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The idea for this story is rather interesting. Maybe make her "recovery" slow so that each character tries to interact with the witch. Her sobbing is a big part of the character so include lots of scenes with that. Hope to see more of your story soon.
A lot of grammar issues....in the description no less. Sets of warning alarms that does.
The premise has my attention, though.
grammar issues and typos. i would advise getting a pre-reader to help you with those.
also try a bit more spacing between paragraphs, it'll make it easier to read.
Don't forget she would most likely suffer from severe delusions of insanity and most likely never be a truly normal person. I'd say she should have like schizophrenia when she's cured, voices of her witch side, always prompting her to kill.
Just some ideas.
so the princesses know whats happening in that world and there trying to help by making a cure to release in the zombie world to end the zombie threat?
I buy it.
Oh now this premise I can get behind... please don't fuck it up.
Idea is great, grammar needs work. Recovery should be slow, as Ketvirtas said. What Ufiix suggested would be great, as well. Take your time, don't rush. This is a really good idea.
Take time on this but please don't take weeks to do it.
I'm interested to see where this goes, heck, just the premise will have me watching this. I do hope you take a little more time with your grammar as others have said, maybe go to the beta forums and ask around? Good luck.
I like the look of this even though there are a lot a grammar issues, I'll track
Good idea, terrible grammar/spelling. How did this make it into the top 3 popular stories? Ah well, I'll follow, see where this goes. Please clean up spelling and grammar. And do not disappoint.
Thanks for the advice, I'll have the next chapter by tomorow.
Also, good point about the recovery, I have an idea about that so I'll add it to the next chapter.