CAPTER 2: I'M A PONY?!?!
RAINBOW DASH'S (MY) HOUSE
CLOUDSDALE, EQUESTRIA
SATURDAY, SEPTEMBER 23, 1995
8:37 AM MST (Manehattan standard time)
WTF!!
I look around and notice the fact that apparently the walls are made of clouds!
Looking down I notice that under my hooves are more clouds in the shape of a bed.
Hmmm....a house made of clouds, that's new...........Wait I have hooves now?!
Quickly looking at my self I appear to be a sky blue, rainbow maned, winged horse like creature. I notice a mirror on the wall of what I guess is my room. Looking into it I see (you probably know what I look like) that my eyes are cerise, ok thats new, and that my body is shaped like a very, very small horse with thicker legs. I also notice that my wings look too small to fly with.
Maybe I'm a young.....well, pegasus I guess. And my name is Rainbow Dash!.....Woah, where did that come from?
Suddenly, I notice that I have a few memories I didn't have before.
Ok, so I'm a, gulp, female pegasus named Rainbow Dash. I'm five years old. My birthday is tomorrow. My Dad is Rainbow Blitz, and my Mom is Rainbowshine. I was born and live in a cloud city called 'Cloudsdale' (WARNING BRAIN OVERLOADING). The country is called 'Equestria'. There are three pony species, Earth, Unicorn, and Pegasus. The capital is 'Canterlot'.....
This went on for ten or so minutes, until I had gone over pretty much everything a five year old filly from here should know.
Okayyyy then? This is one hell of a crazy and real feeling dream! At least it's not real! I couldn't deal with a sex change in reality! Hmmm...let's see if these wings work.
I flapped my wings as hard as I could and jumped. the only problem was I slowly fell back down instead of flying
FUCK! I guess I have to grow a little more.
I start to walk out the bedroom door, then I thought about how I was walking. 'THUMP!'
Ow, note to self, don't think about walking while doing so.
I head down the stairs towards the kitchen doing my best to not think about walking on four legs.
"Hello Dashie!"
"Hi Mom!"
"How did you sleep?"
"Ah, fine" I reply while taking a seat at the cloud table trying to act natural.
I don't feel like telling them that this is a dream. She sounds just like my human Mom......I feel like I'm not gonna see her for a very long time, WHAT AM I SAYING! Of course I'm gonna see her soon! This is a dream for fuck's sake!
"Whats for breakfast?" I ask eagerly.
"Pancakes."
Cool they have pancakes here to. Well, it is a dream, so this is my sub-conscience playing with me (as you can guess, no it isn't, I didn't know that).
"Yay!"
Hmmmm...My voice is higher. I wonder why I took so long to notice?
"Where's Daddy?"
"He left to go to work in the weather factory" she said putting some yummy looking pancakes in front of me.
"Oh" These look so good!
"Are you ready to go to your first day of kindergarden on Monday?"
What? Oh yeah I'm five. Heck! Kindergarden all over again! Easy! Fuck, it's school why am I exited?"
"Ya, I guess." I said, sounding like someone had just killed my cat as my dad would say.
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12 hours later
Well this has been an interesting. I wonder if when I go to sleep I'll wake up as my human self again.
Anyway, after breakfast I had gone for a walk with my Mom. We went and got some groceries. while we were walking up and down the aisles I saw some Wonderbolts toys.
Ohmygoshohmygoshohmygoshohmoygosh!!! Where are these mental outbursts coming from?
"Mom, can you get me some of those Wonderbolts toys?! Please?" I begged doing my best cute face.
"Ok, Dashie, but you have to promise me that you won't fuss about going to school on Monday."
"Ya, OK!"
After we finished shopping we went to the play ground. I noticed that there was one yellow furred, pink maned filly cowering in one corner of the area.
I trotted over and asked her what her name was.
"Flutter....." her voice at the end resulting in a unintelligible whisper (you know what I mean).
"Sorry, what was that?"
"Flutters..."
"Ummm.. Ok, I'm Coop..I mean Rainbow Dash! One day I'm gonna be the fastest flyer in Equestria!"
Where did that come from? Anyway.
"Flutter...shy was it?" she nodded.
No shit Surelock!
"Would you like to hangout some time?"
"Oh yes, I would love to!" she suddenly spouted "If it's ok with you. Sorry."
"I'm the one who asked, of course its Ok Flutters! How about right now?"
"Ummm..well, I kind of have to leave now, my Mom and I have to go and see the Teacher. It's my first day of Kindergarden on Monday." she said starting to leave.
"Wait. Which school are you going to?"
"Number 3. Why?"
