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GRAMMAR?! WHERE HAS THOU GONE?!
2768259 TO THE MOON IT HAS GONE THOU WISHES TO RETRIEVE IT
A couple grammatical errors, but overall, I loved it.
The theme was perfect, pacing was nice and dialogue felt natural (minus Twilight cursing in her thoughts).
Looking forward to more ^_^
SHUT UP AND TAKE MY LIKE!
2770662 maybe you'd like to help with the next chapter. I'm terrible when it comes to Applejack and could use all of the help I can get.
*Saw an uncapitalized 'I'* OH FUCK!
2770927 sorry about that, I'll look it over and try to find it. thanks.
2771155
Hehe, it's alright. We all make mistakes. I purposely was trying to be over-dramatic. But yes, errors do frighten some readers.
Well my advice may differ depending on what your goal is if you are just going with just a bunch a short stories where the whole focus is clop then I think your doing fine you kinda jump a little fast in the story but that may be something that is intentional if you REALLY want me to look at it I could I'm just not sure what direction Your going is all
That was pretty good. Keep it going.
Any one want to guess who's next?
2958179 Rainbow Dash? It's a guess
I´m curious if Fluttershy will break out of her security prison in the cottage. If so then Love Maker might get into a little Problem. xD
3129299Oh trust me, I have plans involving those two!
3129299 im trying to make him finish the story and i know whats gonna happen
i help him with ideas.
Is this a rgre story
She makes me so proud
I cringed at the part where he cut his dick