I'm looking for a bit of feedback on this little labor of love of mine. I want to improve my writing and haven't really had many comments to work off of. It's still fairly early into the story at the moment (17/140 chapters at time of posting), and I would like to know what I can improve on as I progress.
Hello everypony!
I'm looking for a bit of feedback on this little labor of love of mine. I want to improve my writing and haven't really had many comments to work off of. It's still fairly early into the story at the moment (17/140 chapters at time of posting), and I would like to know what I can improve on as I progress.
Any (constructive) feedback is welcome!
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