"No way, me too! I guess I'll see you there!" I said excitedly.
Well, there's the first friend I've made in this dream world! My sub-conscience must have modelled her after Ben, then exaggerated his shyness. That guy is such a scaredy pants.
After that, me and Mom headed home.
"Hey, guys, look it's Fluttergay! HAHA!"
I quickly looked over towards the source and saw Hoops and Dumbbell harassing Fluttershy.
"LEAVE HER ALONE!!" I angrily stomped over towards them.
"Oh and what are you going to do about it, Rainbow Crash!" Teased Dumbbell.
OH YOU SON OF A BITCH!
"Oh, I don't know. How about I give you A FLANK KICKING YOU WON'T FORGET ANYTIME SOON!!"
"Oh is little Crashie mad?" he teased.
Fuck, not going how I wanted. I don't even know how to fight in this body!
"Now boys, you should be ashamed of yourselves!"
What? Who... oh I forgot Mom was even there.
"B-b-but"
"No buts. I am going to have a long talk to your parents about this!"
"Yes Ms. Shine." They replied weakly.
I walked over to Fluttershy.
"You OK?"
"I am now that you showed up." She replied meekly. "Thanks for getting rid of those bullies, they were really scaring me, if it wasn't a problem."
"No prob Flutters! See you at school on Monday!"
"Bye, Rainbow Dash."
As we walked away towards our house, my Mom had a little chat with me.
"Rainbow, I'm very proud of what you did back there, standing up for a pony you only met 10 minutes before. That was very loyal of you"
"Thanks Mom" I said beaming with pride.
When we got home, I immediately went upstairs to my room. On my way up I accidentally thought about walking again. 'THUNK!'
Ow
After picking myself up I walked (cantered?) into my room and pulled the Wonderbolts toys out of their packaging. I pretended to have them flying around my room doing stunts.
Geez, it feels good to let my 5 year old side out again! Ye know, if these dreams keep coming up I'll do my best to become a Wonderbolt! Since I'm gonna be a fighter pilot in real life I may as well become the closest thing here! *yawn* Oh I'm tired.
"Good night Rainbow." Mom said tucking me in.
"Night Mom."
*zzzzzzzzzzzzzz*
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*yawn* Agh...hmmmmm....am I still a pony?
I opened my eyes to check.
Cloud walls and bed.....yep. Still a pony.
>Anthro tag
lolwut.
2893560 dude you comment on every thing, oops just checked the tag your right
This story's problem is that there's nothing interesting about it. It's just a generic pony story. Where's the emotion? Where's the excitement? You take too long in the beginning going over unimportant and unnecessary details, and when we finally get to the good stuff, we get... that. What's really frustrating about this story is that there's nothing actually wrong with it. From a technical standpoint, the pacing (aside from that first part I mentioned), grammar, and spelling are pretty much impeccable. If there was something wrong with those, I could've helped you, but this lies in that zone of mediocrity where it's too good for me to give advice, but it's not good enough to be considered good.
I give this neither an upvote nor a downvote.
2893649 like I said I'm gonna fix it up later today. I know, its kinda shitty, that's what happens when I want to get some thing done and I rush. Now that I'm awake I'm gonna start working on it prettty soon so ya
OK gonna work on it more later dont have time right now.
Well.... THAT WAS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WAIT!! Does this mean your character is THE Rainbow Dash who is on the show?!
2896006 yup. i came up with this story in my head while daydreaming in various classes at school. Mainly because (I have no idea why) I kinda wish I WAS good ol' RD. I put it on here because If i told my friends they would think i am crazy.
There we go. Now that you've rewritten it, it's much better now.
2898234 Ya. like i said, I was rushing the first time
2896719
Yep. That's a bit like I did, before I got an account. I wrote it all in a journal before that. Then my friends got a hold of it. Turns out they're fine with it and one of them is a brony, or do I call her a pegasister? Anyway.... This is a good story so far. 5 derpys for you.
Yay, I've finished the third chapter and am editing. Will post tommarrow (I totaly spelt that wrong)
It's got, mmmm, potential.
He talked in the end like expecting it
Thanks for the mind fuck. If rainbow blitz is rainbow dashes father and also the male version of rainbow dash then that would be A paradox.Or would it be? How would that work? is rainbow dash a clone of her father? Is her DNA and his DNA exactly the same? Could her father use the element of harmony?
I bet now he is thinking well shit
His mom should be Firefly
3231718 Well in the gender switch Blitz's mom can be Rainbow Dash. Evens out in the end.
nice, not many fics have someone becoming one of the mane six at a young age.
i love fics like this short and funny just the way i like them
3231718
I'm just as confused as you!
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