1. Forever Yours
Under Our Wing
Chapter 1
Forever Yours
Rainbow Dash stood proudly next to Twilight Sparkle. They stood side by side facing Princess Celestia, both of them garbed in beautiful, matching white dresses. Rainbow stole a quick glance at the unicorn standing next to her. Her indigo bangs rested above her eyes, while the back was done up in an elegant bun behind her head. She smiled at the gorgeous mare, Twilight returning the smile.
Rainbow switched her attention back to her own mane, examining the tips of her rainbow bangs hanging out over her forehead and the flowing mane falling over her shoulders that was tied at the end. She was never one for looking pretty, but Twilight had insisted she at least brush her mane. Then Rarity had gotten involved. Rainbow shuddered as she remembered the dress maker’s nearly crazed look when she had informed her that she was planning on only brushing her mane. Two and a half hours later she had nearly been late, but her mane had never been so beautiful. For Twilight, she would wear her mane like that every day.
“Do you, Rainbow Dash, take Twilight Sparkle as your lawfully wedded wife?” Rainbow was snapped back to reality by Celestia’s all important words. She opened her jaw uselessly for a second; her words getting stuck in her throat as reality came crashing down on her. Here she was, zoning out in the middle of her own wedding! She closed her mouth, took a deep breath through her nose, and smiled.
“I do.”
“And do you, Twilight Sparkle, take Rainbow Dash as your lawfully wedded wife?” Celestia asked, switching her attention over to the unicorn standing beside Rainbow.
“I do,” Twilight replied, looking over and grinning at the mare she was marrying.
“Then I now pronounce you wife and wife. You may now kiss the bride.” Celestia cheered, smiling as a giggle rippled through the crowd at the odd but necessary rephrasing of traditional wedding vows. The giggles shifted to adoring ‘aww’s as Rainbow leaned in and kissed Twilight. The crowd erupted in cheers, stamping their hooves on the ground and yelling words of congratulations.
Twilight finally broke the passionate kiss and turned out to face the audience. She looked out over the relatively small group of close friends and family. Her four other friends and Spike were there, along with Rainbow’s family. There was also Shining Armour and Cadence, both of them stamping their hooves and grinning up at the newly weds. Twilight’s eyes scanned the crowed for a while longer until they fell upon two empty seats in the front row, the reserved tags still resting on the cushions. She strained her vision, trying to read the names of the ponies who had failed to show up, though she already had a pretty good idea.
She squinted, the names on the two cards becoming clear enough to read. “Twilight Velvet” to the left, directly next to the centre isle, and to its right was “Night Light”. Twilight felt a hint of moisture form in her eyes. Her own parents had failed to show up to her wedding. She felt the overwhelming desire to break down and sob right there on the wedding alter, but something stopped her. It was soft, yet she could feel strong, toned muscled beneath the downy feathers. Resting over her back was the cyan wing of rainbow Dash, the pegasus herself looking at Twilight with concern etched into her features.
Twilight rubbed her eyes with the back of her hoof before standing, Rainbow rising with her. Together they walked down the centre isle, Twilight’s eyes lingering on the two empty seats in the front row before she passed them by. They trotted out of the small Ponyville church, Rainbow’s wing never once losing its grip on Twilight’s shoulders. Once they were outside Rainbow slipped her wing off of her wife’s back and lowered herself to the ground, inviting Twilight to get on her back.
While traditionally they would have been taken away in a carriage, they had instead chosen to fly away from the church. Rainbow had said it would ‘look a lot cooler then some lousy carriage’, but Twilight knew that deep down Rainbow could be quite the romantic. She hopped up on her back, carefully avoiding the wings sticking out from two perfectly formed holes in the dress. With a powerful flap they were in the sky, heading towards the library to get ready for the reception.
As they flew Twilight allowed her thoughts to wander, taking her back through her memories of the past year. It was almost 14 months ago that they had gone on their first date. And 11 months since Twilight’s life had crumpled around her.
“Please tell me this is a joke?” Twilight’s father, Night Light, nearly begged. He stood next to his wife, Twilight Velvet, as they regarded their daughter with pleading looks.
“No, dad, I would never joke about something like this. Rainbow and I are together.” Twilight said, wrapping a hoof around her marefriend’s cyan neck.
“It’s just…” Twilight Velvet stumbled over her own words, giving Night Light the chance to speak for her.
“It’s unnatural.” He supplied, stamping his hoof firmly on the ground. Twilight Velvet nodded her head in agreement.
“What do you mean?” Twilight asked, confused and a little surprised at her parent’s reaction.
“He means it’s wrong. A mare cannot love another mare. Love is for a stallion and a mare only.” Twilight’s mother explained gently, trying to ease the blow as best she could.
“How do you know that? Why can’t a mare love another mare? I know I love Rainbow-”
“You do not love her.” Her father interrupted firmly, glaring at his daughter.
