The drenched bank was quiet, with only the sound of the water spraying out of the sprinkler system and hitting the floor. Terry stood in the middle of the room, his white eyes looking across the room and at the large group of stallions and a purple mare that stood at the entrance of the marble bank. Next to Terry was Rainbow Dash. Her face was bloodied and battered, her nose gushing blood like a faucet. Her rainbow mane was drenched and covered her two green eyes that looked at the dark knight. A small smile was on her face as she watched the spectacle. Twilight looked at her friend in horror. She couldn’t believe that this creature tried to kill one of the Elements of Harmony. Shining Armor glared at the dark knight, his white horn glowing a faint sky blue. The other guards behind him had their spears and their horns pointed at Terry, ready to strike if he did anything funny. They stood for what felt like hours, no one moving an inch. Terry looked passed the captain of the guard to see that there were more stallions in gold clad armor outside.
“I said hooves up! NOW!” Terry looked back at the captain of the guard. Rage was in the stallions sapphire blue eyes. Terry slowly began to raise his hands into the air. All the guards flinched as they watched his arms go into the air.
“W-What’s going on?” Terry froze. He glanced to his side to see a bunch of destroyed tables begin to shuffle. A small mare got out of the rubble and looked around. The teller’s eyes glanced over to the dark knight, and she almost fainted at his massive form. “PLEASE DON’T HURT ME!”
“It’s alright ma’am, you’re safe.” Shining Armor said. The teller wasn’t as beaten as Rainbow Dash was, with only minimal cuts and some splinters. This meant that this was a conflict between the dark knight and her.
“Wait, wasn’t there two of you?” Rainbow quickly glanced at the mare in fear. Terry smirked. “Swear there were two of you. One walked into the building while the other crashed through the roof.”
“You must’ve been hallucinating ma’am. Maybe when you fainted-“
“No, I swear on my mother’s flank there were two!” The mare glanced at Rainbow Dash, wincing at her battered face. “Rainbow Dash, when did you get here?”
“I-I was always here!” Rainbow stuttered.
“Really? But then where were you when two of those creatures were fighting?” the mare asked, confused that everything she saw was a lie.
“Ma’am, you probably hit your head and imagined what you saw. We’ll escort you to a doctor and get you some medical attention.” Two guards began to walk over to the mare, keeping an eye on the dark knight.
“No, I’m not crazy! There were two of them!” The mare shouted. Even though the sprinkled system drenched everyone in water, Rainbow Dash began to sweat. “And Rainbow Dash wasn’t originally here! She was… She was… She…” the mare’s eyes rolled back as she fell to the ground. A small silver dart stuck out from the back of her neck. Although no one saw it, because they were shocked at the mares fall and glaring at him, Terry looked through the window behind her, looking at the small hole in the glass. In the distance, a tall figure stood on top of a roof across from the building.
“You… You killed her!” one of the guards yelled. Terry’s attention was brought back to the enraged guards that glared at him. His white eyes narrowed at Shining Armor looked at the unconscious mare and back at him.
“That’s it! No more turning you in! I don’t give a mule’s flank what Celestia say, SHOOT TO KILL!” Terry quickly shot out a grapple from his forearm at the ceiling. He quickly shot upwards, barely dodging the flurry of magic bolts. His retractable wings quickly shot out as his rocket boots activated. He shot through the non-barred sunroof and into the night sky. He hovered over the bank and glanced over to where he saw the figure. But all he saw was nothing but dust.
Terry growled in anger. His thoughts were quickly interrupted as a flurry of magic bolts shot at him. A single bolt managed to hit him in the shoulder. He winced in pain as the impact almost shot him right out of the air. Smolder rose from the charred spot as his white eyes widened. The bolt managed to shoot off some the suit, leaving the red internals to glow in the night sky. He looked down to see Shining armor glaring at him with pure hate. His horn began to glow a bright blue as he pointed it at the dark knight. Terry quickly flew off, actually frightened by the look in the stallions eyes.
-BZZZMMM!-
The dark knight quickly banked to the side as a beam of magic shot at him. The massive beam managed to blow off the tip of his left wing and collided with a billboard. The structure exploded with a light show of fire and magic. The blast sent Terry crashing into a building. A stallion and a mare screamed in surprise, hiding under the blanket on their bed. Terry winced and rubbed his head, brushing off all the glass off his suit. He quickly got to his feet and looked at his wing. It was damaged, but he could still fly. His white eyes looked outside to see a large brigade of Pegasus flying to his position, spears in their hooves. He quickly jumped out the building and began to plummet to the ground. He glided upwards and activated his boots. He shot under the guards and down the streets, barely avoiding a traffic jam full of carriages. He flew around them and shot up into the sky. Just when he thought he was safe, a flurry of bolts shot at him again, causing him to growl in frustration.
