As Rainbow Dash carried Scootaloo down the staircase she couldn't help but feel the childs little cold hands holding on tightly as she made her way down the steps. Scootaloo had her eyes closed, still tired from just waking up. Her onesie kept her warm at a reasonable temperature and the smell of porridge and orange juice filled the living room.
Rainbow took the final step down onto the carpet and took a good look around the living room, the curtains had been pulled open to let in the light and the TV was actually displaying something on the screen. Fluttershy was sitting down on the couch with a blue plastic tray resting on her lap side which had two basic white round plates.
Each plate had two slices of lightly done toast with a small dollop of butter; aside from the plates was two cups of warm tea both of them being in yellow cups with the image of pink butterflies in the middle of them. Fluttershy had currently taken one of the cups of tea and took a delightful sip, but her attention changed when she saw Rainbow Dash holding a very tired looking Scootaloo downstairs.
With a small smile and a squeal of joy. Fluttershy put down her cup of tea and put it on a spare space on the tray and waited for Rainbow Dash to make her way over.
She walked over to the couch with Scootaloo still gripping onto her shoulders tight as ever and lowered herself onto the couch to sit down. With Scootaloo in a new position she felt even more comfortable than before, she was able to rest against Rainbow Dash without having to feel her weight collapse on her as her fatigue got over itself.
"Good morning Scootaloo, how is my little girl doing?" Fluttershy leaned over keeping in mind that the tray was still on her lap, slightly whispering into the ears of her daughter and watching Scootaloo opening her eyes was always a delight. With a groggy yawn and the lick of her lips, it seemed that Scootaloo was starting to finally wake up.
"Hello mommy..." Scootaloo gave out a little smile at the sight of her mother sitting beside her, she stretched out an arm and reached out for Fluttershy's yellow night gown and grabbed onto her arm piece. Fluttershy lifted her hands to take hold of Scootaloo's.
"Did you have a good sleep? I hope it wasn't too cold for you inside the nursery; it can get a bit nippy in there sometimes. Did your onesie keep you warm?" Fluttershy leaned back and rested her back against one of the pillows on the couch; still keeping a firm grip on Scootaloo's hand she began to rotate her thumb round the child's palm in a circular motion.
"I'm fine mommy; I was really warm when I fell asleep..." Scootaloo stopped to yawn again, placing her other hand across her mouth. "The big fluffy blanket was really comfy, and then Rainbow Dash woke me up and changed my wet diaper."
"You wet your diaper? Do you need a changing; I can quickly do it if you want me to." Fluttershy leaned back up from her pillow and looked back and forth at both Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash looking rather worried.
"No it's okay mommy, Rainbow Dash changed me." Scootaloo smiled back as Fluttershy leaned back into her seat and sighed in relief.
"Oh okay, thank you Dashie." Fluttershy nodded and went back to her breakfast; she picked up her cup of tea and started to sip the liquid.
"No probs' Fluttershy, we still got this meeting again. I ain't lettin' up today, no excuses, 'n stuff." Rainbow Dash smirked as she patted Scootaloo on her back, the child dug her head back into Rainbow's chest and wrapped her arms around her.
"You're gonna make sure the Mayor is making me stay away from those stupid foster parents again aren't you!" Scootaloo cheered, she threw one arm up into the air, barely missing Rainbow's head as it went up in the air.
"Yeah, I'm gonna make sure Fluttershy is your mommy and I'm your aunt." Rainbow smirked, she watched Scootaloo turn her head up in confusion and then follow a series of small giggles from Fluttershy as she drank her tea.
"I want you to be my sister! Y'know! A really, really, really big sister who knows about beer and boys!" Scootaloo smiled, she tightened her arms round Rainbow Dash, who in sync looked at Fluttershy with a smile about to burst. Both Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash started to giggle and laugh at Scootaloo's comment.
"Heh, heh. Scoots, I don't know much about boys, 'cause I've never had a boyfriend. But I know a lot about beer though, but you're too young to drink any." Rainbow laughed, she raised her arm and wiped the tears that fell down from her face.
"I know..." Scootaloo blushed amongst the laughter; she turned to see Fluttershy still taking sips from her warm tea. "I just want a big sister that I can play and talk to. Like Sweetie Belle and Applebloom, they got sisters... they do stuff together. I wanna go out to the park and do stuff like that again, it'd be so cool."
