see more awesome writings from you, dude!
What I wouldn't give for a futa. I don't think I'd be able to handle it, possibly causing my groin to explode in a shower of blood at the epic-ness of being able to read such a scene... Please do it.
3270167 Pay me money. Lots and lots and lots of money. I really don't like futa and will never do it willingly.
3269684
Guess you haven't had any sort of sex ed yet. Maybe next school year...
3269315
Also no Discord.
3270167
Would absolutely love a futa scene, but it seems the author can't write them.
3269457>>3269719>>3270426
Why cant Discord get some Fluttershy?
3270442 I agree. I would love to see a Discord scene where he's heard so much but is rather curious about it.
You know what ? A while ago I had basically that same idea, Fluttershy enjoying the anonymity of a glory hole, though I didn't bother writing it.
That means that it only makes perfect sense !
3269796
He probably wouldn't be speaking much at all, being Big Mac, and that's why the dialogue sounds so weird. Also, how does he know it's a mare inside the box, and why does he say 'aye' for 'I' like a pirate?
3270598
I don't even know.
3270603
sure that songs nice...but this one is better
3270256 i was jokeing.
Hehe, Fluttershy's become a bit addicted to that, hasn't she?
~Skeeter The Lurker
Its like I am superman and this is kryptonite, but I like some of the effects and am fatally curious about the kryptonite. Oh well I enjoy it so there is no reason to avoid it.
Ma'am, miss, darlin, sweetheart. If people are still complainin about the Scottish thing, take it from a southerner, ya can say lass in a Texas accent. But I'll leave ya a few if the more common ones.
3270442
Mofo be ugly. And creepy. I mean, if you find Discord sexy I'm totally not gonna hate. But. I'm just so tired of seeing Discord clop and porn. XD
3271072 I don't find Discord sexy at all. I just think it would be funny! And I didn't know there was a bunch of discord porn all over the place.
And this is the type fan fic that makes most people hate fan fics.
3271380 Not really. There are horrible ones that have weak story, rushed, and bad grammar that are out there. If you think this is the type of fanfic that makes others hate fanfic then you have not been in this site long enough to know what is hated and what is not. TRUST me that we have WORSE out there. Not to say this in a mean or negative way.
3270256 I prefer to think Big Mac is just that bucking awesome.
Pregnancy by fellatio
3270603 have a thumbs up for posting something that was actually enjoyable.
3270167 aren't there futa fics of fluttershy already on fim fiction?
3273091 There's a full blown fanon character named Futashy akin in fame to Molestia regarding Fluttershy
3273070
If it had been said like that in the first place, I would have recognized it as a joke, instead of mistaking it for vast (but all too common) ignorance.
3268962 it's probably my friend lmao, he thinks fs is his wifu
3273108 I'm mostly just messing around for lulz about it.
On a side note I hope the speed regarding Fluttershy's reception of events in this story picks up, there's not much action and way too much foreplay, not a huge complaint but that first chapter was kinda painful personally.
3273098I know so I don't understand why the request for more Futashy when there is lots allready?
3273120
I think that's actually in character for Fluttershy, though. She wanted to tease, enjoy the moment, take it all in (so to speak). Dude just wanted to get his needs seen to...
3273139 I guess I'm over sympathizing with that first chapter's guard.
I was... erm... revved up for action on it and afterwards found myself looking elsewhere in a tad bit of frustration
3273153
Understandable.
After seeing the Incomplete tag on Act 1 yesterday I spent about 3 minutes walking around my dorm room saying "I called it" after seeing the Macintosh tag to the story. Very well written and a pleasure to read, I hope to see more of our favorite red Clydesdale in the future (because of the rabid shipper in me)
3271163
Everywhere. Mostly in Discolestia, but a lot with the Mane 6. Also, Discolestia needs to burn. e.e Ew. It's as bad as Flashlight.
3271380 And this is the kind of comment that makes people hate preachy assholes who think they're better than everyone else.
Can we just take a moment to appreciate the fact that Macintosh is best pony.
Not only is his cock beyond all reason of awesome in terms of size and "volume" but he was far more concerned about Fluttershy's safety, rather than his own orgasm. Please tell me they get to do this again properly without the box. They deserve eachother in this story^^
3273398
Er. Mah. Bucking. Gerd. You... you hate FlashLight, too? Please say yes.
Saw this got featured. Didn't even see who wrote it at first.
......
Of course it's Anonymous Pegasus again.. >~>
.......
How does he get me every time? *Opens to read it*
Fluttershy?
A glory hole?
Oh this I gotta read!