I'm trying to write a sad song about someone being manipulated and indoctrinated and how damaging that can be if used for the wrong reasons and circumstances.
Does anyone know of a song or two about being manipulated in a sad and/or horrific way? Can anyone teach me how to write a song about that?
7633857 I wrote a song about a being of darkness trying to bend a filly to his will. Yet this creature of darkness then realizes that even greater darkness is on the rise that might not threaten just him, but the world itself.
That's something an evil god would say, as in, "In the future, I will control everything."
But in your case, it seems to be coming from a pathetic creature, so it makes no sense.
So just for tonight, let the music follow.
There's no purpose stated here. Are they being bored? Are they singing their own funeral song? You don't explain why should the music take priority.
A new dawn to rise. This melody will keep us going through the day.
If the dawn will rise, it means it's nighttime now. But then you mention the day. It makes no sense.
Also, before you introduced music as something passive that you 'let'. But here, you describe it as an active component of making it through the day. It feels like you're all over the place.
My advice: Keep it simple. Don't overcomplicate things.
Loose the chains holding me I have the freedom to fly Still I find myself Bound tightly to the ground To the wall, to my will To the lies I despise Stuck in the trenches at the war zone of my mind
I preserve sanity Made of fragile glass Search my way through the maze How long will I last? Made my plans for tomorrow Still I'm stuck in yesterday This is the second chance I'm given
Obsession To leave the past behind Make a sacrifice For a new dawn to rise Break the barriers To finally realize what you can become
Remember times when breathing was easy Now it's like the whole world is holding me back Let me through Time for you to get out of my way In the mindless wars left unsolved
A demonic insanity turns reality into a haze Feed the madness of this world It is not just a phase In this progression of obsession And the need for oppression Are you ready to make a change? Make the change!
Obsession To leave the past behind Make a sacrifice For a new dawn to rise Break the barriers To finally realize what you can become
Don't deny my rights And claim what is mine I will draw the line It's not my demise I will make my way So don't you dare to wear me down
Obsession To leave the past behind Make a sacrifice For a new dawn to rise Break the barriers To finally realize what you can become
Don't deny my rights And claim what is mine I will draw the line It's not my demise I will make my way So don't you dare to wear me down
Obsession Just leave the past behind Make a sacrifice For a new brighter light Break the barriers To finally realize what you have become
This is one I think is what you're probably looking for, lyrically it's very accurate. From the perspective of someone being manipulated and them breaking free from it.
This one is more akin to how damaging it is from being manipulated. Lyrics really nail it down how one would feel.
Lastly probably the most unique one, as it is written in a way that anyone can interrupt it to their own situation/problem. It gives you the courage to stand.
In terms of helping with song writing, I'm not sure I could help you there but I'm hoping this helps.
I'm trying to write a sad song about someone being manipulated and indoctrinated and how damaging that can be if used for the wrong reasons and circumstances.
Does anyone know of a song or two about being manipulated in a sad and/or horrific way? Can anyone teach me how to write a song about that?
7633857 I wrote a song about a being of darkness trying to bend a filly to his will. Yet this creature of darkness then realizes that even greater darkness is on the rise that might not threaten just him, but the world itself.
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Thanks. Also, can you help me find a song and can I PM you a song of my own for you to see?
7633874 Sure thing.
7633875
Thanks. It's a song that has some of these lyrics:
I'll be tomorrow. So just for tonight, let the music follow. A new dawn to rise. This melody will keep us going through the day.
7633877 I don't like it and here's why:
That's something an evil god would say, as in, "In the future, I will control everything."
But in your case, it seems to be coming from a pathetic creature, so it makes no sense.
There's no purpose stated here. Are they being bored? Are they singing their own funeral song? You don't explain why should the music take priority.
If the dawn will rise, it means it's nighttime now. But then you mention the day. It makes no sense.
Also, before you introduced music as something passive that you 'let'. But here, you describe it as an active component of making it through the day. It feels like you're all over the place.
My advice: Keep it simple. Don't overcomplicate things.
7633883
That wasn't my song. It was the lyrics to a song that I'm looking for. My song is at the PM I sent.
7633884 I didn't find what you quoted, but I did find this:
7633857
I've got a few here for you:
This is one I think is what you're probably looking for, lyrically it's very accurate. From the perspective of someone being manipulated and them breaking free from it.
This one is more akin to how damaging it is from being manipulated. Lyrics really nail it down how one would feel.
Lastly probably the most unique one, as it is written in a way that anyone can interrupt it to their own situation/problem. It gives you the courage to stand.
In terms of helping with song writing, I'm not sure I could help you there but I'm hoping this helps.
I wouldn't be much help there, sorry
7633956
Thanks. It's okay.