“You. This is your fault!” He accused, switching his glare to the rainbow maned mare.
“What did you do to my daughter? This never would have happened without you!” He struggled to keep his voice down, stepping up to get in Rainbow’s face.
“I didn’t do anything.” Rainbow muttered out through her clenched jaw. She felt her anger begin to heat up in her chest as the stallion got more in her face.
“You did something! My daughter would never be one of you unless she was forced!”
“I did nothing to force her hoof.” Rainbow repeated, grinding her teeth in an attempt to quell the rage growing in her gut.
“What did you do? Are you abusing her? Are you beating her?” His face was a crimson red as he yelled at the pegasus.
“I would never do that to Twilight!” Rainbow yelled defensively, her wings flaring open out of instinct.
“Is it blackmail then?”
“Dad! She didn’t do anything! This was my choice!” Twilight yelled, trying to prevent the fight she could see on the horizon. They both ignored her comment.
“I. Did. Nothing.” Rainbow repeated, keeping her voice low, but still firm.
“Don’t lie to me, you dirty fillyfooler, Twilight would never affiliate herself with the likes of you!”
That was the last straw. Rainbow pulled back her hoof, ready to punch him right in his beat red face, but stopped herself. What would Twilight think if she did that? No matter what he said, he was still her father. She never got a chance to find out, however, as a lavender hoof beat her to the chance, smacking him and snapping his head to the side. Twilight Velvet gasped in shock while Twilight stood above her father, seething with rage.
“Don’t you EVER call her that again!” She screamed as she glared down at her father, a red welt forming on his cheek.
“Get. Out.” He breathed quietly, turning his head back to face his daughter.
“Night Light-”Twilight Velvet tried, but was silenced by her husband.
“GET OUT OF MY HOUSE!” He shrieked, panting as his anger took control.
“You are not my daughter! You are nothing to me! You are nothing!” He screamed again. Twilight wilted under his stern glare. Her horn glowed her signature purple, enveloping her and Rainbow Dash in a magical aura.
“Goodbye, Night Light.” Twilight said sadly before casting her spell, the room filled with a bright flash and a pop. When the light dimmed down only Night Light and Twilight Velvet were left in the room.
Twilight was brought out of her memory when Rainbow landed on the ground. She slipped off her wife’s back, taking in her surroundings. Instead of back to the library, Rainbow had brought her to a hill overlooking a valley outside of Ponyville. In the valley below a stream could be seen, cutting through the rich green of the grass. She looked back to Rainbow in confusion as the pegasus walked to the edge of the hill and sat down facing the valley.
“Rainbow? Why are we out here? We have a reception to go to.”
“You were thinking about them again, weren’t you?” Rainbow asked quietly, looking out toward the valley before them.
“It’s been eleven months, Rainbow. I guess I never really expected them to show up, but it would have been nice.” Twilight walked over and sat next to the pegasus. She received a wing draped over her shoulder as she did.
“Yeah, it would.” Rainbow trailed off as she wrapped her wing a little tighter around Twilight, bringing her right up against her fur. A hoof joined her wing, and Twilight laid her head on Rainbow’s shoulder. For a time they sat in silence as the sun slowly got closer to the horizon. Suddenly, Rainbow felt Twilight’s body start to shake, and a sob echoed into the valley. The fading sound was joined by another, and then another as Twilight cried into Rainbow’s shoulder, wrapping her hooves up and around the pegasus’s neck.
Rainbow sat and held the unicorn as she cried. Whispering small words of comfort into her ear and rubbing her back in slow circular motions. She felt a wet spot form on her shoulder through her dress, but she didn’t care. Twilight was worth so much more then a single ruined dress.
Eventually, the sobs grew quieter and less frequent, slowly petering out to quiet sniffling. Twilight lifted her head and wiped her eyes with the back of her hoof. Her face was still stained with tears, but she looked happier then she had.
“You alright?” Rainbow asked as Twilight took a few deep breaths.
“I think so… now, at least. Thanks, Rainbow, I needed that.” She leaned in and gave the pegasus a quick kiss on the lips before she stood.
“So, reception?” She offered, Rainbow standing up as well. A shriek was torn from her lungs as Rainbow launched off the ground, spun 180 degrees above her, swooped down, and blasted off into the sky with Twilight in her forelegs. Twilight’s cries of terror shifted to laughing as Rainbow did a few loops in the air, barrel rolling and cork screwing towards Ponyville. Before either of them knew it Rainbow landed on the library’s balcony, both laughing as Rainbow set Twilight down and alighted next to her.
“My hair’s ruined, Rainbow!” Twilight jabbed playfully, still trying to suppress her giggles.
“So is mine, but cheering you up was worth it.” She grinned back at Twilight, motioning to the house.
“We don’t need to be too fancy for the reception, ya know.”