Without thinking, Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash looked back at each other with warm smiles nearing themselves into nice subtle grins. Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes and mussed Scootaloo's purple hair.
"Sure. I'll be your big sister, only on one condition." Rainbow giggled.
"What is the condition?" Scootaloo asked.
"You do some good in school, concentrate hard and don't waste your lessons fallin' asleep." Rainbow mussed up Scootaloo's hair again, making it more of a mess than it already was. Her cheeks began to glow a bright red as soon as Rainbow finished, she turned her head to look at her mommy and smile a little.
"Don't worry Scootaloo; me and Cheerilee can help you get better at reading." Fluttershy gave off another warm smile and returned back to her tea, she lifted the cup back up and drank the final mouthful of warm sweet tea.
"Yeah, I'll teach you how to swim or something." Rainbow added.
"Swimming? But we haven't got a beach." Scootaloo giggled at how silly the idea seemed.
"I didn't say anything about the beach; I'm talkin' about the lakes in the forest." Rainbow explained.
"But I don't have any swimmies; do you expect me to swim in my diapers or something?" Scootaloo laughed.
"No, Fluttershy will buy you some swimming costumes or ask Rarity to make some for you." Rainbow Dash shook her head and moved her arms, she placed her hands under Scootaloo's armpits and lifted her up onto a spare space on the couch and stood up.
"Are you alright Dashie?" Fluttershy asked.
"Never better, I'm gonna go for a shower if you don't mind. You two have breakfast and get dressed." Rainbow Dash lifted her arms up into the air and stretched her arms until she started to groan from the relief of pain. She headed over to the stairs and started to make her way up until something stopped her, she took two steps back and leaned over the banister to look back at Scootaloo and Fluttershy who were both intently watching.
"Oh yeah - In the meantime, Fluttershy, why don'cha tell Scoots about the diaper under your gown." And with that, Rainbow Dash quickly went up the stairs.
Scootaloo sat with her pacifier back in her mouth until she spat it out. Only to cause it to dangle around her neck. Fluttershy's cheeks were blasted with a bright red; she looked down at her gown and then looked at Scootaloo.
Thirty Minutes Later...
Rainbow Dash kicked open the bathroom door, a massive gust of cold air and steam mixed together and roamed freely into Fluttershy's bedroom. A large yellow towel with the image of a pink butterfly was wrapped around her wet body; a second towel was wrapped around her head keeping her hair in check as droplets of water fell down onto her face.
The curtains were lazily draped over the windows in the bedroom by Rainbow Dash; her clothes were set down on the bed and were also just messy. Her shoes were on the floor with the socks inside of them, her underwear, tank top and running shorts were on top of the bed. She walked over to her clothing to take a good look at what she put down.
She lowered herself onto the bed and started to unwrap the towels surrounding her, they soon dropped completely revealing Rainbow's body. The temperature soon caught up with her and a cold blow went down her back.
"Uh... Dashie are you... Eeep!" Without a warning or a notice, Fluttershy opened her door and burst into her bedroom to see the sight of Rainbow Dash lying down on her bed without any clothing whatsoever. She quickly pulled up her hands in front of her face and blushed a bright red across her cheeks.
"Hey, Fluttershy wait a minute. Come in, I gotta talk to you." Rainbow Dash yelled over to her friend hiding behind the door, she kept herself on the bed and wrapped a part of the towel around her lower areas. But still kept her chest revealed.
It took a few seconds but Fluttershy managed to poke her head round the door with her eyes closed, trying her best not to look at her best friend without clothing on her. She covered her eyes with her hands and slowly made her way over to the bed.
"Dashie... I'm really sorry; I didn't know you were naked... Please don't be angry..." Fluttershy mulled her way over the bed, Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes and reached and pulled Fluttershy over to the bed until she sat down. But her eyes were still covered up by her hands.
"We've both got boobs Fluttershy; I don't know what you're scared of." Rainbow Dash groaned, she placed and wrapped her wet arm around Fluttershy and made a mark on her gown.
"S-Sorry... It's j-just y-your privacy..." Fluttershy was pulled over to Rainbow's side; her head was slightly leaned against Rainbow's skin. She could feel the cold droplets falling down her skin while her eyes are still shut.