A Pegasus guard shoulder charged him in the chest. The two plummeted to a tall rooftop, slamming into the stony ground. Terry kicked the armored Pegasus off him and got to his feet. He glanced over his shoulder and sidestepped a beam of magic that was shot from the rooftop across from his. The beam collided with the Pegasus guard, tossing it across the roof and crashing into a wall. He quickly proceeded to toss a batarang at the unicorn, slicing off his horn. Even though he knew that it was technically part of the unicorn’s skull, it was the only way to disarm them. His rocket boots shot to life as he shot into the night sky when a Pegasus shot out from one of the clouds in the sky and collided with the dark knight’s stomach. The two crashed into an office building, startling a janitor that was cleaning the quiet building.
Terry threw the enraged armored stallion off him. The stallion landed on his hooves and ran at the dark knight. He quickly caught the stallions hoof and right hooked him in the jaw, denting the golden helmet. He followed it up with a blow to the gut, causing the stallion to lurch forward. Terry let go of the stallions hoof and kneed him in the jaw. The stallion fell to the ground unconscious. The dark knight looked at the janitor pony. The stallion cowered behind an office table, shocked by the whole spectacle.
“Sorry for the blood stain.” Terry said as he pointed at the stallion that was now bleeding from his mouth. The stallion gulped in fear as Terry jumped out of the building and flew off.
“Battery power at 85%.” A small voice came from his suit. He mumbled in response.
“Cloaking really did do a number on the power.” Terry said to himself. He used the cloak ability too much that it took almost 10% of the battery life. Plus with all the flying, he’s just burning it out. “Better be more careful next ti-“
-BZZZMMM!-
A large blue beam shot at the dark knight. He barely dodged it, but the beam collided with his right foot. His rocket boot exploded on impact. Terry quickly lost control and began to fly around with no control. He quickly shielded his face as he crashed into a building. He rolled on the carpeted floor and crashed through another wall. The rocket boot shot him around the room and through another wall before he crashed through a window on the other side. His wings were slightly damaged, and yet he still glided in the air, slowing his descent. He crashed into a carriage and tumbled on the cobblestone floor. Ponies that were in the area screamed in surprise as they looked at the dark knight in fear. He retracted his wings and got to his feet, holding his head in pain. He looked at his right foot to see that the black suit was completely gone from the heel down. The red innards faintly glowed in the light of the street. He winced as he put pressure on the damaged foot.
The sound of hoof steps made him look around. Guards began to pile into the intersection, surrounding him. Some had long metal spears while others had swords and even shields. Ponies in blue police uniform began to clear the streets of bystanders as the guards filed in. A large spotlight shone down on his position, illuminating him in the middle of the street. Unicorns were stationed on the rooftops, ready for anything. Pegasi flew overhead, all watching him for any moves. He was completely surrounded and with nowhere to go. A stallion pushed his way through the guards and stood in front of the large brigade. Shining Armor looked at the dark knight, his blue eyes locked with his. His blue mane was still damp.
“In the name of Princess Celestia and Princess Luna, I order you to surrender.” Terry stood his ground. He didn’t say anything. The streets were quiet, with only a small cough from a guard and the shuffling of hooves. He looked over the stallions shoulder to see the main six watching in the distance. He looked at the guards that surrounded him.
“Listen, I know you can understand me freak.” Terry looked back at Shining armor. “So just give up. You’re completely surrounded.” He glanced over at Fluttershy. The butter mare hid behind her mane in fear. He was all alone here. With a sigh, he raised his hands in the air. Shining Armor stood for a bit and then nodded to a stallion behind the dark knight. The guard began to approach him, small metal cuffs in his maw.