“I suppose.” Twilight relented, opening the balcony door with a flick of her horn, allowing bother herself and Rainbow into her bedroom. Twilight walked to her vanity, levitating a brush she began to brush her mane, hoping to at least get it to decent levels. She didn’t want to face Rarity without at least brushing it. Meanwhile, Rainbow had undertaken the surprisingly difficult task of getting out of her wedding dress.
“Hey, Twi a little help here?” Twilight turned her head to look at what was probably the most pathetic display she had ever seen. On the floor was Rainbow Dash, writhing around as she tried to reach the zipper on the back of the dress. How Rarity thought that was a good idea, they would never know. Her wings were fully extended as she stretched her neck around. She managed to get the zipper in her teeth, only for her to roll over onto her stomach, the zipper slipping out of her grip.
Twilight had to suppress a giggle as Rainbow tried to reach over her head with both hooves, getting up on two legs as she tried to stretch over her head. She grasped the zipper between her hooves, but lost her balance and stumbled back, falling to her flanks. Twilight couldn’t hold it in any longer as she burst out laughing, earning a scowl from the pegasus.
“Ha-ha, now are you gonna help me or not?”
Twilight held in a small chuckle as she made her way over the pegasus and helped her stand up. With a quick glow of magic the zipper was down, and Rainbow squirmed out of her dress. She took a deep breath and expelled it slowly.
“Feels so good to be out of that thing!” She sighed happily, stretching out her back and legs. Twilight giggled and turned her magic to her own dress, grabbing the zipper and pulling it down. She slipped out of her own dress, folding it neatly and resting it on her bed to be put away later, doing the same with Rainbow’s.
“Shall we?” Twilight asked, motioning towards the balcony. Rainbow nodded and made her way out the door with Twilight. She leaned down to the ground, once again allowing Twilight to clamber onto her back. Once she was secure she squeezed the pegasus around the neck, informing her she was ready to go. Rainbow launched off the wood floor into the golden light of sunset, within seconds they arrived at Sugarcube Corner, where the reception was being held.
They alighted down on the path in front of the pastry shop. Judging from the music poring out onto the street, Rainbow guessed the party has started without them. She felt Twilight slide off her back and walked up to the door. She reached a hoof up to open it, only for it to swing before she could touch it. Standing beyond the doorway stood Pinkie Pie with a deep scowl.
“You’re late.” She deadpanned, glaring at the newly wed couple.
“Uh, yeah, sorry ‘bout that Pinkie, we kinda-” Rainbow was cut off as a pink hoof grabbed both her and Twilight and pulled them inside.
“We’ll need to party extra hard to make up for the time you missed. You two still need to have your first dance, then you need to cut the cake, and then…” Pinkie rambled on about all the things they needed to do, everything they had to do as a newly wed couple. Rainbow managed to pull herself out of Pinkie’s grip, slipping out of her arm and causing Pinkie to stop and look at her.
“Sounds great, Pinkie, but I’d like to spend some time with Twi first, if you don’t mind.” Pinkie stood for a second before nodding in understanding.
“Alright, Dashie, just come find me when you want to start.” She chirped happily before bouncing through the crowd, disappearing somewhere in the bakery. Rainbow sighed and looked around her. The shop wasn’t as full as it had been at previous parties, but there was a fair amount of ponies crammed into the relatively small space. She spotted an unoccupied booth next to the window and motioned towards it, Twilight nodded, and together they made their way over to it.
Rainbow slid into the booth, Twilight sliding in next to her. She slid right up next to Rainbow, leaning against her side and resting her head on Rainbow’s shoulder, careful to avoid stabbing her with her horn. Rainbow wrapped a hoof around her and drew her closer, pressing their coats together.
“What’s up?” Rainbow asked casually, looking out over the crowd, either sitting and eating or dancing to the music playing through the building. It was loud enough to be heard clearly, though not so loud as to make conversation anywhere in the building difficult.
“Seriously? We just got married, and the best you can think of is ‘what’s up’?” Twilight asked through a snort of laughter, turning her head to face her wife.
“What would you prefer, ‘what is going on, oh gorgeous wife of mine’?”
“Yes.” Twilight poked Rainbow playfully in the ribs, earning a jab to her own chest.
“Too bad, because that’s the last time I’m saying anything so… corny.” Both of them shared a laugh for a few seconds, eventually dimming down to a comfortable silence.
“So really, what’s up?” Rainbow asked again, a little more seriously then before.
“Just thinking, Rainbow.” Twilight replied with an idle smile on her lips.
“’Bout what?”
“Honestly? Us. Everything we’ve done up to this point, even before we started dating.” She turned her head enough to steal a kiss from the pegasus next to her.
“Yeah, we’ve been through a lot, haven’t we? I mean, we’ve saved Equestria how many times?” Rainbow chuckled, looking off into the crowd.
