“Thank you again for showing up, Twilight.” Fluttershy whispers quietly from behind her friend.
“Its no problem; I'm always happy to help a friend!” Twilight says, giving a half hearted grin. While it was true she had no problem helping her friends, in fact she greatly enjoyed it, it was just it seemed like every other week Fluttershy came over asking her to come check out something 'scary' in the Everfree forest.
This time it was a bright light and odd noises. The odd noises were usual but the lights was something new, she must admit.
After several minutes of walking the duo near the edge of the forest, “Okay, Fluttershy, show me where exactly you seen the light.” Twilight says turning to her friend.
“O-okay.” Fluttershy replied nervously walking ahead of Twilight and into the forest. Fluttershy led Twilight down the barely visible path into the forest, but much to Twilight's surprise Fluttershy left the relative safety of the path and headed straight into the thick forest.
“Um, Fluttershy, we're not on the path anymore.” Twilight says, a small feeling of nervousness building up as they go deeper into the forest; and farther away from the path.
“I-I know, b-but the l-lights were coming from over here...” Fluttershy says with a trembling voice. It was clear that she wanted to run and get out of the dreaded forest but something compelled her to trek on.
The two traveled for a good thirty minutes and so far they haven't came across whatever disturbed Fluttershy. Finally, Twilight spoke up, “Fluttershy, I don't think we're going to-” before she could finish Fluttershy buds in softly,
“T-t-there.” she says almost inaudibly, pointing up just up ahead. Sure enough there was a faint blue glow coming from behind some tall bushes. Twilight stared at the glow for several moments before advancing towards the odd glow. After just a few more steps Twilight feels her skin grow tense, and horn tingle in a way that can only be caused by the presence of particularly strong magic,
“Fluttershy, I think you should hang back here and let me investigate.” she says, looking back at her friend. Fluttershy gives several large nods, not about to debate with the suggestion. Twilight takes a deep breath and slowly makes her way towards the light. While walking Twilight tries to figure out what kind of spell could leave this kind of signature.
From what she could make out it seemed like a teleportation spell of some kind, but one far more powerful than she has ever witnessed. But who or what teleported here, and more importantly why? These were questions that made Twilight uneasy as she neared the place of the glow. Finally, Twilight reaches the glow and pushes the bushes aside that was abstracting her view and takes a cautious look. What she finds makes her gasp a little in surprise; a large crater laid in an area where several mighty trees once stood.
The crater itself was charred black and was giving off a blue glow. What was a bigger shock was what was laying inside the center of the crater, though. Inside was what appeared to be a large bipedal ape, but the blue glow made it hard to see in detail. Twilight pushes her way through the bushes and towards the crater, keeping mindful for any potential threats. As she moved into the crater she could finally see the creature in detail. The creature was hairless, except for some short red hair on it's head and what looked like a large mustache. The creature was fairly stockily built, and had a nose that seemed almost as large as it's head. The oddest thing about it was that the creature was wearing cloths; a khaki shirt with matching shorts. Twilight stood over the strange being trying to figure out what it was whenever it shifts it's head, and mutters something incoherent, causing Twilight to jump up in shock and charge her magic for an attack. After a few seconds Twilight realizes that it wasn't a threat a moment and uncharged her horn.
Twilight examines the creature some more and noticed a small puddle of blood underneath it, as well as several large cuts on its arms and legs. It was also pale from blood loss. After a few moments of debate in her head of what course of action she should take Twilight gives out a heavy sigh, and levitates the creature up gently with her magic. She couldn't sleep at night knowing she left it to die. “Fluttershy,” Twilight calls out, slowly trotting out from behind the bushes, the creature levitated in front of her.
Fluttershy nervously peeks out from behind a large rock and upon seeing the beast Twilight was carrying quickly retreats back, shaking nervously. “Fluttershy, this...whatever it is needs help. It's lost a lot of blood and I don't think it'll last much longer.” Twilight says, moving closer to Fluttershy. Fluttershy takes another peek out from behind the rock, this time noticing blood dripping from it,
“O-oh my...” she says softly, lightly trotting out from behind the rock, “T-this poor thing needs help immediately.” she says, nodding a bit with her words.
