This is asking ladies and gentlemen to come forth, but I feel compelled to read it anyways.

Futa?
That's my fetish.

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Ah, futa! How I love it.

This was good. I enjoy ponies having sex!

Hmmm, this will only be the second story that I've read that contains Rainbow Dash futa. I trust that it is going to be very good. I can't wait to read it.

this is amazing

Something new to read while out of town! Yay!

I can't wait to read it! I always love seeing Futa Dash.

Please continue ^^

2811607 Regidar, what isn't your fetish?

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Futa ALL of the ponies. c:

Aw yiss
Fucking futa Pinkie

2812577 Abortion.

This was awesome and I know this will get better.

All my yes! plz continue!

I'm kinda hoping some of Dash's other friends get in on this.

i tried to go through this based on the relatively interesting premise and attention it's getting, but the prose is kind of painfully awkward to read. there's a lot of bizarre phrasing and overuse of passive voice, and it makes the whole thing feel disjointed and detached. i'm also not sure where the perspective's supposed to be, which is fairly important for evoking a sense of interest in the characters you're describing.

might try to give it another go later on and provide some more detailed feedback.

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I know what to write my next story on~!

2812860 Don't expect me to read it too quickly

I say continue!

Writing's not bad, I love me some futaXfemale, and PinkieDash is one of my OTPs, so major points for all of that. Buuuut... I'm really not a fan of futaXfuta. Since the story obviously appears to be going in that direction, I'll probably end up saving the majority of this first chapter and be done with it.

2813603 You know what I say about your crankiness and Italian insult?

SHUDDAPA YOUR FACE!

This is medically impossible ... I must fix this with surgery.
Dr. House M.D.

Good....story....
Must make a Futa Dash in Corruption of Champions now

I WILL FIND YOU AND POOP IN YOUR MAILBOX IF YOU DO NOT CONTINUE THIS GLORIOUS STORY

2814066 Dude, your avatar fits perfectly with that comment!

great story something i think who make it better is have futadash inpregnant pinkie pie and they have a child

More futa. Now. Must have.

2811607 I AGREE WITH THIS SO HARD

2814824 how kinky of you

2814876 yes

Hmm, some of the diction was kinda odd.
Butt fuck it, there was a futa blowjob.
Onward, to more mares with dicks and really awkwardly confused Twilights!

1. All my yes
2. FutaxFuta
3. FutaTwi Chapter 2

Ahahah thats great please write more

Hermaponies? fuckit, lets just roll with it.

MOAR!! I DEMAND MOAR!!!

Derpy, you might want to wash your hair when you get home.

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No, please! CHapter 2 is coming!

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It might surprise you if you give it a try

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Thank you!

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Yes, she has to.

2811607 You again! I'm keeping a tally on how much I find you now.

"I want you to help me grow a dick."

Fantastic.

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Here's an insight to what you're getting into.

Continue? Yes Please! -Pushes start button-

2815860 how do you post 8/10th of a comme

dear god yes continue

2815912 It's an average, and your joke did not go unnoticed

Continue.

Aw man, this is great. So random. Fits Pinkie Pie.

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Yes, indeed-y

I can imagine the beginning of the next chapter with a description of this face . then this for a second . and then twilight fainting.

2815912 magic

“I want you to help me grow a dick.”

With that, all the blood fled from the purple unicorn’s face, her left eye weakly twitching in horror and disbelief. Now she was really worried for her fellow citizens and friends...

Pinkie, I think you broke Twilight.

I'll admit, I read this out of morbid curiosity... and I was not disappointed, but pleasantly surprised. Decent pacing, characters stayed relatively in character, pretty good punchlines to pretty good jokes, didn't take itself too seriously while still properly addressing the social ramifications of such an abnormality... I like. Though there were some mechanical and formatting issues. Still, actually found myself skimming the erotica in favor of the character bits, which in itself speaks volumes. Thumbs up; tracking this one.

You are a wonder to behold, sir. I implore you to keep writing the story. I want to see what happens next (as do the others who commented).