“More times then I care to count.” Twilight agreed with a small laugh. For a while they sat in silence, looking out into the crowd. They shared the silence until a rather loud rumble emanated from Rainbow’s stomach, causing Twilight to giggle.
“I suppose it’s time to cut the cake?” Twilight offered, already sliding out of the booth.
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Twilight trotted happily into the library, a sleeping purple and green dragon resting on her back. Behind her stumbled a half-asleep Rainbow Dash, eyelids dropping and steps slow and sluggish. Twilight turned to her with a look of amusement before disappearing up the stair well. Rainbow took the opportunity to lay back on the couch, grateful to be off her aching hooves. She glanced over to the wall clock that ticked and tocked merrily through the silent tree. Judging from where the hands were located, Rainbow deduced it was a little past eleven at night. She grimaced; not only had she been denied the ability to sleep in, she had also been kept from her daily napping schedule. Both those factors combined led to a very tired and grumpy pegasus.
Twilight came back down the stairs, grinning as she descended without the small dragon on her back. She looked over at the pegasus desperately resisting sleep on her couch. From the looks of her half-closed eyes, it was a fight she was losing. As she cantered over Rainbow curled her legs in closer to her body, allowing Twilight a place to sit on the couch.
“You look tired.” Twilight half mocked, smiling as Rainbow grumbled sleepily at her.
“Where would you get that idea?” She mumbled sarcastically, shooting a playful glare to her wife.
“Hmm… I just don’t know.” She crossed her forelegs over Rainbow’s flank and rested her chin on them. Rainbow smiled down at the mare laying on her before speaking.
“How are you not tired?”
“You forget I’m normally up much later then this studying.” Twilight wormed a little further up the pegasus’s body, resting her head on the side of her stomach with her hooves draped over Rainbow’s chest.
“I suppose. Still, even you have to admit it’s been a tiring day.” Rainbow chuckled, reaching a hoof down to gently run over Twilight’s mane, smoothing it in the process. Twilight squeezed Rainbow’s chest and rubbed her cheek into her soft belly fur.
“It has.” She sighed, breathing in deeply, savouring the scent of her spouse. They lay together in silence for what felt like hours before Twilight moved again. Slowly, she crawled her way the rest of the way up Rainbow’s side, stopping when her head rested against Rainbow’s neck. Rainbow responded by unfurling a wing and wrapping it around Twilight in a makeshift blanket.
“I think today went perfectly.” Rainbow murmured, clearly fighting off the sleep her body and mind yearned for. Twilight responded by nuzzling her snout into Rainbow’s neck, sighing in contentment.
“I don’t think it could have gone any better.” Twilight affirmed, smiling into Rainbow’s fur. Once again silence fell over the room as the newly wed couple continued to embrace each other under the protective embrace of Rainbow’s feathered wing.
Eventually, she felt Twilight wiggle under her wing. Looking down, she saw the unicorn trying to drag herself higher, but missing the traction to do so against the fabric of the couch. Smiling, Rainbow closed her wing and pulled the unicorn up the rest of the way. As soon as their faces were level Rainbow pushed forward with her muzzle and connected their lips in a kiss.
Slowly, their kiss deepened, Twilight wrapping her hooves around Rainbow neck and the pegasus doing the same. Together they pushed deeper into the kiss, allowing their tongues to come together and entwine themselves in a slow, graceful dance. They held their passionate kiss for as long as their lungs would allow, eventually the need to breathe forced them apart. Together they separated, gazing lovingly into each others eyes as they panted lightly.
Once again Twilight leaned in to kiss her partner again, and once again she found herself pressing into Rainbow’s mouth, and the pegasus pressing back. Suddenly, Rainbow drew back with a sly smile on her lips. Twilight looked questioningly at the pegasus for a moment before she felt Rainbow roll off the couch. Twilight squeezed her eyes shut as she waited for her back to hit the ground, but the impact never came. Instead, when she opened her eyes, she found herself looking into two magenta orbs as Rainbow’s wings slowly lowered the two to the floor, with the pegasus on top this time.
Rainbow took advantage of her new position by pinning Twilight to the floor with her hooves and pressing their muzzles together. Eventually Rainbow pulled back enough for Twilight to roll the both over, forcing the pegasus to the floor.
“You don’t seem tired anymore.” Twilight whispered throatily into Rainbow’s ear before nipping the tip between her teeth. A shudder ran down Rainbow’s spine at the sensation.
“You have that effect on me.” Twilight giggled around the ear she still held between her teeth, making another shiver run down the cyan mare’s back. After a few more light nibbles Twilight released the ear and brought her head back down to be level with Rainbow’s. The pegasus reached a hoof to brush a stray strand of hair out of Twilight’s face. For another eternity they stared back into each other’s eyes, locking their eyes together for as long as they could.