Twilight nods as well, “Alright, let's get back to your house so we can take care of it.” she says before trotting back the way they came.
The trip back to Fluttershy's cottage seemed a lot quicker, despite the extra load that Twilight had to haul. The two bright the creature inside and Fluttershy instructs the Twilight to lower it down on her sofa. After Twilight gently lays it down Fluttershy goes off to get her medical supplies. Fluttershy returns after several short moments and begins to work on the creature's wounds. Several moments pass and a small groan comes from the creature, causing both mares to jump up in shock. The creature slowly opens its bloodshot eyes and looks over at Twilight before weakly shifting it's gaze over to Fluttershy, “S-smashing...” the creature says with a hoarse voice before losing consciousness again.
Twilight and Fluttershy look at each other in confusion over the creature's words, “W-what do you think it means?” Fluttershy ask nervously.
Twilight shrugs a bit, “I honestly don't know but I think it'll be a good idea to tie it down for the time being.” she says before levitating some conveniently placed rope and bounding the creature's arms and legs. “Okay, I think I'm going to go and get the rest of the girls and write a letter to Princess Celestia.” Twilight says, looking down at the creature.
Fluttershy nods in agreement, “T-that sounds like a good idea, Twilight. You go do that and I'll watch over this...thing.” Fluttershy says, unsure what to call the creature laying on her couch.
“Alright, I'll be back soon.” Twilight says before quickly trotting towards the door and exiting, closing the door firmly behind her as she left.
BLALAALRG
is his family gonna be in this from his daughters, son and wife as well as there primate friend in this story i think he would miss them terribly he a family man with a heart of gold~!
You didn't name the first chapter anything with the words 'smashing' 'poppet' or 'BLALALALARGH' in it. This story isn't cool.
All joking aside, I feel somewhat sad; stories like this should be done more humorously, and Nigel totally should have jumped up and 'blalarghled' and scared the jibblies out of them.
WAIT! I CAN WRITE! SORT OF!
Maybe another time.
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I was never a fan of the show, but the concept of this story does seem quite interesting as I have never seen a crossover with the wild thornberries (I think that's the name of the show, forgive me if it isn't). I can't find any major problems beside the fact that it seems slightly rushed. However, I wish to make one grammar point: when a character says something, it must be done in past tense.
E.g/ "A brilliant quotation.", she replied.
One more thing; fimfiction can be a harsh mistress as the fans can be hard to win over. I recommend you get one or two decent editors/pre-readers/proof-readers (whatever type of lingo you use) and follow the following plan:
1) Write draft no.1 and give it to editors.
2) Write draft no.2 using editors' notes
3) Give draft no.2 to editors.
4) Repeat with draft no.3 and no.4
5) Draft no.4 is what you will publish.
Good luck.
3128877 Humor will come soon.
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Thornberry strikes me as the kind of guy who would at first become very distracted by encountering a entirely new species and just over the moon that it could speak to him.
3129077 just like the time he thought he found a new tribe in the jungle and acted with great care but in this situation he be trying even more not to offend the ponies since they never met before he a pretty open guy very smart and cultured just a little clumsy but i think that add charm he pretty up beat and will bounce back pretty fast course he had his family with him think and thin i hope this story will show the family pov of what caused his transaction to a new world in time when he remembers.
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I shall anticipate this humor...
Do not... dissapoint meh.... :fatitalianbossguy:
I wonder if he'll find the legendary Tikbalang tribe?
I only have one thing to say to this:
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Very smart of you to save his actual awakening to next chapter. I'll definitely wait with anticipation for the next chapter 8D
Nigel Thornberry- Commentatorcus-Mustacheaco- Omnivore
This species of homo-sapien is well known to be outgoing and dangerously curious. Although it lacks a bit in intelligence, it makes up for in heart and british wit. The most defing features of this beast is the large proboscis and deep red facial hair beneath it. This creature will spend its days with its family traveling everywhere in the name of finding unique animals and educational film. Unlike most creatures in the animal kingdom, this being will try to get as socially and uncomfortably close to other animals as possible. It has a taste for kippers and tea. It also is believed to have a mating call of sorts.
i knew it
it was only a matter of time before someone did this
3131500 lol right in the right way too lol
I think we know which unicorn and pegasus are gonna get along with Nigel.