"sipping on your tankards of cider." did you want tankard to be plural. "Most the talking is done by Pinkie, " you forgot "of" after most.“Man, it’s been so long it’s been since I’ve last played this!” that sentence needs revision. I'm sorry if this offends you are isn't wanted i just have been in a mood to point out these things.
284281 Yikes, how did I miss all of those? Gimme a sec. "sipping on your tankards of cider." can stay, since each character has their own tankard, it's a plural. If it was singular, you, Pinkie and the Apple family would all be drinking from the same mug! I see where you're coming from though.
The other two are fixed, though, cheers! No matter how many times I look through it, some mistakes still seep through, eh?
I'm commenting as I read through, sorry if this was already mentioned/explained elsewhere, but "boyfriend" instead of "coltfriend" or somesuch rather surprised me. Other than that, thoroughly enjoying this!
Would I go back? Fuck no, everyone can live without me, and even if they want me back, i'd still say no.... that is unless there was a world war and American young adults were being drafted, I would head back. Honor and glory for the Human race. Edit: Humans vs. Aliens or America vs. The World
Rainbow and Rookie...that's a reference to your Rainbow Dash fic isn't it? Wonder what Dash did/said to him, since this seems to take place at some point after that fic ends.
i love how the sequel to spreading your wings and hers references to this story with the whole party and rainbow not wanna talk about what happened, its fun when fan fics like this run in the same universe. Its why end of ponies made me go "DAMN" outloud because they specificly mention lyra, which means shorts skirts and explosions fan fics are not the same universe, which always pleased me to think they were.
“Trust me, I probably wouldn’t be able to hurt you if I tried,”
The nearest chair would be deadly enough. Failing that, a kick/stomp to the back of the hindleg knee joint as it tries to buck you would suffice for crippling it, as would a jab to the eyes or even a good punch straight to the nose. The height discrepancy probably means a good head kick would be feasible even for the fattest of fatass neckbeards.
I think you underestimate the human capacity to wage bloody, glorious warfare.
1142316 Nope. They use the term boyfriend and girlfriend. Check Heart and Hooves Day episode; Sweetie Belle: "What about this one? He seems alriiight..." Scootaloo: "His girlfriend sure thinks so!"
"...small cornfield and grapevine extensions, where your dexterous hands would be more useful than hooves."
First of all, I don't know why this would even matter, because the ponies have never shown a disability with using hooves like hands. they always pick up stuff with their hooves in the show. So to me the fact that he actually has fingers would seem rather irrelevant to them from a productivity standpoint. Further, where in the hay did you get the cornfields and grapevines from? in all the seasons of ponies and with as many times as we as an audience have been to sweet apple acres i don't remember ever seeing a cornfield or grapevines there they aren't even mentioned as being part of the business. yet suddenly they're here now...
1945319 "they always pick up stuff with their hooves in the show" Er... no. They use their mouth. Applejack picks the cornfields in one episode with her mouth . Granny Smith stitches blankets with her mouth. Mr Cake changes a baby's shit-filled daiper with his mouth. Of course hands would be preferable. By the way, as you quoted it yourself, it says "where your dexterous hands would be more useful than hooves." Not once does it mention that as a disability. That's just you jumping to conclusions.
"Further, where in the hay did you get the cornfields and grapevines from? in all the seasons of ponies and with as many times as we as an audience have been to sweet apple acres i don't remember ever seeing a cornfield or grapevines there they aren't even mentioned as being part of the business. yet suddenly they're here now... " Applejack's tending to cornfields in Return of Harmony, picking them up with her mouth, as mentioned earlier, and putting them in a cart behind her (then Discord transforms her stock into popcorn during a chocolate rain storm). And she's making grapejuice from grapevines, with Apple Bloom as Sweetie Belle watches, in Sisterhooves Social, and the grape juice thing actually becomes part of the big race near the end. Rewatch the episodes. Not only are they both mentioned and shown, they also have quite a lot of screentime!
1947885 Strange, I swear I saw Pinkie hold something with her hoof once or twice in the show. Though I know it's mostly their mouths or magic they use. Course I could be wrong.
Hm sincerely there seems to be some issue... How come that this guy is in Equestria long enough to develop a firm and strong attachment with Applejack and still NOT long enough to even REMEMBER the name of her best friends that more or less pass half their time with her... Doesn't make sense...
"sipping on your tankards of cider." did you want tankard to be plural. "Most the talking is done by Pinkie, " you forgot "of" after most.“Man, it’s been so long it’s been since I’ve last played this!” that sentence needs revision.
I'm sorry if this offends you are isn't wanted i just have been in a mood to point out these things.
a really enjoyable fic
Dash will lose, I feel it
Its so awesome that you connect your other stories into one world, i can't stop thinking about it!
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Yikes, how did I miss all of those? Gimme a sec.
"sipping on your tankards of cider." can stay, since each character has their own tankard, it's a plural. If it was singular, you, Pinkie and the Apple family would all be drinking from the same mug! I see where you're coming from though.
The other two are fixed, though, cheers! No matter how many times I look through it, some mistakes still seep through, eh?
Yay, my first comment got eaten!
So Crowley, nice work; I wasn't sure you could pull this off but you did. I still want my Zecora story though, just sitting here waiting...
I have to ask though, why no Lyra? I would think she'd be psyched to have a human around.