Suddenly, Rainbow flexed her wings and pressed her hooves against Twilight’s shoulders, rolling back over on top. As she leaned back down to rejoin their lips in a kiss Twilight flared her magic, and Rainbow found herself falling up to the ceiling. The sudden reversal of gravity disoriented Rainbow long enough for Twilight to claim her prize as she pressed down onto Rainbow’s mouth.
When Twilight next drew back she was met with a playful scowl. “No fair.” Rainbow whined half heartedly, earning as giggle and a quick peck from the lavender mare above her.
“I thought you liked it when I used my magic?” Twilight asked, slipping a seductive tone into her voice that caused Rainbow to blush.
“Not when you… what did you do, exactly?” Rainbow looked around to confirm that she was, in fact, on the ceiling of the library as if it were the floor.
“Simple gravity reversal spell.” Twilight replied nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders.
“That’s awesome! What else can you do with it?” Rainbow asked enthusiastically, completely forgetting her minor annoyance with the unicorn’s trick.
“I’ll show you some other time, weren’t we in the middle of something?”
“Uh… right.” Rainbow grinned sheepishly, blushing a little. Twilight giggled and returned the gravity to normal, forcing Rainbow to start flapping her wings to keep them from slamming down on the floor. Rainbow angled her wings to carry them low enough to fit through the arch of the stair well, carrying them both up to the room they shared.
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Very intresting story, i'll be sure to follow , this is my fav parring and whats more Scootaloo is in it ,
Suddenly there are TwiDash+ScootAdopts everywhere!
I approve wholeheartedly.
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Apparently they have a wall cluck on the wall ticking and tocking merrily in the silent library.
I like the idea, Scootadoption but then I got to the section with Twilight's parents... Sorry but you've lost a reader on that.
Needs editing, yeah, but whatever. I say, what the buck? I think I'll give this story a chance.
Makes me wonder though- if I wasn't straight, how would my parents react? 
Damn. Twilight's parents are assholes. They could have been nicer about their disapproval, at least.
Just going to throw another "WTF is wrong with Twilight's parents in this story" onto the pile. I mean dang, that's just mind boggling. Even if you were homophobic and hated the idea of their relationship you're really going to insult them (including accusations of abuse) to the point where your own daughter is forced to hit you. Wow. And lets not forget just how impressive these two are: Heroes of Equestria (who have saved your lives multiple times), Personal friends with all three Alicorn Princesses (including your direct ruler who also happens to approve of their relationship), the most Powerful Unicorn/Pegasis in the entire world (her dad had to have lost his mind to get in rainbow's face like that), each destined for greatness (future wonderbolt and whatever Twilight would have done since they obviously didn't see becoming an Alicorn Princess in her future at this point), and you disown them... Oh right and also this is your loving daughter who until this moment you had nothing but love and pride for. All because Rainbow lacks a *ahem*. That's some shockingly bad homophobia right there. Not saying it's unrealistic or anything but...
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It's pretty common with some families. I knew a 'girl' who's father put her in the hospital because she said she didn't want to be a man anymore. The jerk didn't even get arrested for it...
Anyway, it's a pretty generic opening so far but well written so i'll follow to see where you take me.
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Which means squat. Yes I know that some families could do that, but not all. I see it as unnecessary drama that is contrary to the morals of the show.
I'm loving all of these Scootadoption stories with TwiDash. Keep up the great writing!
Great opening, I've enjoyed a couple of your previous stories.
Just notice a small error, you spelled "cluck" instead of "clock"
Other than that great job, looking forward to the rest of it.
Should be losing, apart from that and a missed capitalisation of Twilight in the paragraph after said misspelling, it was a nice opener to a Scootadoption fic.
I dunno what's up with all these Scoota-Twi-Dashie-ness, but I love it.
Great chapter, interesting story, faved and thumbed up.
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And I know a couple of transsexuals who weren't severely beaten when they "came out". Now I'm not saying everything was tea and roses, but frankly, it can't be an easy adjustment to have the person that you spent the last n years raising, suddenly come out and say that they're actually the opposite sex. Especially if the parents don't know anything about transsexuality, which is most likely true of most people. (To be perfectly clear, I'm saying that slow acceptance of the idea is acceptable, not hospitalizing your offspring).
All that said, who gives half a flying fuck what happens in the real world? Unless/until something is spoken about how homosexuality is viewed in Equestria in the actual show—which won't happen, because it's a show for kids—authors have complete latitude in how they portray the cultural attitudes in Equestria towards homosexuality. As such, having Twilight's parents being fairly extreme homophobes is dramamongering, pure and simple. It isn't quite enough to get me to drop the fic like it is for Celestias Paladin, but I'm not going to lie, it gives me severe misgivings.
I find myself commenting on a Scootadoption fic for the second time this week to point out something that is probably a minor item to most people who read such stories, but something that I can not help but see.
Unless I missed it somehow, you seem to have forgotten that before Twi and Dash got together there were already two principal characters sleeping in her bedroom at night, already two principal characters living in the library, and two principal characters whose lives would be deeply and utterly affected by Twilight being in a relationship.
