EAirplanes In The Night Sky

• MLP: FiM
• Romance
• Drama
• Sad

In the time of the future where the sky is bleak and black at night...... the only shooting stars we may see are air planes.

• Twilight
• Spike (EqG)

The REAL Seth Standmore · 1.4k words  ·  17  16 · 887 views

Review: Airplanes in the Night Sky.

Summary: Death of main cast besides Princess Twilight Sparkle.

Review: This fiction needs a lot of help.  Here is why.   The title gives it away.  Capitalizing “in”  and “the” is not professional.

In the summary you also spelled Heavesward wrong.

Ok let’s get to the fiction at hoof.

Do not put an author's note in the middle of your fiction. It's highly bad, like really bad.  ( I highly recommend you also don’t put the author's note at the top as well if you manage to do that. Always put the author's note at the bottom of the fiction or in the summary.) and then you put some again near the end. Do not do that.

Sighs the death of 5 members.  If this was an alternate universe I could be happy about it.  However, how they died was not memorable.  You clearly need to work on more details on how they died instead of telling us how.  Show us don’t tell.

It all happened in one day… Well that’s unrealistic unless a bomb went off.

Also tag failure why is EQG spike?? Nothing makes sense.

3/10 this is clearly a 3/10.  Grammar is clearly awful but it can be read but to me it was awful.