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Haunted Toaster
Bad author, but tries to improve himself T^T
Haunted Toaster
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Intresting so far, really needs an editor though...
6813125
Could you be more specific about the mistakes I do? I would like to know what I need to work on.
6813505 sentence structure is shaky, you're missing capitalizations everywhere, and the puncuation is often wrong.
6815867
I'm working on the first and the last one but... capitalizations? Really? I don't see any errors...
Sorry for bothering you, but English is my 2nd language and I want to know what I need to improve.
Wow. Did you just trash the entire story and restarted?
6819749
Yup, I wanted to do it for some time now.
The first chapters will be changed in some ways, there will be a lot more details and some events will be added, but old readers don't need to read them if they don't want to and can just start from chapter 4.
Is that a problem or something?
6813505 I'd be happy to send you a revised version of the chapter through Email, your mistakes mostly consist of wrong tenses and wrong word usages, also you tend to repeat a one word too many times in a short span of words.
Like I said, you give me your email and I'll send you the revised version.
You better update this fast, this is a good story.
6868742
Thank you. I will send it on your PM.