Spike has lived with Twilight literally all of his life (according to herself in Dragonquest). When the time inevitably comes that she begins a relationship, it is going to have consequences for him. He'll go from being able to listen for her breathing if he has a nightmare to being banished to the basement so Dash can have some privacy as she boinks the closest thing he'll ever have to a mom.
I work with kids, and I know the effect that it has on children when their single mother, or their foster sponsor, becomes involved in a relationship. They might desperately want their parent/sponsor to be happy, like Spike certainly wants Twilight to be, but uncertainty about their new place "in the pecking order" reflects in their grades, sleeping, eating, and relationships.
You're hardly the only one to gloss over this aspect of Twilight becoming involved in a relationship, and I'll admit that I'm a little on-edge about it because I have a sneaking suspicion that the show is going to do the same when/if Twilight does get a love interest. Just, please, remember that Twilight already is raising a child, one that loves her very much.
Spike has nothing in the series except for Twilight, and now in this work he has less than half of that. When Scoots comes, he'll have a third of that. Leave him something, please.
just kill me pls ITS.TO.MUCH.
you just killed the story.
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I doubt that this fic is meant to be completely canon, I doubt that any fic is going to introduce love in the way that they do between to women and have it canon, mainly because it would cause an uproar from homophobes, and it isn't really worth it. I think that the view Twilight's parents have taken is not canon, then again, neither is TwiDash, but it could be realistic. Things like that do happen a lot, so it can't just be ignored.
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I can't deny that any of that wouldn't be true. I say toss Sweetie Belle at him, ever since I saw him and her dancing at the wedding I've thought they would make a good pairing.
I know it won't really fix things but it could help.
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Since the beginning of the story starts when Dash and Twi get married, don't ya think they would have already dealt with Spike and these kinda things? That's something you do when Dash moves in, not after their married. However, when it comes to the Scootadoption, Spike will not be forgotten, I can promise you that.
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Since I have gottan a lot of comments about this, I think I should probably deal with it. No hiding behind a computer screen for me, it seems.
Yes, the extreme homophobic parents are not exactly "cannon" but they have no personalities at all in the show. Their personalities are 100% head cannon, no matter what fic you read with them. Sure, we may have a generally accepted view of them, but altering that view for a single story should not take away from it, since you cannot claim they are OOC. Now then, as for the unnecessary drama, all I can say without spoilers is... the drama is not what's happened, it's what's going to happen. I have planned this fic extensively, there is nothing in these words that will be forgotten later in the story, meaning that pretty much everything mentioned will be coming back. From locations, to things ponies say, to things that happened in the past. And no, the drama does not come from the make up. What I can tell you, is things will get a lot worse for Twi's parents before they get better.
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Thank you all so much! Thank's to all of you and many more, this story has made it to the popular stories list! Might not be the featured list, but it's on the front page, and for not I'm happy with that.
well that was a very great chapter and as i do with all twi-dash-scootadopt story's faved and liked hope to see more in the future (chapters)
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It's not entirely true that Twilight's parents have no personality in the show and that everything is fandom/head cannon. We do see them a couple times (and know a bit about Twilight's childhood) so we can draw a few (very brief and minor to be sure) ideas about how they act.
That said I wasn't especially "against" them being opposed to her relationship with Dash as I was surprised at their reaction. People have brought up what happens in reality to explain it but frankly I don't think any of the kids mentioned here whose parents disowned/beat them were celebrated national heroes, with close ties to royalty/"gods", and reality breaking powers (which her parents have even been on the receiving end of... I doubt they had forgotten being turned into potted plants so quickly). Even if they hated the idea, blowing up in front of the couple seems unwise (as is accusing Dash of beating Twilight... Again, if Twilight wanted, Dash could be a fern in a jar, somehow I don't think abuse is the first thing that would come to mind).
Still this is entirely your story and you're more then welcome to do it however you want, I was simply posting my reaction to the events that happened, not asking for them to be changed or your position to be defended.
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In my own defense, I'm not interested in what is assumed. I read fan-fiction because it is speculative, and it's the job of the author to create the world that the reader will be immersed in. I know that Twilight leaves Spike out of a lot... but her wedding? I saw "her four other friends and Shining and Cadance". It put me in a position of thinking that you, like a lot of authors, were going to deal with Spike in romance fics by "not dealing with him".
The fandom generally treats Spike like a "living chastity belt", a character who must be disposed of before they can do anything with Twilight romantically. Since Spike is not mentioned anywhere in this story, even when Dash and Twi return to the home he shares with Twilight, I believe I can be forgiven for making that assumption.
Once again, this is something rampant in the fandom, and in fan-fiction in general, and I don't mean to single you out.
I am glad that he will be included farther along. Thank you for your understanding.