Terry quickly spun around and tripped the stallion with a swipe of his leg. He dived under a magic bolt from Shining Armor and punched him upwards in the jaw. Once the captain of the guard hit the floor, anarchy reigned. A guard rushed at him, spear in hoof. Terry quickly caught the spear and took it out of his hooves. He raised his right arm to shield his face as three guards slashed their swords at him. The blades cut the suits forearm, the red wires glowing through the small slashes. He quickly pushed them back and tossed three batarangs at them knocking them incapacitating them . Terry jabbed the blunt end of the spear into a soldier’s forehead, knocking him out. He swung the metal rod around and slammed it into the side of a few guards. He flipped the rod in his hand and got into a combat stance. A guard rushed at him, with sword in mouth. Terry blocked the blade with the middle of the spear. He pushed against the stallion’s weight and caused him to fly backwards.
Another guard blasted a bolt of magic at him. The beam cut the spear in half. Terry flipped the two rods in his hands and slammed them both on each side of the stallions face, dazing the stallion. He followed it up with a hard knee in the jaw, knocking the stallion unconscious. He quickly tossed one of the rods at a charging stallion, which took it head first and fell backwards to the ground. He shot out two batarangs from his wrists at a group of guards. The blades ricochet around the group. A guard grabbed the dark knight by the neck from behind. Terry quickly tossed the stallion off of him and into an incoming bolt of magic. He gazed up, remembering about the unicorns on the roof. He dodges a flurry of bolts and tossed a batarang at them. The blade curved in mid-air and sliced off the horns from a group of unicorns on one of the surrounding roofs. A stallion jabbed a spear at his head. The blade cut the side of his cheek. He batted away the metal rod and kneed the stallion in the jaw. The suits neuromuscular amplifier made everything hurt more than it should. His forearm spikes extended in length as a group of stallions with swords rushed at him. He slashed at the blades slicing through the metal. The stallions stared at the hilts of their broken swords in surprise.
A unicorn rushed at him in rage. Terry slid backwards as the stallion collided with him. He grabbed the stallion’s horn before it embedded itself in his abdomen. He winced as he gripped the horn harder, trying not to make it stab him. The stallion pushed under Terry’s strength. With a war cry, Terry kneed the stallion in the jaw as hard as he could. The sheer iron grip and the power of the knee broke the stallion’s horn right off. The unicorn screamed in agony as he fell to the ground, blood spilling out from his mouth as his jaw was clearly broken. Terry tossed the horn to the ground. He was about to grapple away when a Pegasus flew down and slammed into him. The two crashed into a street store, glass and wood scattered across the floor. The store owner gasped in surprised as the two landed on his tiled floor. Terry grabbed the guard’s hooves before they impacted his head and pushed against the pressure. He kneed the stallion in the gut, hoping that it would get it off. The stallion growled in rage, steam almost seeping from his nose due to the cold. Terry slammed his head into the stallion’s helmet, groaning at how it was a bad idea. He kicked the dazed stallion off and flipped onto to his feet. He quickly followed up with a flash kick before lunging into the stallion and back out into the street. He jumped off the dazed stallion and quickly got into a defensive stance.
His retractable claws shot out as he leapt into the air, dodging a charging stallion. He grabbed the side of the building and jumped across the street and to the large horizontal flagpole. He quickly jumped off, barely avoiding a blast of magic, and proceeded to climb up the side of the building across from his. He ran up and jumped backwards to the other building. He did a handstand on the ledge of the building and flipped in the air, surprising a group of unicorns. He shot out a group of batarangs from his wrists at the unicorns, severing their horns before he landed on the rooftop as he glanced over the ledge just to barely dodge a bolt of blue magic. Shining Armor roared in anger and shouted out orders. Terry turned around and began to run, glancing behind him at the Pegasus’ that were chasing him. He paused as he looked across the many rooftops. A tall figure stood on a rooftop far away from him. A Pegasus slammed into his back and pinned him to the ground. Terry kneed the Pegasus in the groin, a small crack making him wince. He kicked the pained Pegasus off and got to his feet. He wasn’t surprised that the figure was gone. He jumped over an alley and continued to run across the rooftops. A group of unicorns on a building began to shoot at him, causing him to change directions.
-BZZZMMM!-
Terry flew backwards as a bolt of magic hit him square in the chest, knocking the wind out of him. He tumbled to the floor, groaning in pain. He shakily looked up to see Shining armour glaring at him. Blood dripped from his maw as he walked to the dark knight, his horn glowing. Terry knew those eyes well. Those weren't the eyes of an officer. Those were the eyes of a killer. Shining Armour kicked Terry in the ribs. Hard. The kick caused Terry to lie on his back. His chest was scolded, smoulder rising off of it. Luckily, the red bat symbol was still intact, just darker. Shining Armour slammed his hoof on his chest. The suit absorbed the blow, but he might’ve cracked a rib by the kick. He began to apply more pressure, his eyes locked on Terry’s eyes.
