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So far it is very well written, I look forward to more.
Wow... Thatt was well made. You can feel the guards gratitude. You are a very good writer!
2970645 Thanks!
Great story!
I wonder if there's any mares among the Royal Guards. If they bravely excepted their fates or if they were screaming, crying and begging which the gryphons enjoyed seeing.
3881059 According to my head-canon, there are indeed mares among the royal guards. However, for this particular story I had to focus on only one. It just so happened to be a stallion.
You need a comma between 'door' and 'he'.
You might put a comma behind 'empire'.
Internal dialog goes,
Haha! Horse jokes.
You need a comma between 'reason' and 'he'.
4643525 What are you? The comma police?
Fun fact, so called "horse joke" was unintentional. Didn't notice it until you pointed it out.
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Should be,
Should be,
I demand a sequel of the guard's quest to return to his family!
This is decently written, and I really like it, but it feels short. That's my only criticism.
6957246 Thank you. Sorry about the length, but it was just a one-off idea way back when I wrote it.
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It's quite all right. I guess I was just expecting a little more detail in a few more areas like during the flashbacks. It all seemed to run together nicely but rapidly. Your writing is crystal-clear, though, so I can commend you for that.
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