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He is mentioned, actually. When they get home directly after the reception I have Twilight taking him back to his room (he's sleeping on her back). However, did I seriously leave him out of the wedding?
I knew I was missing something. Half way through writing this fic I lost all my progress and I had to restart, and I knew I was forgetting someone when I re-wrote that scene, but I brushed it off. derp derp derp, I need to go add that, thanks.
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And I'm sorry that I missed that bit after the reception. Thanks for taking the time to reply.
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As much as I would agree, anger, combined with confusion, can cloud one's judgement far beyond the point of rational thought. Though it will come up later in the fic, with the way Twilight's parents were raised (at least to my mind) and the way they tried to raise Twi makes it nearly impossible for them to even consider something like a homosexual relationship, never mind accept it. The confusion of their daughter being gay, along with the anger from the way they were raised, would have pretty much blocked any really rational thought. At that point they would have desperately grasped at straws to think of any way possible for Twi to not be gay. And, one of the possibilities, would be that Rainbow is forcing her. In the mind set they would be in, they would not consider anything but "My daughter's not like this, she must be forcing her" no matter what Twi has done or is capable of.
Hope this makes a it a little more... believable until I go over this in the story.
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Yes, and I accept that. I never claimed that they were OOC. None of us did. I think that the reason that severe homophobia in MLP fanfiction is so off-putting to me is that I like to imagine Equestria as a better place than Earth, one where bigotry against sexuality is non-existent. While it is your prerogative as an author to make decisions on characters, it is my prerogative as a reader to complain about those decisions, and if necessary, quit reading.
I did assume that the homophobia would factor into the plot somehow, and I am glad to see that the plot isn't the overused "reconciliation with parents".
(Nitpicking side note: the word is canon, not cannon.)
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You seem to be analyzing the situation as if their reactions would be reasoned. They wouldn't be. Unless they had no emotional connection with their daughter (which we can assume in this case to be untrue), this would be an emotional reaction.
If they thought it through, would it make sense that RD could be forcing Twi into this relationship through physical coercion? No. But they just want to come up with some excuse as to why their baby girl isn't one of them.
Did they forget that Twilight is able to turn them into potted plants? Not exactly, but this is a question of power dynamics. Unless Twilight went around threatening her parents with potted-planthood whenever she didn't get her way, the power dynamic is still solidly weighted towards the parents. Until a child rebels and stands their ground, most parents feel that they have all the power. This makes sense since when we are children, they do have ultimate power over us, and for the most part, people continue letting their parents exercise that power over them. Usually it takes something really egregious to break/reverse that power dynamic.
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And that "out of their mind" reaction is exactly what I was talking about in my original post. Apparently their homophobia is so deep/strong ("their daughter couldn't be one of them" as you put it) that they are going to ignore not only their love/pride for their daughter but also a metric ton of common sense reasons (and potentially their well being both current and future) in their rage and denial. If it was simply confusion or distaste it's entirely reasonable that they could restrain themselves enough to at least think of what a massive mistake doing what they did would be. Thus my original comment about how my mind was boggled/shocked at their homophobia.
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Yes, these are people that actively hate homosexuality. If they just disagreed with it on an intellectual level, or slightly disliked it, they could probably take it on an intellectual level. However as they hate it, the "metric ton of common sense reasons" have absolutely no bearing on the situation. Whenever they think about homosexuality, their thoughts are consumed with hate and loathing.
I guess I just have less faith in humanity (or whatever the pony version of the word is) than you do, because I can believe quite easily that there are people that are that bad. Here is an example of shitty people:
(Important part starts at 2:52.)
Admittedly, the whole homophobia thing in general seems to be standing on shaking legs when the wedding between two mares is being officiated by the head of state and de-facto goddess of Equestria.
Pretty hard to beat an endorsement But then again, people are that stupid about this sort of stuff in real life, so why not ponies.
I really like this chapter. Twilight's parents (well, mostly her father) are so terribly homophobic. But my question is, where are Cadence and Shining in all this? Cadence, as princess of Love should not care. But Shining is the one I have my doubts about...
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As mentioned at the wedding, he is in attendance. Since he's technically the Prince of the Crystal Empire he's probably not going to be living with his parents. That being said, we will be seeing his involvement/position very soon.
An interesting idea. The narration didn't tickle my fancy, but it flows correctly and is to the point. I must say I'd be interested in seeing how Spike reacts to Rainbow Dash loving and moving in with Twilight, as mentioned by a few reviewers. That was never touched on in the few TwiDash stories I read.
I'm more interested in 'Scootadopt' than in the homophobia, so I'm looking forward to the next chapters.
I found two little lines that showed Rainbow's devotion for Twilight well, though I feel one can be bettered;
'For Twilight, she would wear her mane like that every day'
and
'Twilight was worth more then a single ruined dress,' where I'd have put 'so much' before 'more.'
