I somewhat think I'm doing all right, but I need feed back, bros.
Here's a list of things I think I'm doing wrong: 1. Headshot is Mary sue 2. Format 3. This is turning into less of a crossover and more into ponies trying to save the world 4. Not enough characterization 5. Lack of screen time for a psychopathic fire wielding Unicorn 6. Grammar
768679 to point out where he is doing it wrong i think hes just speculating like i have trouble pointing out where my mistakes are but i know they are there
768685 ah ok didnt get the joke this may seem like a stupid question but what does OP stand for? I mean the only definition I know for it is Over Powered or some shit like that and also yeah sounds good I'm pretty new to writing so i need all the help i can get luckily i got an editor working on my grammar but i still need help developing plot and such so i'll take a look at your stuff and see if i can give any insightful input
768738 I guess we just read each other stories and provide some pointers or suggestions I'll keep in mind the points you have raised and specifically look for ways to improve them
An Angel and her Soldier
I somewhat think I'm doing all right, but I need feed back, bros.
Here's a list of things I think I'm doing wrong:
1. Headshot is Mary sue
2. Format
3. This is turning into less of a crossover and more into ponies trying to save the world
4. Not enough characterization
5. Lack of screen time for a psychopathic fire wielding Unicorn
6. Grammar
768672
Question: If you know what you're doing wrong than what do you need us for?
768679
to point out where he is doing it wrong i think hes just speculating like i have trouble pointing out where my mistakes are but i know they are there
768684
I was kidding I have the same exact problem as OP, maybe we can all help each other out?
768672
I Propose a I scratch your back you scratch mine deal
768685 ah ok didnt get the joke
this may seem like a stupid question but what does OP stand for?
I mean the only definition I know for it is Over Powered or some shit like that
and also yeah sounds good I'm pretty new to writing so i need all the help i can get luckily i got an editor working on my grammar but i still need help developing plot and such so i'll take a look at your stuff and see if i can give any insightful input
768692
OP=Original Poster
768706
ooooooohhhh ok thats good to know thanks
768691 How do you propose we help each other?
768738
I guess we just read each other stories and provide some pointers or suggestions
I'll keep in mind the points you have raised and specifically look for ways to improve them
I just posted my story on Fimfiction, I would be glad to read both of yours and provide input if you do likewise B-).
768782 I agree, let us do that, my good sir and/or madam. I'm going to read it, but my god, 13k words.... This might take a while