“I give you credit for trying to go out with a bang.” His voice was much lower and darker. “But today will be the last day you EVER harm a pony in Equestria EVER again.”
“Shining don’t!” a voice called. Shining glanced over his shoulder to see Twilight and the rest of the main six rush over to him. “You don’t have to kill him!”
“It killed that mare at the bank and maybe more than that!” Shining glared at the dark knight. “It deserves to die.”
“Without a fair trial?” Twilight shot back. “He may have done what he did, but he’s still a sentient being. He deserves a trial. Besides, the mare isn’t dead. she’s just unconscious.” Shining looked at his sister then back at Terry. Although he could’ve got out of this, he felt the power this ‘Shining’ had.
“…Fine.” Twilight sighed as Shining bonded the dark knight’s arms and legs in magic chains and cuffs. “But I want to be this monster's executioner.” Twilight winced as Shining picked up the dark knight with his magic. Guards followed their captain as they went to the police station. Terry glanced at Rainbow Dash, who had a small smirk on her face.
He has to clear his name, or this might be his last breath.
Seriously the guards are. DUMB! ASSES!
well this is bullshit.
dumb pricks
That should be "monster's".
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Fixed! Thanks!
3209154 You're welcome, I hope this helps.
3209080 With the exception of Shining they do suck that badly.
Shining Armour is acting like a foal throwing a tantrum. How I've always pictured him in reality.
I admit I might be forgetting something, but don't they know that there are changelings invading? Aren't there, like, ways to make sure that the criminals or victims aren't changelings?
Where is Phoenix Wright when you need him...
Well then i found out Christian bale isn't playing Batman in the Batman vs Superman movie it's Ben Affleck my world is now ruined.
But Shinging Armour man don't be a dick I mean don't kill Batman the Joker won't be complete other wise and you don't want a pissed of Joker on your ass ... Or even a normal Joker!
Damn it Terry! You have a mouth, use it. Usually you have a hard time keeping it closed. All it takes is the word changeling.
Shining Armor sucks. Great chapter.
Good story and all, but seriously, the logical fallacies are started to really affect the story in a very bad way. You should have really thought of a good, unquestionable reason why Terry wouldn't just say, "she's a changeling!" when that mare started talking. Even if they didn't believe him outright it would have probably led to a far more favorable conclusion then sitting there and doing nothing. You can't just say they wouldn't believe him so there's no point in trying. It literally would have cost him nothing to say it and only had potential benefits. I know your doing these things for the sake of drama and plot, but you have to make sure that your characters are acting and reacting in realistic ways, because no matter how magical or fantastic your world is, people will always be people.
On a side note, this is a bit late, but what was with the overwhelming police response in the beginning. He was attack by the first set of police almost immediately after saving FlutterShy, after that one screams from the loss of his horn, there are seemingly hundreds of police sweeping through the city. None of the police had time to call it in and I doubt that scream put them all on high alert. I hear screams every night but don't know if they're real or people screaming for fun or something. Heck, you call 911 in Manhattan and your lucky to get a squad car at your location within the hour.
I know some people may think I'm just being mean or nit-picky, but these are the kinds of things that publishers are going to question you about and prevent you from ever getting a work published for sale. You may think that such a thing doesn't apply to a nonprofit fanfiction, but I rather you correct these weaknesses in your writing now rather than when you start sending work into publishing agencies. And if you don't intend to ever publish something, well it doesn't hurt to improve ones skills.
Good luck and keep writing, despite my criticism, this is still a pretty good story and I would like to see how it ends.
damn, this was a good chapter.... I can't wait for the next, keep up the great work!
..................................................................I've got nothing to describe this chapter. None of the words I can think of can do it any justice.
I do agree with "Ketvirtus". USE YOUR WORDS TERRY!! GEEZ!
He could have gotten out of it, if a certain dark mystery figure hadn't stopped the mare from talking. Also, WHERE IS THE REAL RAINBOW DASH!?!? *sigh* .......One problem at a time, one problem at a time. First Batman's trial and then the other mysteries.
Great job so far Grave_wing. Keep it up.