"Nah, that's okay. Listen, I wanna speak to you." Rainbow Dash smiled.
"Wh-What do you want to t-talk about?" Fluttershy whispered.
"How's Scootaloo?"
"Uh, fine... she's just eating breakfast. I will um... get her into her uniform after she is finished with her toast and orange juice."
"Good, we can talk for a moment."
"Is s-something wrong?"
"Nah, I just wanna know... are you kinda wondering about what has been going on lately?"
"N-No..."
"Think about it Fluttershy, your dream is gonna come true."
"M-My dream?"
"Yeah you said you wanted a family, right?"
"Y-Yes..."
"And now you're getting it. Just like that... I'm gonna be a sister and you're gonna be an actual mommy. How cool is that?"
"I think it's wonderful Dashie... but... I want to ask you something too..."
"What's up?"
"A-Are you going to be there? F-For me I mean... Because, I don't know what to do when our friends and the rest of town find out about Scootaloo... She might tell her friends and the adoption might get out of hand. I d-don't know if you want to help me tell them or not."
"Fluttershy, we are in this together. I ain't gonna stop helpin' you. I'm gonna help you look after Scootaloo."
"Y-You really mean it?"
"Heck yeah I do, I've known you for so many years we practically can do anything together."
"Are y-you sure?"
"Anything."
Rainbow Dash finally stopped talking and wrapped her wet arms around Fluttershy's chest, lightly holding her in place and making even more of a mess on her yellow gown.
"Dashie, is it okay if I clean you? Well, it's just that I have to keep my babies nice and warm you see." Fluttershy leaned away from Rainbow Dash and slowly opened her eyes, trying her best to not look down at her friend’s lower exposed body she grabbed the yellow towel and started to rub the warm material against Rainbow's wet skin.
"Thanks." Rainbow happily groaned, she leaned forward and allowed Fluttershy to place the towel on her backside to dry the rest of her off. Rainbow Dash lifted her arm and covered up her chest and crossed her legs to prevent her 'areas ' being seen.
Fluttershy got into her job quite well, she was so focused on getting Rainbow Dash clean and dry, the sound of childish laughter filled the room until both of them looked up at the doorway to see Scootaloo standing by the door with her hands over her mouth, preventing loud giggling to come out of her.
"Tee-hee, look Rainbow Dash! You have boobs!" Scootaloo pointed over and uncontrollably laughed out loud.
"Laugh it up Scoots; you'll have some when you're our age." Rainbow Dash huffed.
"Now, now Scootaloo. We need to get you dressed for school today; did you eat all of your breakfast?" Fluttershy spoke a little louder and gestured for Scootaloo to come over. With her onesie still on, Scootaloo waddled over to her mommy and nodded.
"Yes mommy I had all of my breakfast." Scootaloo nodded, she paused for a moment and then looked at Rainbow Dash. "Why are you naked?"
"Just had a shower Scoots." Rainbow Dash replied.
"Oh, is that why Fluttershy is drying you?" Scootaloo pointed towards the towel.
"Yep." Rainbow Dash smiled.
"Wait-" Scootaloo just thought. "If I get boobs when I'm older, does that mean I have to wear that bra thingy?"
"Yeah, but you shouldn't be worrying about that. You're only seven years old." Rainbow Dash rolled her eyes.
"It's okay Scootaloo; I'll tell you when you're older. How does that sound?" Fluttershy giggled a little and then reached over to give her daughter a small smile.
"It sounds pretty cool; I get to learn how to be a big girl when I'm older!" Scootaloo was happy; she jumped up and down a little which made both her mommy and sister smile.
"I think I'm dry enough, I'll get dressed." Rainbow nodded and turned round to reach for her clothes, she picked them up and started with her tank top. She lifted it over herself and plucked her arms through the holes.
"Come on Scootaloo, let's go into the nursery and get you dressed for school. We don't want you to go to school in a diaper." Fluttershy reached under Scootaloo and picked her up from under the arms and lifted her up onto her lap. Fluttershy took a moment to slowly stand up with the child in her arms; she looked back at Rainbow Dash now putting on her underwear and then headed to the door.
Ten Minutes Later...