I'm commenting as I read through, sorry if this was already mentioned/explained elsewhere, but "boyfriend" instead of "coltfriend" or somesuch rather surprised me. Other than that, thoroughly enjoying this!
i dont give a rats ass about mistakes all i care about is the story itself... which by the way KICKS ASS
Would I go back? Fuck no, everyone can live without me, and even if they want me back, i'd still say no.... that is unless there was a world war and American young adults were being drafted, I would head back. Honor and glory for the Human race. Edit: Humans vs. Aliens or America vs. The World
Rainbow and Rookie...that's a reference to your Rainbow Dash fic isn't it? Wonder what Dash did/said to him, since this seems to take place at some point after that fic ends.
Hmm... Something's strange... I feel it... Washing over me... Oh... God... IT'S THE CUTENESS.
i wounder what happend to RD
Rookie... Rookie...
Is that a "Spreading your Wings and Hers" reference?
Darn I liked that story, still gotta read the second one though...
And then Rainbow Dash makes like that trucker guy that arm-wrestled Dexter's (Dexter's Lab) father and got thrown through a wall.
'Whump'
Rainbow: "I...you... how did...? You beat me in under two seconds!"
Big Mac:"Eeyup"
http://buttersafe.com/2008/10/23/the-detour/
The comic is large or I would just post it. Anyway, this is what I was reminded of.
"You ended up in Equestria on a leisurely stroll?"
"I am not a clever man."
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Buttersafe is awesome. Nopony forget it!
Dash called Rookie Soarin' during sex. Problem?
>>Thunder Ice
SPOILER!!!
i can see apple bloom being a big fan of that eggs box...
i love how the sequel to spreading your wings and hers references to this story with the whole party and rainbow not wanna talk about what happened, its fun when fan fics like this run in the same universe. Its why end of ponies made me go "DAMN" outloud because they specificly mention lyra, which means shorts skirts and explosions fan fics are not the same universe, which always pleased me to think they were.
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Crowley said that all of the stories connect to each other.
If you read Spreading Your Wings and Hers, then you should understand.
"Dont you two have boyfriends" (hardcore FlutterDash Fan here) *pukes*
“Trust me, I probably wouldn’t be able to hurt you if I tried,”
The nearest chair would be deadly enough. Failing that, a kick/stomp to the back of the hindleg knee joint as it tries to buck you would suffice for crippling it, as would a jab to the eyes or even a good punch straight to the nose. The height discrepancy probably means a good head kick would be feasible even for the fattest of fatass neckbeards.
I think you underestimate the human capacity to wage bloody, glorious warfare.
I love the pictures placed into these stories. It's a nice touch that makes them stand out in my mind.
Coltfriends. Fluttershy's and Rainbow Dash's COLTFRIENDS.
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Nope. They use the term boyfriend and girlfriend. Check Heart and Hooves Day episode;
Sweetie Belle: "What about this one? He seems alriiight..."
Scootaloo: "His girlfriend sure thinks so!"
RD hoofwressling Big Mac?? Wonder who's gonna win!!!
"...small cornfield and grapevine extensions, where your dexterous hands would be more useful than hooves."
First of all, I don't know why this would even matter, because the ponies have never shown a disability with using hooves like hands. they always pick up stuff with their hooves in the show. So to me the fact that he actually has fingers would seem rather irrelevant to them from a productivity standpoint. Further, where in the hay did you get the cornfields and grapevines from? in all the seasons of ponies and with as many times as we as an audience have been to sweet apple acres i don't remember ever seeing a cornfield or grapevines there they aren't even mentioned as being part of the business. yet suddenly they're here now...
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"they always pick up stuff with their hooves in the show"
Er... no. They use their mouth. Applejack picks the cornfields in one episode with her mouth . Granny Smith stitches blankets with her mouth. Mr Cake changes a baby's shit-filled daiper with his mouth. Of course hands would be preferable. By the way, as you quoted it yourself, it says "where your dexterous hands would be more useful than hooves." Not once does it mention that as a disability. That's just you jumping to conclusions.
"Further, where in the hay did you get the cornfields and grapevines from? in all the seasons of ponies and with as many times as we as an audience have been to sweet apple acres i don't remember ever seeing a cornfield or grapevines there they aren't even mentioned as being part of the business. yet suddenly they're here now... "
Applejack's tending to cornfields in Return of Harmony, picking them up with her mouth, as mentioned earlier, and putting them in a cart behind her (then Discord transforms her stock into popcorn during a chocolate rain storm). And she's making grapejuice from grapevines, with Apple Bloom as Sweetie Belle watches, in Sisterhooves Social, and the grape juice thing actually becomes part of the big race near the end. Rewatch the episodes. Not only are they both mentioned and shown, they also have quite a lot of screentime!
All the feels
They find rainbows unconscious body in a crater.
2731701 That's HILARIOUS! Almost wet myself laughing.
Oh I'm hoping Rainbow Dash eats her words, she deserves to lose for her cockiness.
1947885 Strange, I swear I saw Pinkie hold something with her hoof once or twice in the show. Though I know it's mostly their mouths or magic they use. Course I could be wrong.
Mac dislocates Dash's shoulder.
They find it in Baltimare.
Weak-ass main character, will probably be misanthropic, aaaaaand we're out.
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LOL
Hm sincerely there seems to be some issue... How come that this guy is in Equestria long enough to develop a firm and strong attachment with Applejack and still NOT long enough to even REMEMBER the name of her best friends that more or less pass half their time with her... Doesn't make sense...
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I don't follow. The guy seems to recognize AJ's best friends instantly here.
Wait, both Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy have boyfriends? Fluttershy's better be Discord! (Nah, just playing)
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If you're interested, you can read about their boyfriends in Spreading Your Wings And Hers (nsfw) and Even Kindness needs Kindness (safe).