3209430 You do make good a point about how the character's "reaction to action" seems to be a bit off, though if anything don't forget that after the first encounter happened, a few weeks had passed which allowed the Bat-ling to cause major problems, in turn having the guard step up patrols to try and catch him.
Also thanks for the advice that you left, even though you meant it for Grave_wing, I'll also keep that in mind for my story as well. Unless in my story the reactions to certain things are suppose to be the opposite of what is actually suppose to happen, meh we'll see.
AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH JUST READING THIS MAKE ME WANT TO RIP MY GOD DANM HAIR OFF FUCKING SUPID GAY ASS SHIT FOR BAIRN PONIES IN SO MANY WAYS, THOS RACE'S BASTERD THAT CAN'T GET THERE FUCKING ASS OUT OFF THERE POLTS JUST TO STOP AND FUCKING THINK LIKE MAN AND JUST LOOK AT IT BOTE SIDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh Terry, you in trouble now.
Oh... It seems Terry's gonna have quite a lot of "issues," eh?
Okay that was a bad joke.
PLEASE OH PLEASE UPDATE SOON. I love this.
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Except that, as a Captain of the Guard, he should be well above that sort of behavior while performing his duties. He should be picking up on things that seem out of place or character, especially after that whole Changeling nonsense. Hopefully there's an explanation for the excess hostility...
give me more or face my wraith.
(p.s. your story is awesome)
Pegasus may be what word processors tell you is correct, but it is pegasus. The capital "P" is referring to this Pegasus, as in The Pegasus from legend. You also used Pegusus' at one point, but that would mean they had ownership of something.
However what you wanted here was the plural of pegasus, which would be pegasi.
Good chapter. You better have a plan for all these hornless unicorns. In my mind, unicorns have a magical buildup if they can't expel magic for a long period of time. If they can't use their magic it will build up in their bodies and cause physical harm, but that is just how I always thought of it.
Getting that cut of is like losing an arm. I hope there is a way to heal that.
There seems to be some slight flirtations with the idiot ball in this chapter on the part of the guards. Particularly Shining Armor. You'd think as Captain of the Guard, he'd be more in control of his emotions. Also, nobody bothered to take a pulse when the bank receptionist fell over from the dart? Really? Only Twilight thought to do that? Nobody thought to keep an eye on Rainbow Dash after the receptionists' claims? The thought of changelings never popped up even ONCE, even though their invasion was presumably only a short time ago? Guards like this, or at least the Captain, are supposed to be able to keep a level head under pressure and make informed decisions even in the heat of the fight. As is, they all seem more like thugs than a military force.
Celestiadamn it why all the cliffhangers!? Make another chapter now!!!
Good, but you're confusing present and past tenses here.
he doesnt really have to prove his innocence just that RD is a changling then reasonable doubt would be established, but he would still have to take responsibility for all of the horns he sliced off
OBJECTION! Batman doesn't get screwed by the law. Batman IS the law!
Gotta say this is not bad at all there are a few things i'm questioning but not going to state them because everyone else have already, but in all not bad and gotta agree with a lot of people cannot wait for the next update.
This chapter was painful to read.
Mechanically, it's fine, but logically, it's so full of wtf that I almost can't believe it.
I mean, seriously. If he had said "I'll surrender if you can prove this is rainbow dash, and not a fake" right before the teller woke up, and "she isn't dead, there's a dart sticking out the back of her neck, and a hole in that window there" right after she passed out...
The situation would probably already be resolved.
Of course, there are ways to make this version here make sense, like if he tried to explain but got interrupted, but no technique like that was used here.
I would say that I have hopes that the next chapter will be better, but after the note implying he's gonna make a jailbreak... well, it cements my theory that he has a head injury, and is not firing on all cylinders, because only someone with brain damage would be dumb enough to do that.
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Thanks for thanking me. To clarify something though, when I said the beginning, I really meant the beginning of the story, not this chapter in particular. What I was referring to in my last review was Terry's very first encounter with the law of Equestria, back in that alleyway with Shy and the rapist.
And to Grave_Wing, here's an example of ensuring a scene is more believable. When everyone is standing around in the beginning of this chapter, you could have Terry open his mouth to at least attempt to reveal the changeling in their midst and have "Rainbow Dash" cut him off with a theatrical moan of pain and fall, as if Terry had seriously injured her. This would cause the ponies to react and refuse to let Terry get a word in edgewise, thus allowing the story to progress as you want it without having readers point out Terry's apparent stupidity.