Rainbow Dash leaned against the wall, impatiently tapping her foot on the carpet waiting for Scootaloo and Fluttershy to come out of the nursery. It had been at least ten minutes, she wanted to go outside and feel the sun in her face but her family was still holding up.
But finally after waiting, the nursery door opened and Scootaloo stepped out wearing her school uniform. She was wearing a gray jumper over a white button shirt; a yellow bow was rooted deeply into her hair. A short school skirt that went halfway down to her knees covered up quite a bit of her legs and she was wearing her shoes and socks.
"What do you think Rainbow Dash?" Scootaloo walked up to her sister and presented herself as if she were trying to model, twisting and turning showing off her clothing and trying to emphasize her yellow bow attached in her hair.
Rainbow Dash couldn't help but smile at the bow in her hair, the rest of the uniform seemed pretty standard. The bow seemed to add some life and colour into the gray dull uniform.
"You look awesome Scoots, the bow suits you." Rainbow leaned down onto her knees and prodded the yellow bow, causing it to sway back and forth.
Scootaloo held her hands together and blushed a little around the cheeks, she looked away for a moment and then turned back to see that Rainbow Dash had stood back up.
"Thanks big sis."
"No problem Scoots, what took you so long?" Rainbow Dash leaned against the wall and looked down.
"Oh... when mommy was changing my clothes she found out I peed in my diaper again." Scootaloo giggled.
"Did you do it on purpose?" Rainbow Dash asked.
"Yeah..." Scootaloo blushed a little more. "I needed to go to the bathroom... But I used my diaper instead..."
"That's okay Scoots, you should've told us."
"Sorry..."
"It's alright... So where is Fluttershy?"
"Just cleaning the nursery for tomorrow."
"Just you two, huh?"
"Yep."
"Y'know that Fluttershy wants to do what we do? She was wearing a diaper under her gown, didn't you hear it?"
"Yeah, mommy told me in the nursery she wanted to make us feel cool about wearing diapers."
Rainbow Dash looked from side to side for a moment, acting like someone was listening to them. She leaned over to Scootaloo and grinned.
"Maybe... We should baby her, why don't you ask her after school to be the mommy?"
Scootaloo's face lit up with a big smile, her cheeks returned back to their normal colours and she started to giggle a little.
"That sounds really funny!"
"You should do it!" Rainbow nodded.
"Tee-hee, yeah!"
The giggling and planning stopped as Fluttershy came out of the nursery dressed in her normal attire, her thick yellow sweater was on and her tight jeans were buttoned up. She was also wearing her socks and shoes. Thought, she looked entirely not happy. There was a certain familiar bulge coming out from her tight jeans and they were obviously protruding outwards.
"Fluttershy!" Rainbow Dash cheered. "We leavin' now?"
"Uh... Yes Dashie... Um... Scootaloo... Your schoolbag is downstairs..." Fluttershy was obviously up to something, her face was blushing and the strange crinkling noise Dash had heard earlier was still coming from her. She knew what Fluttershy was up to, but she didn't want to say anything just yet.
"Alright, let's go then."
To be continued...
Will Rainbow EVER be babied by Fluttershy again?
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I'm planning an epilogue after the story is finished, you'll have to wait and see what happens.
1819898 Of course, they still have their agreement.
Also I look forward to seeing Scootaloo being the "Mommy" for a change, perhaps maybe after that she can let Rainbow Dash be the "Mommy" as well.
And of course there's the upcoming bonus chapters.
I can relate to Fluttershy in that regard. XD If I walked in on one of my friends naked, I would feel so embarrassed, avert my gaze and feel bad for invading their privacy! Poor Fluttershy. XD But Rainbow's got a point! They both have boobs, so what's the big deal? True enough! So really, they both had a good point.
This was yet another nice chapter! Hooray! Fun little family moments and utter coolness all around!
I especially liked the bit where Rainbow promised to be there with her, for both of them. That was so sweet, and just, well, full of awesome! Like I said before, the idea of the three of them being a little close-knit family together has always been a headcanon of mine.
Mommy for a mommy again! Yay!
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People have pointed out that there is a lot more babying when it comes to Scootaloo's side of the story, whereas Rainbow Dash isn't as getting much attention. But to make up for it, there is the bonus chapters. But thanks for understanding.