Twilight calling her father by his own name was a nice touch. And must I conclude that Sugarcube Corner isn't 'as full as it had been at previous parties' because of other homophobes refusing to attent the party?
You have an issue with said tags; lines should read as '"I speak," he said,' not '"I speak." He said.'
You also refer to Rainbow Dash being 'cyan' far too much. 'Cyan wing,' cyan neck,' 'cyan fur...' 'Cyan' adds absolutely nothing to the story; we know the color of Rainbow's coat. If anything, it detracts from the story.
Oh, and eyes are not orbs. Not when you refer to pupils and irises.
There are two sentences I feel could be better;
'Her own parents had failed to show up to her wedding,' where I believe a 'had refused to show up' or a simple, non-foreshadowing 'hadn't shown up' would fit better. 'Failed' can be understood to imply they actually tried to be at the wedding.
'She received a cyan wing draped over her shoulder as she did' would flow better as 'A wing draped over her shoulder as she did.'
Also, always start a new paragraph when the point of view shifts to another person.
'“Don’t lie to me, you dirty fillyfooler, Twilight would never affiliate herself with the likes of you!” That was the last straw'
should be
'“Don’t lie to me, you dirty fillyfooler, Twilight would never affiliate herself with the likes of you!”
That was the last straw'
and
'“Ha-ha, now are you gonna help me or not?” Twilight held in a small chuckle'
should be
'“Ha-ha, now are you gonna help me or not?”
Twilight held in a small chuckle.'
I found several typos;
'She smiled and (at) the gorgeous mare, Twilight returning the smile,'
'“I do(.)”'
'“I do(,)” Twilight replied,'
'While traditionally... ...but they had instead' where either 'while' or 'but' is unnecessary,
'She hop(p)ed up on her back,'
'as a lavender hoof beat hers (her) to the chance,'
'and sat (d)own facing the valley,'
'Before either of them (k)new it,'
'She glanced over to the wall cluck (clock) that ticked and tocked,'
'it was a fight she was loosing (losing),'
'Once again twilight (Twilight) leaned in'
and
'Rainbow grinned sheepishly(,) blushing a little.'
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Wow, someone who actually took the time to review. I don't get a lot of that.
As to the actual review, thank you very much, I'll get onto those edits when I have some free time, and I'll see what I can do about the next few chapters in regards to my other mistakes. Thanks for taking the time to review, and I hope you enjoy the story.
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You're welcome.
Something I forgot to specify; while I'm interested in Spike dealing with TwiDash, I never meant that it should be included in this story if you don't wish so. I was merely stating how curious I was about a subject mentioned in the comments.
I should keep reading this story, but I can't guarantee I'll review as soon as it's updated. It might take a few days, or one week, or two weeks...
It's good and I hope you finish some day
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If my plan holds out, some day may come sooner then you think. If I can get what I want to done, this will continue in less then a month.
3206521 I am somewhat impatient but I gurss I can wait for this...
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Have faith, good sir! I may not have a lot of time on my hands but my readers are almost always my #1 priority. This has been getting a few more favorites recently, boosting it much closer to the top of my list. As soon as I have time away from anything else (AKA this weekend) I hope to begin the re-re-re-re-re-re-re-I've lost track of how many times I've rewritten this chapter-re-re-re-re-write, one that I will hopefully be happy with enough to post it for your viewing pleasure.
3289235 Ok, anyways I was just wondering as I like both TwiDash & Scootadoption stories, they are both my favorite type of story, so when I found this I was happy. Anyways, keep up the excellent work.
TwiDash Scootadoption? Has been on my 'Read Later' list I don't know how long? I'm bored and want something touching to read?
Why did I wait so long? Oh yeah, the on hiatus tag.
Change that soon, please?
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Like previous comments, and even blogs have stated, I hope to return to this within a week. No idea when the next chapter will be up, but it shouldn't be long now.
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Well, I haven't seen the previous comments or blogs, as this is the first thing of yours to come under my radar. However, eager to see what comes next. I'll be patient.
TwiDash with Scootadoption, how has this NOT been updated for such a long time
'allowing bother herself'
This might be the best correction I could ever hope for. Both/her, bother! Hehehe.
Oh my gosh the giggles. Lovin the story!
Looks like Twilight's parents could use a good beating themselves. With a telephone pole.
Personally I would go with a flaming telephone pole or tree but I did just publish my first book yesterday.
Just got back to this. I'l be re-reading the story before I get to the latest chapter.
warning warning cuteness overload warning warning
Religiously, I do no agree with homosexuals but those are purely my own personal beliefs applied in my own life. Socially, I have many friends who are themselves homosexual and I am okay with them. It's called tolerance and coexistence.
That's why I really am not liking Twilight's parents right now. It's not like Twilight's changed into some vile creature or anything. She's still the same mare! And so is Dash! When you think about it, their rela to on ship is not much different from heterosexual relationships.
She's still your daughter, Night Light, you idiot!