Besides, as Ketvirtas points out, Terry loves talking, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wjTTmT_o5io&t=1m2s
Time to prove Terry is not the fiend
Nice cliffhanger. Eager to see more.^^
3209906 Also, didn't this appear behind the mare. Any detective would tell you then that Terry couldn't have killed her because he was in front of her.
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Whoa, you just went full caps lock.
Never go full caps lock.
I can't wait to see the guards' (especially Shining's) faces when they're proven wrong.
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The fact that Shining didn't properly check to see if the pony was alive or dead is a problem in and of itself. The fact that the angle was wrong for the attack is another. After all, Terry wasn't in a position to launch anything.
Since Shining flung accusations his way so readily, it means he has a grudge for some reason. Some reason to ignore the facts, something clouding his normal judgement. After all, one doesn't become a leader, let alone Shining's level of leadership, just by looking pretty and being a git. You have to have skill at your job, talent, etc. And in order to appropriately rise to Shining's rank, one must have experience and recommendations by the metaphorical truckload. A reputation for being a good leader and an amazing Guard.
That Shining would be so hot-headed, quick to throw blame upon the "creature", as well as failing to do certain things within the purview of his job (such as telling a guard to check the mare to see if she was dead or just asleep) means he is either distracted by something, or he has a reason to be personally hostile towards Terry.
And sincerely hope that Terry is able to convince them in the court.... though, no doubt, it won't be easy. You'll no doubt make sure of that. XD
3213429 sorry but reading it just want me to go to there world and cut off ther fur and manes to get there ass for head srt8 on.
LoL ponies being imbeciles. Sigh, It'd really disappointing to see a fic like this. I can only hope your not going to copy batman forever and just replace humans with ponies. Ponies really aren't like humans I'm REALLY hoping it gets cleared up SOON! The whole Batman taking the blame NEVER sat right with me and seeing your writing ponies doing the same makes me more then a little pissed. I can only hope this ends soon. Of course Batman fans may disagree I just absolutely hate when the good guys get the shortest stick it just sickens me.
Sorry, Batman's treatment just rubbed me wrong and seeing it repeated set me off.
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Every. Time...
I swear you're just watching me from a distance...
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Oops.
Secrets.
But, seriously, all I'm doing is following the train of logic. I promse! No spies here, so go ahead and put away that flamethrower.
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I get what you're saying, too. I'm a Batman fan, but I do see why you'd be angry with them too. Quite frankly, so am I. But he's Batman, so he'll figure something out I'm sure
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Batman in court?
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The reason for this, I think, is just for the build up for the story. But yeah, I totally agree. Some people just need to be a little smarter
It sounds like by this point Terry's Batsuit is pretty beat up. Does he have the tools and/or knowledge to repair it without access to the Cave? I think he's going to need it with all these mysterious forces ranged against him.
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Here's the damage so far on the Batsuit:
A few cuts and scratched on his forearms
A large tear on his right arm/biceps caused by Rarity
A couple dark spots on his chest and back from getting hit by magic
A tear on his shoulder from getting hit by Shining Armor's magic
The black suit is torn off from the ankle down on his right foot, rendering him somewhat flightless
Hope that helps!
Just an FYI, it gets torn up more as the story progresses
EDIT: He can still glide, though the wings are slightly damaged. Plus he still has grapple hooks and such
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So no repairs? Fair enough. With that level of damage I can see him not being able to use the suits flight & cloak functions, but those were always crutches anyway. Terry is perfectly capable of being Batman using his own skill, & I hope he can start working on finding out the nature of the forces working against him soon. Whether Changling Dash & that rooftop figure were working together or not, its clear there's some kind of plot against him, & he'll need to get the bottom of it with or without the Ponies help.
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No need to feel bad about being critical, I actually welcome it.
The overwhelming armada of cops was my fault. I was thinking ahead about when Shining would come in that it messed up my writing flow. The overwhelming cops weren't supposed to happen UNTIL Shining came, but its too late now. So i understand if it bugs you.
Hope that helps!
3215679 It feels like this Batman is an amateur. The real Terry or Bruce would have gotten out of every situation without a scratch.
3219650 Yeah, I understand. I agree with that cuz it's the goddamn Batman.
PLEASE hurry up with the next chapter, I just GOTTA see how Terry gets out of this. And what about Rainbow Dash, what happened to her?