The war with the Changelings isn't going well, but behind the lines engineers vie to produce a tank that might turn the tables - An Equestria at War short
Summary: Tanks and soldiers… and a lot of alternate-universe history.
Review: This was like a docmuation story. It has its perks I do like that kind of stuff. For an Alternate Universe, I would have to say yes because of world-building aspects and I do love world-building aspects. This fiction was meant for me. I saw a little bit of improvement from the last fiction I read from this person.
There was a lot of good stuff in this that I think people would love it. I hope this fiction receives more attention. However, there are still a few things I saw so… I would have to say this is at least 6/10 for me. I like but there was some stuff that needs improvement.
pop out your characters a bit more.... (hard to do if you haven't write a lot... however, popping out characters make them feel more alive) which you already done that i think with your next fiction you wrote after this one i think... (reform) I haven't read it yet but... I'm still impressed though.
- MLP: FiM
- EaW
- Drama
- Slice of Life
The war with the Changelings isn't going well, but behind the lines engineers vie to produce a tank that might turn the tables - An Equestria at War shortReview: Teething Troubles
Tags: Drama, Slice of Life, Alternate Universe
Summary: Tanks and soldiers… and a lot of alternate-universe history.
Review: This was like a docmuation story. It has its perks I do like that kind of stuff. For an Alternate Universe, I would have to say yes because of world-building aspects and I do love world-building aspects. This fiction was meant for me. I saw a little bit of improvement from the last fiction I read from this person.
There was a lot of good stuff in this that I think people would love it. I hope this fiction receives more attention. However, there are still a few things I saw so… I would have to say this is at least 6/10 for me. I like but there was some stuff that needs improvement.
Again, thanks for the review! I do have a question though:
I'm not sure what this means, any specifics? I can't improve if I don't know what's wrong with the story.
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pop out your characters a bit more.... (hard to do if you haven't write a lot... however, popping out characters make them feel more alive) which you already done that i think with your next fiction you wrote after this one i think... (reform) I haven't read it yet but... I'm still impressed though.
Thanks!