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Thanks for commenting as always NintendoGirl, always a pleasure to read your comments. When the Christmas season is finished I will get back to writing, but in the meantime before the end of the week I am going to plan out the epilogue. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png
1821404 Have a good break! Looking forward to what's to come!
This is great. Keep it up. I can't wait to see how it ends.
... how did you make diaperplay boring, just end it already. It has been stretched out for long enough I think. I'll admit diapering fluttershy was abit interesting and then a family of diaper wearers is cute. I enjoyed the first few chapters, but once I found there was no protagonist and everyone was okay with it anyway, it became stale. It's like a whole planet of people wearing silly hats, it stops mattering once it is the norm and doesn't need to be the focus.
Scootaloo's adoption was an interesting turn of events, it gave the story much needed conflict. Then again, it would've resolved itself much faster, and only went on because fluttershy was blatantly stalling the plot. absolutely no one, not even the foster parents were standing in the way, and she still took time out of the story to feel sorry for herself.
You have also made rainbow dash and scootaloo's personalities so different, in the original work it was given a reason but not it almost like they are only using the names for publicity. It doesn't have anything to do with pattycakes other than the names and the fact that it involves diapers. I'm not trying to be mean, but don't call it pattycakes if it's so different that it would be original work without the names.
(also I kinda some how wrote this in reverse, so my closing opinion ended up first. Buck it, I'm not fixing that.)
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This is why I wrote the remake, just because it's a remake doesn't mean it has to be so close to the original that it should be played scene by scene.
I wanted to create a slice of life Pattycakes story that took the basic idea/principle that is Pattycakes and make it into a weaker and more acceptable version of the story without the use of extreme force and fetishism. While people still prefer the original over the remake is fine with me.
I guess you could get more of an explanation on the first comment that was posted on the story.
But I'm starting to null criticism that that has been posted, the story is coming to an end in the next one or two chapters but I'm not going to write them until the Christmas season is over.
1839006 fimfic inverts the comments so it will probably be the last comment. Also, slice of life tend to be eventful even if those events don't involve saving the world. The only parts I can think of that wasn't directly involved with the plot was the poker game, and the follow up in cheerilee's classroom. If slice of life is a valid excuse to turn fluff and filler into acceptable, everyone could say that it had some 'slice of life parts thrown in' when they are called out for padding out their story.
Personally I think trimming down the excess would be the worst part of being an editor.
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Switch comments to the oldest first.
1839068 >:3~ nuu!
Excellent story! I've been reading it since discovering it on deviantART and it's a fascinating tale. I feel like the adoption process should have taken longer and Mayor Mare shouldn't have been so okay with it. Not to say that people wouldn't be more accepting in this universe, it just needs some dramatic tension. The story falls a bit flat because of this.
Also, you really need an editor. I'm on Christmas break till the 22nd and would be happy to edit what you have so far amid writing my own story. This is a great story like I said, and it's a shame that so many errors crop up in grammar and such (I hate to sound like Twilight, but it is distracting . . . ).
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Sorry for the late reply.
If you are able to tell where grammar errors are or what type of problems I am causing followed by an explanation then maybe I could improve so I know what NOT to do in the near-future.
As for proof-reader I am closing to the end of the story and there is only about one chapter left, but if you wish, you can be a proof-reader for the bonus chapters segment of Pattycakes if you like. But it's up to you.
I know you are getting close to the end of the story but please include fluttershy pretending to be a baby. I very much want to see how she would deal with that situation and if she would embrace it or not. This story so good its gona be sad when its done. :'(
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Since the story is at the end I guess there is no point in holding in anymore spoilers, but no, she isn't going to be babied in the main story. But she is going to be babied in the bonus chapters.
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/91000/pattycakes-bonus-chapters
Click onto this blog and read Bonus Chapter #2.
1936913 I'd be happy to do that. I'll look over chapter one, send you my notes, and then we'll see.
I'd love to proofread the bonus chapters.
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Send me messages when ready.
I just love your writing! It's going to be a sad day once I finally reach the end, but still this has been an amazing ride and you did a fantabulous job!
I've been motivated to stories on here, I mean I made a story, just got to put words in, I called daddy discord: scootaloo, I kind of got writers block eheh :/